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Viewing comments for Chapter 31 "April Rain, May Bloom"na-po-wri-mo contest
8 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the April rain that comes just in time for the flowers to bloom in May. The season of Spring always bring excitement and hope for something better.
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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A very well-written poem about the April rain that comes just in time for the flowers to bloom in May. The season of Spring always bring excitement and hope for something better.
Comment Written 01-May-2020
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Dear Sandra, thank you for your compliment and review. Dove
Comment from Teri7
Donna, This is a very well written poem you have penned about the April showers bringing May flowers. You used very good descriptive words and beautiful imagery from the one red rose. Thank you for sharing and for the smile! love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2020
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Donna, This is a very well written poem you have penned about the April showers bringing May flowers. You used very good descriptive words and beautiful imagery from the one red rose. Thank you for sharing and for the smile! love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 30-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2020
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Dear Teri, thank you for your compliments and review. Bless you Donna
Comment from Sugarray77
I really like the depth you use to describe the change from April to May.... especially.. knocking on my pane.. adds sound to the writing. Lovely rhymes are well chosen.
Melissa
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2020
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I really like the depth you use to describe the change from April to May.... especially.. knocking on my pane.. adds sound to the writing. Lovely rhymes are well chosen.
Melissa
Comment Written 30-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2020
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Dear Melissa, Thank you for your compliments and review. Dove
Comment from Kermit R. Mullins
Thanks so much for this poem. I read it with ease. The mood put's me in a moment right before excitement. The end of March seems to be a pleasant place for me. Have you got another pictorial piece as this coming soon...I hope?
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2020
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Thanks so much for this poem. I read it with ease. The mood put's me in a moment right before excitement. The end of March seems to be a pleasant place for me. Have you got another pictorial piece as this coming soon...I hope?
Comment Written 30-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2020
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Dear Kermit, thank you for your review. I'll try to have another one coming soon! Dove
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You brought the showers and the dew drenched flowers here Donna as spring brings the blossoming flowers into view, fine words to celebrate here, much enjoyed . . . love Dolly x
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2020
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You brought the showers and the dew drenched flowers here Donna as spring brings the blossoming flowers into view, fine words to celebrate here, much enjoyed . . . love Dolly x
Comment Written 30-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2020
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Dear Dolly, thanks for enjoying my poem and for your review. Donna x
Comment from rodea
It is a beautiful poem with vivid imagery. Your words are very clear yet so descriptive. Good luck with the contest and Stay positive during these Rainy April days.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2020
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It is a beautiful poem with vivid imagery. Your words are very clear yet so descriptive. Good luck with the contest and Stay positive during these Rainy April days.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2020
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Dear rodea, Thank you for your compliments and review. Dove
Comment from robyn corum
Good morning, my friend!
What a beautiful poem to discover so early in the morning~ a pleasant surprise!
I am so proud that you have been able to challenge yourself to this month of poems and that you have MET your challenge! Congrats!
I am gonna share something weird with you, if I may?
This poem is rather awesome and the wording is very cool - I wonder if you might consider taking off the last part and replacing it with something else - a bit different?
Here's why. There is almost always a contest going on for 5/7/5 poems - and I read a million of them each day, it seems. *smile* Some are worth the read (if you'll permit me to be so rude) and some are... less than. If you know what I mean? Like folks are only aiming at the word/syllable count without care for a message or meaning beyond the words.
I wonder, though, if you've noticed that the last lines of your poem would actually make a 5/7/5:
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April rain, May bloom
Knocking on my pane; gorgeous sights seen from my room
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Edited to:
April rain, May bloom (5)
Knocking on my pane; gorgeous (7)
sights seen from my room (5)
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It's just a thought. Who knows what those judges are ever looking for, anyway? BUT this would create a very thoughtful poem with beautiful images we can all relate to. Yes?
Just a weird thought. (I have lots of them. *smile*)
Please understand that I DO like your poem as it is, too. Thanks and good luck - in the monthly challenge for sure and maybe...?
hahaha Have a marvy day!
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2020
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Good morning, my friend!
What a beautiful poem to discover so early in the morning~ a pleasant surprise!
I am so proud that you have been able to challenge yourself to this month of poems and that you have MET your challenge! Congrats!
I am gonna share something weird with you, if I may?
This poem is rather awesome and the wording is very cool - I wonder if you might consider taking off the last part and replacing it with something else - a bit different?
Here's why. There is almost always a contest going on for 5/7/5 poems - and I read a million of them each day, it seems. *smile* Some are worth the read (if you'll permit me to be so rude) and some are... less than. If you know what I mean? Like folks are only aiming at the word/syllable count without care for a message or meaning beyond the words.
I wonder, though, if you've noticed that the last lines of your poem would actually make a 5/7/5:
***
April rain, May bloom
Knocking on my pane; gorgeous sights seen from my room
***
Edited to:
April rain, May bloom (5)
Knocking on my pane; gorgeous (7)
sights seen from my room (5)
***
It's just a thought. Who knows what those judges are ever looking for, anyway? BUT this would create a very thoughtful poem with beautiful images we can all relate to. Yes?
Just a weird thought. (I have lots of them. *smile*)
Please understand that I DO like your poem as it is, too. Thanks and good luck - in the monthly challenge for sure and maybe...?
hahaha Have a marvy day!
Comment Written 30-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2020
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Dear robyn, I like the way you cut up my last verse into a 5-7-5. However, I think I'll keep it the way it is. I'm glad you still like it the way it is.April showers galore here in Massachusetts! I'm looking forward to the May flowers! Thanks for your review and good luck wishes for the monthly challenge! Donna
Comment from January L'Angelle
Great inspiration "April showers bring May flowers." I always liked that saying. Your poem was refreshing and flowed nicely. I enjoyed the rhymes, they worked well. Great job. Respectfully, -January L.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2020
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Great inspiration "April showers bring May flowers." I always liked that saying. Your poem was refreshing and flowed nicely. I enjoyed the rhymes, they worked well. Great job. Respectfully, -January L.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2020
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Dear January, Thank you for your compliments and review. Dove