What Breaks My Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Not Lessened with Time"Poems and stories tellin' it like I see it.
5 total reviews
Comment from Xia Thornwood
The brevity of this poem really drives the point home. I like that you held yourself to a structure of your own making (4 lines, 5 syllables a line). However, the metaphors, though powerful, are a little cliche. That is really the single critique I can give, otherwise, nicely done!
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2020
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The brevity of this poem really drives the point home. I like that you held yourself to a structure of your own making (4 lines, 5 syllables a line). However, the metaphors, though powerful, are a little cliche. That is really the single critique I can give, otherwise, nicely done!
Comment Written 04-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2020
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You're right. Thank you for the review.
Comment from RodG
This poem will appeal to anyone who has lost a lover to death, divorce, or someone else. The Speaker's grief is emphasized by the use of hyperbole in lines 2 & 3. The last verse is unfortunately the truth. Rod
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2020
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This poem will appeal to anyone who has lost a lover to death, divorce, or someone else. The Speaker's grief is emphasized by the use of hyperbole in lines 2 & 3. The last verse is unfortunately the truth. Rod
Comment Written 02-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2020
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Thank you for reading. Greatly appreciate your review.
Comment from Carl DeVere
Soulfully expressed with an excellent supporting graphic. I suppose that things seem like they will be never lessened by time, especially before time actually passes. I have been to these depths of loss and know the feeling. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2020
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Soulfully expressed with an excellent supporting graphic. I suppose that things seem like they will be never lessened by time, especially before time actually passes. I have been to these depths of loss and know the feeling. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2020
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Thank you so much for your review. Greatly appreciated.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a sad write and grief can indeed control our hearts, a fine 20 syllable write for the contest, perfectly formed and I wish you luck, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2020
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This is a sad write and grief can indeed control our hearts, a fine 20 syllable write for the contest, perfectly formed and I wish you luck, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2020
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Thank you ever so much for your kind review and good luck wish. Greatly appreciated.
Comment from May 1
That's such a sad poem but wonderfully written. To me, it feels like such a challenge to express so much emotion in such a short poem but you did it wonderfully. All in all, it was a pleasure reading this poem.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2020
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That's such a sad poem but wonderfully written. To me, it feels like such a challenge to express so much emotion in such a short poem but you did it wonderfully. All in all, it was a pleasure reading this poem.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2020
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So greatly appreciate your review. Thanks so much for reading.