NaPoWriMo 2019
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "A Poem: Fishing"National Poetry Writing Month
6 total reviews
Comment from Treischel
I guess you're not wishing to be out fishing. You know what it's about, but it's not an action you'd tout. Definitely not a Sonnet, but nice try, ending in an ababcdcdee rhymed decatain. Need a bit of work on that iambic pentameter as well. Here's one tip. When ending a line with a feminine rhyme such as "FISHing," you need 11 syllables. Carry the hard accent on the even numbered syllables.
I DON"T know AnyTHING aBOUT (real) FISHing,
(I) SMELL the SKY'S scent, BREATHE, and HEAR the SWISHing.
Sometime you have to change the words in order to get the meter, Here O switched "LISTen FOR" to "and HEAR the"
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2019
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I guess you're not wishing to be out fishing. You know what it's about, but it's not an action you'd tout. Definitely not a Sonnet, but nice try, ending in an ababcdcdee rhymed decatain. Need a bit of work on that iambic pentameter as well. Here's one tip. When ending a line with a feminine rhyme such as "FISHing," you need 11 syllables. Carry the hard accent on the even numbered syllables.
I DON"T know AnyTHING aBOUT (real) FISHing,
(I) SMELL the SKY'S scent, BREATHE, and HEAR the SWISHing.
Sometime you have to change the words in order to get the meter, Here O switched "LISTen FOR" to "and HEAR the"
Comment Written 23-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2019
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Hi Tom! You're the best. Thank you. God bless you :)
Comment from lyenochka
Sounds like a lot of fun but it sounds also really time-consuming. I've heard that there are many fisherman poets.
One comment - perhaps you wanted this for the internal rhyme:
"And say a pray before I cast away" (prayer?)
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2019
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Sounds like a lot of fun but it sounds also really time-consuming. I've heard that there are many fisherman poets.
One comment - perhaps you wanted this for the internal rhyme:
"And say a pray before I cast away" (prayer?)
Comment Written 23-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2019
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Thank you :)
Comment from BeasPeas
I am laughing out loud at this one. I don't know anything about fishing either, but I always liked to go out in the boat with my dad. Those are great memories. Furthermore, I'm horribly allergic to scale fish/fin fish and can't eat them anyway. Good thing I'm vegetarian. I thought your poem was well written, light-hearted and fun. Marilyn
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2019
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I am laughing out loud at this one. I don't know anything about fishing either, but I always liked to go out in the boat with my dad. Those are great memories. Furthermore, I'm horribly allergic to scale fish/fin fish and can't eat them anyway. Good thing I'm vegetarian. I thought your poem was well written, light-hearted and fun. Marilyn
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2019
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Hi Marilyn! My dad's been vegetarian most of his life. I think he ate blue crabs, shrimps and codfish growing up. Maybe he caught them on the beach. My parents rather swim with the fish. So I'm not into the fishing scene just around it. Thank you. Hugs, Alicia :)
Comment from Joan E.
I am glad you persevered and completed your poem about fishing, regardless of your not knowing a great deal about the sport. I enjoyed your rhymes and salute to sustainability on Earth Day. I also learned about the types of "feisty fish" around South Florida from your notes. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2019
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I am glad you persevered and completed your poem about fishing, regardless of your not knowing a great deal about the sport. I enjoyed your rhymes and salute to sustainability on Earth Day. I also learned about the types of "feisty fish" around South Florida from your notes. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2019
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Hi Joan! You're nice. Thank you. Hugs, Alicia
Comment from Irish Rain
I love your fishing poem Miss Alicia.
I love going fishing for trout.
While the object is to catch a fish...
I like to just throw my line out and
daydream.
Wait for the bobber to go under.
It's very relaxing.
Hope you had a lovely Easter,
hope you have a great week!
Blessings...
reply by the author on 09-May-2019
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I love your fishing poem Miss Alicia.
I love going fishing for trout.
While the object is to catch a fish...
I like to just throw my line out and
daydream.
Wait for the bobber to go under.
It's very relaxing.
Hope you had a lovely Easter,
hope you have a great week!
Blessings...
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 09-May-2019
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Hi Judy. You're nice. Thank you. May the season being going great for you too. Hearts & hugs, Alicia :)
Comment from 24chas
This was a good read, Sunnilicious. I think you captured enough about fishing for a good piece. I'm not into fishing either but I can't think of anything else for you to consider other than seasickness if you were out on a boat. Good job.
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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This was a good read, Sunnilicious. I think you captured enough about fishing for a good piece. I'm not into fishing either but I can't think of anything else for you to consider other than seasickness if you were out on a boat. Good job.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Thank you :)