Word Woven Tapestries
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "I Kissed Him Good-bye"A collection of poems which tell a story.
4 total reviews
Comment from L. A. Stanley
Very sweet poem, with a sad but sweet ending. You paint a true picture of love as it is in the beginning, after it's been torn apart, and when it's ended. Good luck with the contest!
reply by the author on 03-May-2019
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Very sweet poem, with a sad but sweet ending. You paint a true picture of love as it is in the beginning, after it's been torn apart, and when it's ended. Good luck with the contest!
Comment Written 03-May-2019
reply by the author on 03-May-2019
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Thank you so much for the stars and comments! Both are greatly appreciated!
Comment from Michele Harber
You definitely held out for the right contest. This is an excellent story poem. You told a full story, from the relationship at its strongest to the dissolution to the short-lived (literally) reconciliation. The poem is heartfelt and moving, flows smoothly, and employs well-chosen rhymes. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-May-2019
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You definitely held out for the right contest. This is an excellent story poem. You told a full story, from the relationship at its strongest to the dissolution to the short-lived (literally) reconciliation. The poem is heartfelt and moving, flows smoothly, and employs well-chosen rhymes. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-May-2019
reply by the author on 03-May-2019
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I really do appreciate the stars and the comments!
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They're well-deserved.
Comment from RodG
This three stanza poem tells the story of a relationship over a period of time. I, of course, like the opening stanza where the Speaker SHOWS her passion for her husband as he leaves each day. We commiserate with her when he chooses to leave and again when she bids him adieu on his deathbed. Although I really like the story, I wish you had not used AABB rhyming which seems (to me) so unnatural for story-telling. Rod
reply by the author on 02-May-2019
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This three stanza poem tells the story of a relationship over a period of time. I, of course, like the opening stanza where the Speaker SHOWS her passion for her husband as he leaves each day. We commiserate with her when he chooses to leave and again when she bids him adieu on his deathbed. Although I really like the story, I wish you had not used AABB rhyming which seems (to me) so unnatural for story-telling. Rod
Comment Written 02-May-2019
reply by the author on 02-May-2019
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Thank you so very much for the stars and comments. I'll keep your advice in mind about the AABB writing sequence in writing story poems.
Comment from Sally Law
This was just so painfully sad. But at least he finally said he loved her. Why do people spend their whole lives not saying what they mean...what is in their heart? I don't understand this. Your poem was beautifully penned and poignant. I hope it was not your own story, but if it was, I hope you're healed and love is yours once again.
All my best to you and yours
Sally
reply by the author on 02-May-2019
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This was just so painfully sad. But at least he finally said he loved her. Why do people spend their whole lives not saying what they mean...what is in their heart? I don't understand this. Your poem was beautifully penned and poignant. I hope it was not your own story, but if it was, I hope you're healed and love is yours once again.
All my best to you and yours
Sally
Comment Written 02-May-2019
reply by the author on 02-May-2019
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I greatly appreciate the stars and the comments. Rest assured, the relationship only happened in my mind.