Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

Oh, my--a "bloodless"-curdling story! And ironic too, with the body being found in contrasting flower bushes that would normally convey beauty. Best wishes in the Horror Story contest- Joan

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2019

Hi Joan. It's suppose to be a vampire story, but 3 sentences... You're nice. Thank you. God bless you :)

Comment from Alex Rosel

Excellent

This is an entertaining "horror" read. If this was mine, maybe I'd look at this sentence again: "She hurried to take a better look." I think it needs a sense of direction. Does she hurry into the building? Is the noise coming from behind her, from a place outside the building? Or where? Just a thought...

Best of luck with this when the voting booth opens {smiles}.

 Comment Written 14-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 14-Oct-2019

Hi Alex. I thought the reader would gather it was outside from the first and last sentence hints. I'll think about it. Thank you :)

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Oh my goodness a murder story and who was to blame here? A chilling tale with a blood thirsty end, you managed to ruffle my feathers this morning with your words, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 14-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 14-Oct-2019

Hi Dolly! It's suppose to be a vampire tale. I thought "bloodless" would be the giveaway. Happy Halloween :)