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Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "A Happenstance Conclusion"A series of like minded poems
55 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Jesse,
This is a well rhymed poem which could by about a person who is questioning gender orientation and wondering if people will accepting him/her if they come out. But it shows that any kind of love builds self esteem and maybe saying we should be as accepting as children.
I like the metaphor of looking at your self on a slide under a microscope for self examination.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2021
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Jesse,
This is a well rhymed poem which could by about a person who is questioning gender orientation and wondering if people will accepting him/her if they come out. But it shows that any kind of love builds self esteem and maybe saying we should be as accepting as children.
I like the metaphor of looking at your self on a slide under a microscope for self examination.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 06-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2021
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Thank you so much, Joan, for choosing this poem out of my portfolio...it is my favorite poem, and I am proud of it.
You are right on the money when it comes to questioning genders. I think we need to be as accepting as children and sometimes more so. I am glad you like the metaphor of the slide of self under the microscope. Thank you for choosing your favorite lines out of this piece. I appreciate your kind comments very much. You have put much thought into this review, and I am thankful.
As always, I will keep writing and stay as healthy as I can.
Have a wonderful day, my friend,
Jesse
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You are very welcome on all accounts, Jesse. Have a great day, too.
Joan
Comment from royowen
I think the best way to make people insecure and walking on marshland where nothing solid is certain such as gender fluidity, one plays with what was once assumed solid, that's why faith can be an illusive butterfly, but biblically it is a solid premise, conquering the shifting nature of man's fluttering nature. Beautifully written Jesse, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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I think the best way to make people insecure and walking on marshland where nothing solid is certain such as gender fluidity, one plays with what was once assumed solid, that's why faith can be an illusive butterfly, but biblically it is a solid premise, conquering the shifting nature of man's fluttering nature. Beautifully written Jesse, blessings Roy
Comment Written 17-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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Thanks, Roy, for taking the time and effort to read and review my poem. Your interesting commentary is duly noted. I appreciate your kind word and your excellent rating.
Have a wonderful Sunday.
Jesse
Comment from rspoet
Hello Jesse,
An excellent rhymed poem that reads like free verse.
You have your own unique style of writing, which is a good thing.
Whether things happen by chance or not is an interesting proposition.
But connectivity and fusion are central to my perception of the existence.
"It echoes with conclusion
that love lifts my self-esteem."
Well said.
Best wishes to you, my friend.
Robert
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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Hello Jesse,
An excellent rhymed poem that reads like free verse.
You have your own unique style of writing, which is a good thing.
Whether things happen by chance or not is an interesting proposition.
But connectivity and fusion are central to my perception of the existence.
"It echoes with conclusion
that love lifts my self-esteem."
Well said.
Best wishes to you, my friend.
Robert
Comment Written 17-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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Hello Robert.
I am honored by your extra star and your awesome and insightful review. You take this to a new higher level than other reviewers, and I so appreciate that. Thank you for choosing your favorite part, and by the way, it is nearly everybody's favorite part of this poem.
Have a great Sunday, my friend.
Jesse
Comment from Sanku
The convoluted confession of a happenstance delusion seems brilliantly colourful. In the semiconscious sphere you hear childrens songs that lifts your self esteem .
i loved this poem ,though I am not sure I fully understood it.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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The convoluted confession of a happenstance delusion seems brilliantly colourful. In the semiconscious sphere you hear childrens songs that lifts your self esteem .
i loved this poem ,though I am not sure I fully understood it.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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Thank you, Sanku. Whether you fully understand it or not, you loved it, and I love the sixth-star review you have given me. You have made my day! Thanks so much for lifting my spirits, on this day!
Best wishes and hope you enjoy, a great rest of your weekend!
Jesse
Comment from jake cosmos aller
Very well done. A cosmic poem so to speak. Since my pen name is Cosmos and that is my middle name, this gets a cosmos stamp of approval.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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Very well done. A cosmic poem so to speak. Since my pen name is Cosmos and that is my middle name, this gets a cosmos stamp of approval.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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A "cosmos stamp of approval." Hey, Jake, I like that very much! Thank you for your kind words, and I like being affiliated with the cosmos.
Have a glorious Sunday!
Jesse
Comment from Bluesatinbutterfly
I enjoyed this poem very much. What a lovely word happenstance is too. We all need " echoes with conclusion that love lifts my self-esteem." in our lives.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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I enjoyed this poem very much. What a lovely word happenstance is too. We all need " echoes with conclusion that love lifts my self-esteem." in our lives.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Thank you for this lovely review. Yes, we all need love and the kind that helps to raise our self-esteem.
Have a wonderful weekend,
Jesse
Comment from Raul1
I have enjoyed reading your poem. It's beautifully written. I see no mistakes. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing! Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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I have enjoyed reading your poem. It's beautifully written. I see no mistakes. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing! Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Thank you, Raul, for taking the time and effort to read and review this post. I appreciate your kind words and am glad you enjoyed reading this.
Best wishes to you too!
Jesse
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You're welcome and thank you!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed reading and reviewing your poem. You gave readers much to ponder. Your lines read well with many good examples, the rhymes work well, and your message is clear. I agree with you about love. With love that's sincerely given to another, it can, and does, raise one's self-esteem.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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I enjoyed reading and reviewing your poem. You gave readers much to ponder. Your lines read well with many good examples, the rhymes work well, and your message is clear. I agree with you about love. With love that's sincerely given to another, it can, and does, raise one's self-esteem.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Thank you, Jan, for this in-depth, detailed, and insightful review. As you said in your review, you also gave many examples of what you felt worked and what you liked best. This is an excellent review, and I thank you for taking the time and effort to write it.
Have a pleasant weekend,
Jesse
Comment from juliaSjames
An intriguing write. I heard ghostly echoes of TS Eliot in your style although your words and expressions are unique. From time to time we are all moved to explore within, to slip into that "semiconscious sphere" of which you write. The poet's domain.
Thanks for sharing your uplifting verse
Stay safe healthy and blessed
Julia
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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An intriguing write. I heard ghostly echoes of TS Eliot in your style although your words and expressions are unique. From time to time we are all moved to explore within, to slip into that "semiconscious sphere" of which you write. The poet's domain.
Thanks for sharing your uplifting verse
Stay safe healthy and blessed
Julia
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Wow. I am honored, Julia, by your mention of T.S. Eliot in the same vein as this poem. If we share the same style at all, I am thrilled by the comparison. Thank you so much for your kind and encouraging comments.
Have a wonderful evening and be well.
Jesse
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This is a lovely poem, with some really excellent thoughts in it, too. We do feel so much better when we manage to heal our mind, the body then follows suit and lifts us up to start anew. That's all we need to get us going again. I enjoyed reading this, Jesse, it's an excellent poem, my friend. :)) Warm hugs, Sandra xx
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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This is a lovely poem, with some really excellent thoughts in it, too. We do feel so much better when we manage to heal our mind, the body then follows suit and lifts us up to start anew. That's all we need to get us going again. I enjoyed reading this, Jesse, it's an excellent poem, my friend. :)) Warm hugs, Sandra xx
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Thank you for your kind review, Sandra, and I am glad you enjoyed reading this poem. Healing our mind, helps the body to heal, and sometimes, it works the other way around, as well.
Take care, and have a lovely evening.
Jesse