"Painted Visions"
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "With All My Love"A Collection of Heart Felt Poetry.
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Comment from Alex Rosel
A nice introduction.
I'm not sure that your preponderance to employ "..." fully works. Is this to signify that the narrator is using the gaps to engage in thought before continuing with the narrative? If so, I can see the effect you're aiming for. Either way, this is an interesting concept.
Thank you for posting this. I enjoyed reading it :)
reply by the author on 18-May-2019
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A nice introduction.
I'm not sure that your preponderance to employ "..." fully works. Is this to signify that the narrator is using the gaps to engage in thought before continuing with the narrative? If so, I can see the effect you're aiming for. Either way, this is an interesting concept.
Thank you for posting this. I enjoyed reading it :)
Comment Written 16-May-2019
reply by the author on 18-May-2019
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Thanks for your fine review Alex dr. Ricky 1024
Comment from Sandra Montanino
I know you are telling a powerful and very emotional story. I would suggest you remove all the quotation marks, it would be easier to read especially since it's not really a conversation. Good luck in your writing!!
reply by the author on 16-May-2019
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I know you are telling a powerful and very emotional story. I would suggest you remove all the quotation marks, it would be easier to read especially since it's not really a conversation. Good luck in your writing!!
Comment Written 16-May-2019
reply by the author on 16-May-2019
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Thanks again and good luck with your further writings too!
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