Poetic Treasures & Dreams
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Temptation At Midnight"na-po-wri-mo contest
7 total reviews
Comment from Drew Delaney
A well written Minute Poem. I just didn't get what the temptation was really. Was it getting up to eat? The present was really nice and also the poem. Just clarify!
Drew
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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A well written Minute Poem. I just didn't get what the temptation was really. Was it getting up to eat? The present was really nice and also the poem. Just clarify!
Drew
Comment Written 17-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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Thank you for your compliments and review. I thought I'd leave it up to the reader about what he/she was being tempted by or with.
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Good one. Quite the presentation. It isn't easy battling with Satan. You have to be strong-willed. You know it doesn't always work. Never give up. Keep on fighting.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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Good one. Quite the presentation. It isn't easy battling with Satan. You have to be strong-willed. You know it doesn't always work. Never give up. Keep on fighting.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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Thank you for your compliments and review.
Comment from victor 66
At my age, to be tempted again would be a gift. In reality, I believe we make our own choices and we can't blame anybody but ourselves. Blaming a fictional entity is a feeble excuse. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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At my age, to be tempted again would be a gift. In reality, I believe we make our own choices and we can't blame anybody but ourselves. Blaming a fictional entity is a feeble excuse. Best wishes.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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Dear victor 66, Thank you for your review.
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Dove Marie, you are most welcome.
Comment from Marilyn Lou Berry
Oh, how delightfully daring is this poetic experience. Deeply affecting, the words and the picture painted! Powerful phrases are throughout.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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Oh, how delightfully daring is this poetic experience. Deeply affecting, the words and the picture painted! Powerful phrases are throughout.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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Dear Marilyn Lou, Thank you for your compliments and review.
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
The Lord and His word by His Spirit is the only way to get free of the devices of the devil. I love the message conveyed in this and enjoyed reading this inspirational and well written work. Well done!
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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The Lord and His word by His Spirit is the only way to get free of the devices of the devil. I love the message conveyed in this and enjoyed reading this inspirational and well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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Dear Jeffrey, Thank you for your compliments and review.
Comment from Anya Trofimova
This is a very interesting poem and the language you use is rich with description. Well done! I would just consider adding in some punctuation, but otherwise your work is very engaging. Best of luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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This is a very interesting poem and the language you use is rich with description. Well done! I would just consider adding in some punctuation, but otherwise your work is very engaging. Best of luck in the contest!
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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Thank you for your review and compliments.
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Your welcome, I look forward to reading more of your writing! If you have a minute you can check our my latest entries Mother's Daughter and In the face of angels. Both need a couple of tweaks here and there...
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You're very welcome! I look forward to reading more of your work soon. If you would like, please have a look at my latest poems Mother's Daughter, In the face of angels and my short short story Lanugo. All still need a few tweaks here and there... In the face of angels is currently up for voting under the Love Poems listing, so fingers crossed.
Comment from The_Boy_Whodunnit
This is very descriptive and uses the words well to create a detailed poem. It's interesting that it never says what the temptation is. I think the second verse is particularly good.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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This is very descriptive and uses the words well to create a detailed poem. It's interesting that it never says what the temptation is. I think the second verse is particularly good.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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Thank you for your review and compliments.