haiku (speedy hummingbird)
haiku (sixteen syllables)31 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
I like the fast food metaphor. Bringing nature to human world. The hummingbird does dart quickly around. I like the matching of the background to the flower in the artwork.
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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I like the fast food metaphor. Bringing nature to human world. The hummingbird does dart quickly around. I like the matching of the background to the flower in the artwork.
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 10-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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Thank you for the lovely review. Val
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you're welcome, Val.
Joan
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you're welcome, Val.
Joan
Comment from papa55mike
We're starting to miss our hummingbirds already. Most of them have migrated south for the winter. I love this well-written poem and the picture is wonderful. Congrats on placing, I can't get a vote.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019
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We're starting to miss our hummingbirds already. Most of them have migrated south for the winter. I love this well-written poem and the picture is wonderful. Congrats on placing, I can't get a vote.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 09-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much for this lovely review, Mike.
Comment from gramalot8
This is a wonderful Haiku and us very well written . I love the picture you chose. You also paint a very good picture with your descriptive words! Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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This is a wonderful Haiku and us very well written . I love the picture you chose. You also paint a very good picture with your descriptive words! Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 08-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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Thank you for the lovely review. Also, haiku should never be in caps. But so few on this site, don't realize what a haiku should look like. None the less, thank you for your support. Val
Comment from Marilyn Lou Berry
Followed the rules, paints a lovely picture of a fast-moving creature. A new take on "fast food". Has a very nice flow also. Enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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Followed the rules, paints a lovely picture of a fast-moving creature. A new take on "fast food". Has a very nice flow also. Enjoyed it.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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WOW, thank you so much for this exceptional review. You have no idea how much this means to me, as this little haiku has been a real
"work in progress"
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So happy for you!!!
Comment from Joy Graham
Hello Val,
I enjoyed reading your haiku today :) I love hummingbirds. We used to see them on Vancouver Island, but not here in Calgary. I miss seeing them.
I love your description of what's happening in the picture. Great picture, by the way. For me, the aha moment was, "on the fly". I love a good aha moment, and you delivered. Delivered goes well with fast food on the fly lol! Now I'm amusing myself too much hahaha!
Best wishes in the contest. This entry should hold its own.
Joy xx
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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Hello Val,
I enjoyed reading your haiku today :) I love hummingbirds. We used to see them on Vancouver Island, but not here in Calgary. I miss seeing them.
I love your description of what's happening in the picture. Great picture, by the way. For me, the aha moment was, "on the fly". I love a good aha moment, and you delivered. Delivered goes well with fast food on the fly lol! Now I'm amusing myself too much hahaha!
Best wishes in the contest. This entry should hold its own.
Joy xx
Comment Written 08-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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Thank you, Joy, this such a fun review. I am so glad you liked it. Hummingbirds seem to come and go in San Diego, but I truly miss them when they are not here. I saw so many of them in Vail, Colorado, that it blew me away. I sometimes think - they go where the spirit needs them.
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Val!
Congratulations on placing in the haiku poetry contest! Perceptive and humorous visual imagery...and so true! We feed hummingbirds from feeders in our gardens here in northern Michigan, and it truly does appear as "fast food" for these precious hummingbirds...
Take Care!
diane
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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Hello Val!
Congratulations on placing in the haiku poetry contest! Perceptive and humorous visual imagery...and so true! We feed hummingbirds from feeders in our gardens here in northern Michigan, and it truly does appear as "fast food" for these precious hummingbirds...
Take Care!
diane
Comment Written 08-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much for this wonderful review. I am from originally from Michigan too.
Comment from royowen
I had to have a laugh at this very witty and very traditional haiku, the though of a humming bird having a fast food "take out" is a filip for the soul, well done, excellent job, blessings and good luck, Roy
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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I had to have a laugh at this very witty and very traditional haiku, the though of a humming bird having a fast food "take out" is a filip for the soul, well done, excellent job, blessings and good luck, Roy
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Thank you for this wonderful review
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Well done Val
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Yes, thank you Roy, but we'll see. The haiku got 25 reviews and is an excellent. But this this site, no longer appreciates "traditional haiku" None the less, thank you for your support.
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Very few know what a haiku is, well done Val
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written haiku and the amazing humming bird who are able to feed himself in midair hovering over their food source for a fast food take away.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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A very well-written haiku and the amazing humming bird who are able to feed himself in midair hovering over their food source for a fast food take away.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Thank you for the lovely review.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"haiku (speedy hummingbird)" is short, succinct and very much to the point. With a minimum of words, this talented poet tells it how it is. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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"haiku (speedy hummingbird)" is short, succinct and very much to the point. With a minimum of words, this talented poet tells it how it is. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much for your "spot on" review. It was much appreciated. Val
Val, you're more than welcome.
the Duchess :)))
Comment from Kathleen S.
Super cute poem and artwork. It reminds me of how delicate somethings in nature are and how quickly they go by. I love the play on words about fast food as well.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Super cute poem and artwork. It reminds me of how delicate somethings in nature are and how quickly they go by. I love the play on words about fast food as well.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Thank you for this fun review.
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You are most welcome.