The Two of Me
Viewing comments for Chapter 49 "Life In Fifteen Syllables "Chochee Medina Life and Times
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Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is a mixture of very rich, epressive nouns, and a reiteration of the title. For the first of these I think I would have tried to take the alliteration to the maximum, I feel that would have been stronger (but I'm biased on that point). For the second, I feel on surer ground: you have reduced your poem to half the allowed length unnecessarily. I feel sure you could restructure it to better use.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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This is a mixture of very rich, epressive nouns, and a reiteration of the title. For the first of these I think I would have tried to take the alliteration to the maximum, I feel that would have been stronger (but I'm biased on that point). For the second, I feel on surer ground: you have reduced your poem to half the allowed length unnecessarily. I feel sure you could restructure it to better use.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Thank you for the review and positive encouragement.
Comment from Aaqib Naeem
So it is indeed! That is the true essence of life I suppose which you managed to tell us all in such few words! We are all the products of the challenges we have faced and the struggles we have seen through life! In a sense, they make us who we are!
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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So it is indeed! That is the true essence of life I suppose which you managed to tell us all in such few words! We are all the products of the challenges we have faced and the struggles we have seen through life! In a sense, they make us who we are!
Comment Written 09-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Thank you for the review and compliments. Blessings!