Titillating
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Comment from rspoet
Hello JRL,
You've written an excellent Pleiades poem for the contest
with interesting choice and variety of "t" words.
You've described your tantalizing, dancing goddess very well
and match the art work to words nicely
Well done
Good luck in the contest
Robert
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2019
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Hello JRL,
You've written an excellent Pleiades poem for the contest
with interesting choice and variety of "t" words.
You've described your tantalizing, dancing goddess very well
and match the art work to words nicely
Well done
Good luck in the contest
Robert
Comment Written 31-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2019
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Robert, thank you very much!
Comment from Coco Jane
You handle the format well--and yet the repeated Ts are not a distraction.
I don't think you need the commas in line 3.
Maybe call her something other than "woman" in the last line. She is SO alluring, consider calling her a wonder or a deity or a beauty or a mystery or... Just a thought.
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2019
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You handle the format well--and yet the repeated Ts are not a distraction.
I don't think you need the commas in line 3.
Maybe call her something other than "woman" in the last line. She is SO alluring, consider calling her a wonder or a deity or a beauty or a mystery or... Just a thought.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2019
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Just a very good thought indeed, thank you!
Comment from Blue Hendrix
Great entry for the contest. Wonderful flow and the imagery was vivid. Word choices were also spot on. I really enjoyed reading this piece and I'm sure you will do great in the contest.
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2019
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Great entry for the contest. Wonderful flow and the imagery was vivid. Word choices were also spot on. I really enjoyed reading this piece and I'm sure you will do great in the contest.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2019
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Thanks for the good wishes!
Comment from MamaBebop
One of my favorite words, EVER- Titillating.
I had to read and review this poem.
Your Pleiades poem is very descriptive. Highly romantic and beautifully composed. You then went on to use another one of my favorite word to describe her as a tantalizing goddess.
Hope you really did ask her to dance. All the greats do.
Blessings and Happy New Year.
MB
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2019
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One of my favorite words, EVER- Titillating.
I had to read and review this poem.
Your Pleiades poem is very descriptive. Highly romantic and beautifully composed. You then went on to use another one of my favorite word to describe her as a tantalizing goddess.
Hope you really did ask her to dance. All the greats do.
Blessings and Happy New Year.
MB
Comment Written 31-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2019
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MB, yes of course and I wedded her 36 years ago, Luckiest man alive! :)
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Just the tantalizing, titillating, happy ending I was hoping for!!! ;) Beth
Comment from Bobby Jo
Dancing is such a beautiful form of expression. It can be engaging, sensual, sexual. This captured the moment. The T's in the beginning were moving. Great job.
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Dancing is such a beautiful form of expression. It can be engaging, sensual, sexual. This captured the moment. The T's in the beginning were moving. Great job.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2019
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Thank you Bobby Jo!
Comment from royowen
An excellent plieiades entry in this contest my friend, it's perfectly moulded to the form's dictates. I like the form's disciplined format, which really, says each sentience starts with that one common letter, making the form challenging, but you done well, good luck, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2019
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An excellent plieiades entry in this contest my friend, it's perfectly moulded to the form's dictates. I like the form's disciplined format, which really, says each sentience starts with that one common letter, making the form challenging, but you done well, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 30-Dec-2019
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Roy, I am so grateful. I enjoyed this tough style.
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Well done
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Ballet dancing is so graceful. The definitions of your words sure puts the ballet dancing to my ears...I can see a fairy goddess on her tippy toes, standing straight and tall, waiting for someone to join her on Broadway.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2019
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Ballet dancing is so graceful. The definitions of your words sure puts the ballet dancing to my ears...I can see a fairy goddess on her tippy toes, standing straight and tall, waiting for someone to join her on Broadway.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2019
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Yes, thank you!
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Yes, thank you!
Comment from dragonpoet
The ballerina is a perfect image for this poem. She is always a dream for both men and women. This poem shows the beginning of attraction that can lead to love.
Good luck in the prompt
Keep writing
Happy New Year
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2019
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The ballerina is a perfect image for this poem. She is always a dream for both men and women. This poem shows the beginning of attraction that can lead to love.
Good luck in the prompt
Keep writing
Happy New Year
dragonpoet
Comment Written 30-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2019
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Thank you for the time you spent review and comment on my poem.
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Don't mention it.
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Comment from Bill Schott
This Pleiades poem, Titillating, has the proper formatting and tells the tingling tale tirelessly of the titillating and tantalizing toe dancer.
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This Pleiades poem, Titillating, has the proper formatting and tells the tingling tale tirelessly of the titillating and tantalizing toe dancer.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2019
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Thank you for the time you spent review and comment on my poem.
Comment from Dancemom
This is a well written poem using the letter T about a man that is interested in a woman. You have described his fascination very well. Great job and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2019
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This is a well written poem using the letter T about a man that is interested in a woman. You have described his fascination very well. Great job and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2019
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Thank you for the time you spent review and comment on my poem.