Comment from
WildWithWords
Interesting approach with the choice of couplets rather than traditional verses possibly a wise one. It allows you to throw in the longer line formats without being concerned with the extreme change in lines within each 4 line verse.
Cute ending with your version of a "Heeeeerrrreeee's Johnny!" moment.
Bill (WildWithWords)
Comment Written 25-Sep-2018
Comment from
meeshu
very spooky, the form and versification adds a great deal to the creepiness. the tension builds throughout. my favorite: "everybody was sleeping but Jack, not him." nice and scary, Rhonnie.............meeshu
Comment Written 25-Sep-2018