Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

The joke will be on the medical staff if they run a DNA. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is very good imagery. Wishing you and yours a very Merry Christmas, Bill.

 Comment Written 22-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2018

Thank you very much, Charle. Hope you?re well and enjoying the holidays. Bill

reply by c_lucas on 22-Dec-2018

You're welcome, Bill.

Comment from CD Richards

Excellent

This is certainly an update on an old favourite. It would seem in this version it is the innkeeper who turns out to be an ass (presumably not the one young Mary rode in on). Seasonally appropriate, and I suspect it might do well.

 Comment Written 22-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2018

Thanks, Craig. Merry Christmas.

Comment from Janice Canerdy

Excellent

Your flash fiction piece, interestingly, creates a modern-day setting for the most precious birth ever. The scoffers in the story represent a group of people
who have smirked at the idea of the virgin birth since the event occurred.

 Comment Written 21-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 21-Dec-2018

Thanks, Janice, for giving this a look. Bill

Comment from meeshu

Excellent

you have created some great images here, and your writing is thoughtful and descriptive and your story has a nice twist, Bill. blessings of peace to you and yours this season.......meeshu

 Comment Written 21-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 21-Dec-2018

Thanks, meeshu. Happy Holid@ys

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I performed in a musical called "Two from Gallilee" as Jacob, the father of Joseph, over three Christmases, in the 90s. The story was just as credulous to the participants as the cynical as the two medical staff in your clever short story Bill. Well done, and excellent entry in this contest, well done, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 21-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 21-Dec-2018

Thank you, Roy. Merry Christmas.

reply by royowen on 22-Dec-2018

Welcome

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written short story. What seems impossible for us in nature is a definite possibility with God, although the birth of Jesus from the virgin Mary is more a spiritual birth for Mary [the soul].

 Comment Written 21-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 21-Dec-2018

Thanks, Ssndra

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

A quaint take on the original story here Bill with your usual clever humour, much enjoyed and good luck with the contest, I enjoyed this write, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 21-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 21-Dec-2018

Thanks, Dolly.

Comment from jmshumate

Exceptional

At first I chuckled at the humorous lines in this short story, but the last line really hit me. How people must have laughed and ridiculed Mary as she "a virgin" gave birth to our Savior fulfilling prophecy and God's promise. What a creative retake on the historical virgin birth of Christ. Thank you for sharing this!

 Comment Written 21-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 21-Dec-2018

Thanks, jm.

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

I read a really good short story, Eyes Of Onyx, about the end of the Piscean era, and the birth of Keats's new messiah(scary kind of gal) in a California gas station...I like this kind of story...fivers.

 Comment Written 20-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 20-Dec-2018

Thanks, LIJ

Comment from country ranch writer

Excellent

This is a good one a little funny the way this is put but it serves the purpose for getting the point across about Mary having her child. May everyone have a safe Christmas.

 Comment Written 20-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 20-Dec-2018

Thanks, CRW

reply by country ranch writer on 20-Dec-2018

smiles