NaPoWriMo 2019
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "A Romantic Way"National Poetry Writing Month
11 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written romantic poem that starts with a dreamy thought of a lover by your side The dream of romance is interrupted by the ringing telephone.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
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A very well-written romantic poem that starts with a dreamy thought of a lover by your side The dream of romance is interrupted by the ringing telephone.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019
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Hi Sandra. Yes, that is all correct. Thank You. Hugs :)
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
This is delightfully different. It's like peeking at these little vignettes. Terrific choice of artwork to complement your write, Alicia. I've used that artwork before too. It speaks volumes. Both your poem and the artwork complement one another perfectly.
The sixth star is for your concluding line "shadowed by a ringing phone". Luv it! Though the ringing phone will interrupt her lovely daydream, there is a chance it could be the gentleman of her dreams calling. :)
Hugs,
Connie
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2019
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This is delightfully different. It's like peeking at these little vignettes. Terrific choice of artwork to complement your write, Alicia. I've used that artwork before too. It speaks volumes. Both your poem and the artwork complement one another perfectly.
The sixth star is for your concluding line "shadowed by a ringing phone". Luv it! Though the ringing phone will interrupt her lovely daydream, there is a chance it could be the gentleman of her dreams calling. :)
Hugs,
Connie
Comment Written 05-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2019
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Hi! The artwork was my inspiration, however, my personality was similar. Except I was raised to get picked up at my door for dates... And sometimes with flowers. I have found out that plenty ladies learned to sneak around or meet places for dates. Times have changed. Tonight, a man on tiktok openly invited a woman to hang out online with him at home. Lolz, but true.
You're nice. Thank you.
Have a great weekend. Hearts & hugs, Alicia :)
Comment from Joan E.
What a fascinating tanka series! Thank you for sharing your references and seductive artwork as well. Your storytelling is intriguing--I could see the "mysterious" man's "chiseled face" and wonder about the impact of the "ringing phone". Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2019
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What a fascinating tanka series! Thank you for sharing your references and seductive artwork as well. Your storytelling is intriguing--I could see the "mysterious" man's "chiseled face" and wonder about the impact of the "ringing phone". Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 05-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2019
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Hi Joan! You're nice. Thank you :)
Comment from tfawcus
A woman daydreaming about romance. This captures the spirit of the Tanka well. I wonder what his Tanka in reply will be? LOL. There is a delightful suggestion of the naivety of young love in this.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2019
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A woman daydreaming about romance. This captures the spirit of the Tanka well. I wonder what his Tanka in reply will be? LOL. There is a delightful suggestion of the naivety of young love in this.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2019
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Hi Tony! I've always wondered the psyche of a dating man too. Lolz. Thank you :)
Comment from BeasPeas
A ringing phone can break the mood--don't you hate that? LOL! I enjoyed your well composed narrative tanka poem, illustrated beautifully. Great job. Marilyn
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2019
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A ringing phone can break the mood--don't you hate that? LOL! I enjoyed your well composed narrative tanka poem, illustrated beautifully. Great job. Marilyn
Comment Written 05-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2019
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Hi Marilyn! Thank you. Hearts & hugs, Alicia :)
Comment from 24chas
This was a great write, sunnilicious. I don't know why, maybe it's because it's a dark, rainy morning, but I got a real noir vibe when I read this. Thanks for taking me to another place this morning. Good job.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2019
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This was a great write, sunnilicious. I don't know why, maybe it's because it's a dark, rainy morning, but I got a real noir vibe when I read this. Thanks for taking me to another place this morning. Good job.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2019
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Thank you :)
Comment from Helena Frances
This is a wonderful telling of fantasizing love, and all its possibilities. I especially like 'happy giggles' as that evokes memories of how purely in love one can be.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2019
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This is a wonderful telling of fantasizing love, and all its possibilities. I especially like 'happy giggles' as that evokes memories of how purely in love one can be.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2019
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Thank you :)
Comment from Earl Corp
I enjoyed this poem immensely, and I'm not a free verse fan. I think the message got through to me and the poem made sense. I hope you meet your goal of a poem a day. Nice job.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2019
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I enjoyed this poem immensely, and I'm not a free verse fan. I think the message got through to me and the poem made sense. I hope you meet your goal of a poem a day. Nice job.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2019
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You're very kind. Thank you :)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
There's much romantic thought here in your wistful words, yearning and dreaming of a loved one, I enjoyed your journey through romantic times remembered, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2019
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There's much romantic thought here in your wistful words, yearning and dreaming of a loved one, I enjoyed your journey through romantic times remembered, love Dolly x
Comment Written 05-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2019
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Hi! Thank you. Hugs :)
Comment from beizanten
A sensual picture. The opening paragraph is pretty good and had a dreamy quality to it. a very romantic and quite sensual second paragraph. a pretty good third and ending stanza.
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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2019
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A sensual picture. The opening paragraph is pretty good and had a dreamy quality to it. a very romantic and quite sensual second paragraph. a pretty good third and ending stanza.
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Comment Written 05-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2019
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Hi! Thank you. Have a great weekend :)