Aaron's Dragons
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Goodbye Purple"An aging knight finds a clutch of dragon eggs
16 total reviews
Comment from WryWriter
Your little dragons come to life. You have excellent dialogue skill! I found the ending well-done and sad...such is real life as well. I loved the squabble where Black and Red nearly cooked each other--so funny a line. A most enjoyable reading experience!
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Once up in the branches, they were able to use their claws to hang on (( , )) and their wings to maintain balance.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2019
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Your little dragons come to life. You have excellent dialogue skill! I found the ending well-done and sad...such is real life as well. I loved the squabble where Black and Red nearly cooked each other--so funny a line. A most enjoyable reading experience!
Suggestion:
Once up in the branches, they were able to use their claws to hang on (( , )) and their wings to maintain balance.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2019
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Thanks. I'm glad you liked this chapter. I'll fix that comma right away.
Comment from Susan Larson
I'm new to fanstory and this is one of the first book chapters I've read. Even though I don't know the whole story, I feel like I caught on the the gist of your characters through your well written dialogue. My only note is that technically "dragons joined in happily" should be "happily joined in." Otherwise a delightful read .
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2019
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I'm new to fanstory and this is one of the first book chapters I've read. Even though I don't know the whole story, I feel like I caught on the the gist of your characters through your well written dialogue. My only note is that technically "dragons joined in happily" should be "happily joined in." Otherwise a delightful read .
Comment Written 27-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2019
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Thanks. I think after a couple more chapters I'll buy a book balloon so new readers can catch up. Hope you'll stick around and enjoy the story.
Comment from Ulla
Awe, so purple was ready to go out in the world, but it was not without some bittersweet feelings that they had to let go.I really like your writing, Cindy, and I'm looking forward to what's next. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2019
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Awe, so purple was ready to go out in the world, but it was not without some bittersweet feelings that they had to let go.I really like your writing, Cindy, and I'm looking forward to what's next. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 26-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2019
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Thanks. Purple is a cave dragon. She doesn't fly, so she really isn't safe anywhere else.
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
I know it was a sad day for all of them. To have to say goodbye to someone that you've known from a hatchling is quite sad I'm sure. It's good though that they're honing there skills and getting a sense of identity. I'm enjoying this saga and eagerly look forward to the next installment. Great job and well done!
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2019
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I know it was a sad day for all of them. To have to say goodbye to someone that you've known from a hatchling is quite sad I'm sure. It's good though that they're honing there skills and getting a sense of identity. I'm enjoying this saga and eagerly look forward to the next installment. Great job and well done!
Comment Written 25-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2019
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Thanks. I'm so glad you're staying tuned and enjoying the story.
Comment from Sallyo
Poor Purple! Aaron is managing this wonderfully well, though, and Purple will be visiting in the dreams. Sniffle.
No corrections... or maybe I was just too tied up in the story to see them!
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2019
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Poor Purple! Aaron is managing this wonderfully well, though, and Purple will be visiting in the dreams. Sniffle.
No corrections... or maybe I was just too tied up in the story to see them!
Comment Written 25-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2019
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Thanks for the six! This one was hard to write. Purple had to get out of harm's way. She'll be OK.
Comment from royowen
I enjoyed the episode of Aaron and his nurturing of the dragons to be able to care for themselves, I'm not sure how they were as they were, but I've always enjoyed mythical tales, and this was really absorbing, with lots of perceptive indicators to help with the storyline and characters, both are fascinating, well done Cindy, good taling. Blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
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I enjoyed the episode of Aaron and his nurturing of the dragons to be able to care for themselves, I'm not sure how they were as they were, but I've always enjoyed mythical tales, and this was really absorbing, with lots of perceptive indicators to help with the storyline and characters, both are fascinating, well done Cindy, good taling. Blessings, Roy
Comment Written 25-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
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Thanks. The dragons are growing up, and pretty soon Aaron will need them. I think after a few more chapters I'll do a book balloon so readers who have missed a few chapters can catch up.
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Well done Cindy,
Comment from Gert sherwood
Smiles Cindy
First thing I liked I didn't see any need for corrections.
I find it 'sad' that I believe you telling us readers Aron is no longer be in your well written story..
Gert
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
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Smiles Cindy
First thing I liked I didn't see any need for corrections.
I find it 'sad' that I believe you telling us readers Aron is no longer be in your well written story..
Gert
Comment Written 25-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
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Thanks. Aaron is still the main character in the story. The purple dragon won't be around so much, but she won't disappear.
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Thank you Cindy for letting me know that the purple dragon won't be around so much, but she won't disappear. Now are you refereeing to Aron?
Gert
Comment from tfawcus
The preparations continue. Aaron has to help the dragons develop their individual skills fast, before it's too late. There's a sense it won't be long before they need them. Once again, good development of the differences between the dragons and easy, natural dialogue.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
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The preparations continue. Aaron has to help the dragons develop their individual skills fast, before it's too late. There's a sense it won't be long before they need them. Once again, good development of the differences between the dragons and easy, natural dialogue.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
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Thanks. He's honing their skills for a reason, and even helping them develop some that may not come naturally. You're right, they're going to need them.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a good job, Cindy, with this emotional chapter. It is sad Purple had to leave, but I believe they will see her again. I like the idea of the woman teaching Pink how to become invisible. I believe that will be a good trick to know when danger approaches. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully with Love, Jan
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
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You did a good job, Cindy, with this emotional chapter. It is sad Purple had to leave, but I believe they will see her again. I like the idea of the woman teaching Pink how to become invisible. I believe that will be a good trick to know when danger approaches. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully with Love, Jan
Comment Written 25-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
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Thanks. Purple will be OK. The witch is teaching Pink and White what she can. Soon it will be up to them.
Comment from damommy
Why does Purple have to go? This so sad. I guess they can't all stay together with Aaron forever, but I never gave any thought they'd be leaving. Another excellent chapter with such vivid details, I can see it all happening before my eyes.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
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Why does Purple have to go? This so sad. I guess they can't all stay together with Aaron forever, but I never gave any thought they'd be leaving. Another excellent chapter with such vivid details, I can see it all happening before my eyes.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
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Thanks. Purple is a cave dragon. She doesn't fly. Aaron has a battle coming up, and he can't keep protecting her. Should the invaders light fires, she'd be helpless. Besides, she can't be walking around in the snow. By winter, she'd leave quite a trail. She'll be OK.
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Good to know. Thanks.