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Comment from Dawn Munro
Ahhhhhhhh! Yikes! What a set-up! Yours is another brain I wouldn't mind examining -- I JUST said something similar to another writer I admire greatly. What a story, Bill. I'm still feeling more than a little nervous! (*smile*)
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Ahhhhhhhh! Yikes! What a set-up! Yours is another brain I wouldn't mind examining -- I JUST said something similar to another writer I admire greatly. What a story, Bill. I'm still feeling more than a little nervous! (*smile*)
Comment Written 05-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Thank you, Dawn. That's a nice thing to say. Bill
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Most welcome -- and I meant it.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very interesting short story you have penned. You used very interesting and well thought out words to use. The art work you chose went well with your words. I saw no errors or spag in this. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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This is a very interesting short story you have penned. You used very interesting and well thought out words to use. The art work you chose went well with your words. I saw no errors or spag in this. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Thanks, Teri.
Comment from nomi338
The biggest take away from this is never break the law no matter what your instructor tells you to do. Of course when you are being set up by someone this powerful, if you do not go along with the setup, you will be screwed anyway, so there is no win. At least for you there is no win.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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The biggest take away from this is never break the law no matter what your instructor tells you to do. Of course when you are being set up by someone this powerful, if you do not go along with the setup, you will be screwed anyway, so there is no win. At least for you there is no win.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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This is based on a true story; much like the Trump presidency.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A serious little short story and all I kept seeing was a young Jackie Gleason in his uniform!! :) A fun short story, sir, with a wonderful twist to it! ;) Thanx for sharing! :) Yvette
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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A serious little short story and all I kept seeing was a young Jackie Gleason in his uniform!! :) A fun short story, sir, with a wonderful twist to it! ;) Thanx for sharing! :) Yvette
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Thanks, Yvette.
Comment from Earl Corp
Cool story, with a good plot, believable characters, and an interesting plot twist at the end. Bill you need to start entering contests with your writing. Very nice job.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Cool story, with a good plot, believable characters, and an interesting plot twist at the end. Bill you need to start entering contests with your writing. Very nice job.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Thanks, Earl, for the kind review. Bill
Comment from Teresa Alford
Excellent. Intriguing, when the story said they walked to the diner I thought the women hit must have been a dummy used for training...clever twist. Why did the driver seemingly left the scene so easily?
In first sentence eyes bulged to saucers?? Or did the eyes bulge to the SIZE of saucers?
I hope there will be more story coming.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Excellent. Intriguing, when the story said they walked to the diner I thought the women hit must have been a dummy used for training...clever twist. Why did the driver seemingly left the scene so easily?
In first sentence eyes bulged to saucers?? Or did the eyes bulge to the SIZE of saucers?
I hope there will be more story coming.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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I hasn?t anticipated a series on this character until I wrote the last paragraph. I will frame it out. I went with the metaphor over the simile with saucers. Thanks, TA.
Comment from Miss Sherry
Hoo boy - right to the moon, Schott. This is wonderfully weird but demands the reader read it carefully and suspend disbelief. Your mind creates stuff that boggles the mind and entertains the imagination.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Hoo boy - right to the moon, Schott. This is wonderfully weird but demands the reader read it carefully and suspend disbelief. Your mind creates stuff that boggles the mind and entertains the imagination.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Thank you, OP, for the kind reviewy. Bill
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I could actually believe that happens! The world is crazy and human life has always been cheap to some criminals, but now it's even more so. Quite a scary story you've told here, Bill, well done! :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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I could actually believe that happens! The world is crazy and human life has always been cheap to some criminals, but now it's even more so. Quite a scary story you've told here, Bill, well done! :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Thank you, Sandra.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
He he he, I enjoyed your black comedy, tongue in cheek write Bill and you are so inventive with your stories! Much enjoyed, believable dialogue and chilling story, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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He he he, I enjoyed your black comedy, tongue in cheek write Bill and you are so inventive with your stories! Much enjoyed, believable dialogue and chilling story, love Dolly x
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Thanks, Dolly, for the kind review. Bill
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Yikes! Always learn everything about a job before you accept it. He can't even tell the police how it happened and why, since they'll kill his family. Better to have a boring nine to five job. :)
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Yikes! Always learn everything about a job before you accept it. He can't even tell the police how it happened and why, since they'll kill his family. Better to have a boring nine to five job. :)
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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He did get the job though. There must be crypto resume for killers. Thanks for giving this a look, Phyllis.
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He was not hired to kill. What gave you that idea? He's doing research on the effect of the power on one who has it.
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Oops... I was mistaken... thought the Q was about my story. Yes, your guy is a killer. :)
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That would be a leap in plot.