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Missed Deadline Ghost Contest Offering (see author notes)29 total reviews
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
A great story of several military folks/personnel. This could be a book in the making. So enjoyed reading your story. What happens to Ms. Coleman in your story lines? Doe he give her a contract for a year?
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019
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A great story of several military folks/personnel. This could be a book in the making. So enjoyed reading your story. What happens to Ms. Coleman in your story lines? Doe he give her a contract for a year?
Comment Written 08-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019
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Oh, Rosemary, I'm so very glad you enjoyed the Major and company... and, beyond what you've read here, I hadn't thought further.... although when asked earlier by a number of folks about it, it would definitely be a yes... :):) Thanx for the review! ;) Yvette
Comment from Liz O'Neill
For some reason I very much life the feel of this sentence: "He let an easy smile draw across his lips as he looked at the expectant faces before him." This story has an easy-going pace, no one getting shot, no one lying, no one plotting against each other, no one cheating on the other, no violence. It is just a nice everyday interaction between friends and acquaintances. Even there is no drama it is just a nice story. I am voting for this one.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2019
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For some reason I very much life the feel of this sentence: "He let an easy smile draw across his lips as he looked at the expectant faces before him." This story has an easy-going pace, no one getting shot, no one lying, no one plotting against each other, no one cheating on the other, no violence. It is just a nice everyday interaction between friends and acquaintances. Even there is no drama it is just a nice story. I am voting for this one.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2019
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Oh, Liz, so glad you enjoyed this one....I was actually surprised when it made it into the booth, but pleasantly so!! ;) :) It was one of those that was fun to write as well, ya know? ;) Thanx for taking the time to read and review and have a wonderful weekend, ma'am! ;) Yvette
Comment from JudyE
What a shame this missed the contest. I really enjoyed reading it.
Just a couple of glitches:
It was good to meet you, Lieutenant," she spoke as she hurried away, - speech marks missing at beginning.
"For what?" She asked as Richard shut the door - lower case for 'she'
"I'm Richard Driscoll the owner of" - he paused, - comma after 'Driscoll'
Cheers
Judy
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2019
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What a shame this missed the contest. I really enjoyed reading it.
Just a couple of glitches:
It was good to meet you, Lieutenant," she spoke as she hurried away, - speech marks missing at beginning.
"For what?" She asked as Richard shut the door - lower case for 'she'
"I'm Richard Driscoll the owner of" - he paused, - comma after 'Driscoll'
Cheers
Judy
Comment Written 10-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2019
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Thanx so very much for the catches and the review, Judy -- always so very good to hear from you, ma'am!! ;) :) Hope all's well over/down there! ;) ;) Take care! Yvette
Comment from Cindy Warren
I did enjoy reading it. I guessed the Major was a ghost right away, but I didn't see that ending coming. I even thought for a moment Richard might be dead. Too bad you missed the contest. This would have been a contender.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2019
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I did enjoy reading it. I guessed the Major was a ghost right away, but I didn't see that ending coming. I even thought for a moment Richard might be dead. Too bad you missed the contest. This would have been a contender.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2019
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So glad I could get and keep your attention, Cindy -- good to hear from you! ;) :) The Major and his 'team' were a fun write so, I'm glad I was able to share them with a few folks! ;) :) Thanx for the review, ma'am, and have a wonderful weekend ahead! Yvette
Comment from Dawn Munro
I loved,loved, LOVED this! It has everything that could possibly fire up my romantic side, and it's flawless (as usual with your writing). What an awesome story. This should be the start of another novel!!! Rich characters, wonderful pacing, terrific descriptions...*sigh*... MORE!
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2019
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I loved,loved, LOVED this! It has everything that could possibly fire up my romantic side, and it's flawless (as usual with your writing). What an awesome story. This should be the start of another novel!!! Rich characters, wonderful pacing, terrific descriptions...*sigh*... MORE!
Comment Written 07-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2019
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What a lovely review, Lady Dawn!! :) I'm so very glad that you enjoyed the Major and his 'team' ... they were certainly fun to write! ;) :) I hope all's going well up there with your pursuits... so glad to hear that you were looking at putting that book together ... just be sure to let us know out here when it's all done!! ;) :) It is good to hear from you, though -- be sure to tell Miss Prissy hello and thanx for these lovely stars!! ;) :) Take care up there, O Lady of the North! ;) Yvette
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It was my pleasure-- a total delight!
Comment from Bill Schott
This ghost story leaves me wondering how many spirits we have. You make a very strong showing for civil war era 'team' and a modern era of future love interests. The cheeky dialogue and banter between the Major, Brighton, and Chastity endears them to the reader.
No one is ever scared and no one says boo.
As I write this I realize, of course, that Richard would likely have no infirmities if he were dead.
A neat story that drew me in and left me feeling good about this Topper-esque situation.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2019
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This ghost story leaves me wondering how many spirits we have. You make a very strong showing for civil war era 'team' and a modern era of future love interests. The cheeky dialogue and banter between the Major, Brighton, and Chastity endears them to the reader.
No one is ever scared and no one says boo.
As I write this I realize, of course, that Richard would likely have no infirmities if he were dead.
A neat story that drew me in and left me feeling good about this Topper-esque situation.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2019
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Oh, Bill you make me feel great, sir!! ;) Thank you so very much for your wonderful review and for those awesome stars -- they really are a bright spot this week!! ;) :) Take care out there and have a bright, shiny remainder of the week!! THANX AGAIN!! ;) Yvette
Comment from the13thpoet
Happy Tuesday to you. That was a good story you put together, I really enjoyed it. I'm not one for ghost stories and hauntings but the Home Team is welcome to come to my home anytime. Good job!
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2019
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Happy Tuesday to you. That was a good story you put together, I really enjoyed it. I'm not one for ghost stories and hauntings but the Home Team is welcome to come to my home anytime. Good job!
Comment Written 06-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2019
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Thanx much for your review today -- always good to hear from you! ;) Major and the 'team' welcome your stopping by anytime - take care! ;) :) Yvette
Comment from Diana L Crawford
Wonderful story! It took me a moment to realize who the cleaning crew was! Great set up with perfect ending! Sorry you missed entering this in the contest! It would have been a great entry! xoxo
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2019
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Wonderful story! It took me a moment to realize who the cleaning crew was! Great set up with perfect ending! Sorry you missed entering this in the contest! It would have been a great entry! xoxo
Comment Written 05-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2019
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Hooray! :) So glad you enjoyed this one -- Major and his 'team' were a really fun write!! ;) Thanx for taking the time to read this one, Diana, and you be sure to have a wonderful week ahead! ;) Yvette
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Very welcome and you also!
Comment from pome lover
Yvette,this is marvelous! You moved from mysterious to AHA! very cleverly, and of course, finished with the reader's smile at the suggested "real" ending to the story.
well done. I really enjoyed it.
Katharine - pome lover
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2019
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Yvette,this is marvelous! You moved from mysterious to AHA! very cleverly, and of course, finished with the reader's smile at the suggested "real" ending to the story.
well done. I really enjoyed it.
Katharine - pome lover
Comment Written 05-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2019
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Hooray!! I am so very glad that you enjoyed Major and the 'team', Katharine....you know, they really were so very fun to write! ;) :) Thanx for taking the time to read and you have a wonderful day there in the Lone Star State, my lady!! ;) :) Yvette
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if I don't fry on the sidewalk! supposed to be 100 for next few days. and it's HUMID! feels like breathing water.
Other than that, Mrs. Lincoln....
Comment from Debbie Pope
My favorite nephew has had one broken engagement and one marriage that ended in divorce after 10 months. Where is SHASTA? My nephew needs the help of the Civil Cleaners clan.
This is such a well written, creative piece. It's an uplifting ghost story. Sorry you missed the deadline. You would have won for sure.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2019
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My favorite nephew has had one broken engagement and one marriage that ended in divorce after 10 months. Where is SHASTA? My nephew needs the help of the Civil Cleaners clan.
This is such a well written, creative piece. It's an uplifting ghost story. Sorry you missed the deadline. You would have won for sure.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2019
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Oh, dear....I fear there may be some bad choices involved in that one... :/ :/ (kinda like a couple family members of mine...ugh). But, perhaps some old-fashioned dedication and living would do them some good, yeah? ;) :) Have no idea where Shasta is...and I know it doesn't help that it's all in the blonde's crazy brain! ;) LOL! I am so very glad that you enjoy Major and his 'team', MQ.... they were quite a fun write! ;) :) Thanx for those wonderful stars, ma'am -- and stay cool down there..... it's already hotter than usual here! :) Yvette