Where Jenny Lies
Ghost of a little girl57 total reviews
Comment from pome lover
hmmm
strange. If, she had been a part of a wagon train that was attacked, and survived ... but you're saying she didn't survive, so it was her soul? that visited you? This is quite an interesting and remarkable story. It certainly caught the fancy of the FS readers. Congratulations for All Time Best.
Katharine
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hmmm
strange. If, she had been a part of a wagon train that was attacked, and survived ... but you're saying she didn't survive, so it was her soul? that visited you? This is quite an interesting and remarkable story. It certainly caught the fancy of the FS readers. Congratulations for All Time Best.
Katharine
Comment Written 26-Jun-2023
Comment from Faith Williams
Your story in a poem has an eerie feeling to it. Great rhymes to tell Jenny's tragic tale. I particularly liked the last stanza. Thank you for sharing.
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Your story in a poem has an eerie feeling to it. Great rhymes to tell Jenny's tragic tale. I particularly liked the last stanza. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2023
Comment from harmony13
The author's are heartfelt, sad, descriptive and creative. The dream or the
ghost where Jenny came from is filled with so many questions for me.
The author expresses this experience with in great detail and for me was emotional. The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is perfect!
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The author's are heartfelt, sad, descriptive and creative. The dream or the
ghost where Jenny came from is filled with so many questions for me.
The author expresses this experience with in great detail and for me was emotional. The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is perfect!
Comment Written 26-Jun-2023
Comment from Earl Corp
Very nice job of combining a western and supernatural genre poem. This should have been a contest entry when you wrote it. Was this one of your first works here on Fanstory?
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Very nice job of combining a western and supernatural genre poem. This should have been a contest entry when you wrote it. Was this one of your first works here on Fanstory?
Comment Written 26-Jun-2023
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is a mysterious and haunting story told in a poem. Jenny could have very well been a real spirit who came to you as a receptive, caring person who would believe her and listen to her woes. Hopefully, Jenny is at peace.
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This is a mysterious and haunting story told in a poem. Jenny could have very well been a real spirit who came to you as a receptive, caring person who would believe her and listen to her woes. Hopefully, Jenny is at peace.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2023
Comment from ESOSTINE
The poem is an example of lost souls still roaming the earth, yet unaware they are no longer part of the living world. It was perfectly told in perfect rhymes with rhythmic flow, and I enjoyed reading it. Well done, dear Willie.
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The poem is an example of lost souls still roaming the earth, yet unaware they are no longer part of the living world. It was perfectly told in perfect rhymes with rhythmic flow, and I enjoyed reading it. Well done, dear Willie.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2023
Comment from jmdg1954
Wow. Devastating story. This is a poem in which many families have to endure the pain and suffering of a missing child.
Lost, abandoned, or kidnapped, what ever the case your story was told with such vigor and seriousness.
Haunting tale told...
John
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Wow. Devastating story. This is a poem in which many families have to endure the pain and suffering of a missing child.
Lost, abandoned, or kidnapped, what ever the case your story was told with such vigor and seriousness.
Haunting tale told...
John
Comment Written 25-Jun-2023
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was really sad. I hate to think of lost souls wandering in between life and death, not knowing they had died, or why they can't find their family. That little girl is one of many who died before her time, and who knows whether or not they are still wandering here on Earth. Excellent story in a poem. Well done. Sandra xx
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That was really sad. I hate to think of lost souls wandering in between life and death, not knowing they had died, or why they can't find their family. That little girl is one of many who died before her time, and who knows whether or not they are still wandering here on Earth. Excellent story in a poem. Well done. Sandra xx
Comment Written 25-Jun-2023
Comment from Heather lyn Tobias
Okay you have written a great poem. I loved it. I was not expecting the turn of events when the child was telling her story and that she had passed away. You have a great imagination. Do not stop writing.
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Okay you have written a great poem. I loved it. I was not expecting the turn of events when the child was telling her story and that she had passed away. You have a great imagination. Do not stop writing.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2023
Comment from mermaids
Your words read like a mini movie. Your theme is unique and I like how the little girl is a ghost who is looking for her family. Excellent poetic form and use of words. You have a smooth poetic form and a smooth use of rhyming words.
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Your words read like a mini movie. Your theme is unique and I like how the little girl is a ghost who is looking for her family. Excellent poetic form and use of words. You have a smooth poetic form and a smooth use of rhyming words.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2023