A lucrative job
A day in the life11 total reviews
Comment from Boogienights
It's scary to think that there are people out there who kill for a living! How can that type of person live with themselves? Very interesting short poem, best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2018
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It's scary to think that there are people out there who kill for a living! How can that type of person live with themselves? Very interesting short poem, best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2018
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Many thanks
Comment from donette1914
this takes your breath away and there is so much truth to this fine piece
very well chosen words that you used
this is a very well penned poem
very nice artwork and I hope for the best in the contest
it was a pleasure to read
thank you for sharing
donette1914 Sep, 8th 2018
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2018
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this takes your breath away and there is so much truth to this fine piece
very well chosen words that you used
this is a very well penned poem
very nice artwork and I hope for the best in the contest
it was a pleasure to read
thank you for sharing
donette1914 Sep, 8th 2018
Comment Written 08-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2018
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Many thanks for your great review.
Comment from Dean Kuch
They say the most difficult murders to solve are the ones which seem to have no motive.
The victims in these cases are usually well-loved members of their respective communities and have no known enemies.
Pros who carry out hits for hire are adept at making a murder appear as if it were merely an accident.
Others do not care if murder is the cause & culprit. They've carried out murders for hire so often they have it down to a science and cannot be traced.
We had an entire family of five who were wiped out in a hit for hire a year and a half ago just one county away and the police still have no leads.
Now THAT'S scary!
Good luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2018
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They say the most difficult murders to solve are the ones which seem to have no motive.
The victims in these cases are usually well-loved members of their respective communities and have no known enemies.
Pros who carry out hits for hire are adept at making a murder appear as if it were merely an accident.
Others do not care if murder is the cause & culprit. They've carried out murders for hire so often they have it down to a science and cannot be traced.
We had an entire family of five who were wiped out in a hit for hire a year and a half ago just one county away and the police still have no leads.
Now THAT'S scary!
Good luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
Comment Written 08-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2018
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Thanks Dean. Cheers Jen.
Comment from kahpot
Wonderful, what a very intriguing read that keeps the reader wondering while reading and (bugger it ) when finished, have to love these ones that keep the mind churning very well written and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2018
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Wonderful, what a very intriguing read that keeps the reader wondering while reading and (bugger it ) when finished, have to love these ones that keep the mind churning very well written and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 08-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2018
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Many thanks Kahpot.
Comment from Kelly Grim
Very interesting. I like the story told here. I like the dark feel this poem has. I like that you fulfill the syllable count with just 1 word in each of the first 3 lines. I like the third line best of all. Syllable count is good. Image and presentation help tell the story. Well done!
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2018
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Very interesting. I like the story told here. I like the dark feel this poem has. I like that you fulfill the syllable count with just 1 word in each of the first 3 lines. I like the third line best of all. Syllable count is good. Image and presentation help tell the story. Well done!
Comment Written 07-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2018
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Thanks for your great review
Comment from Bill Schott
This tetractys, A Lucrative Job, has the right format and trims down the job of a hired killer to this neatly formatted verse. Neat.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2018
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This tetractys, A Lucrative Job, has the right format and trims down the job of a hired killer to this neatly formatted verse. Neat.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2018
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Many thanks Bill.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Tetractys. It is a sad situation when someone gets another person tbat we cannot get along with or find they are in the way to kill that person for money.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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A very well-written Tetractys. It is a sad situation when someone gets another person tbat we cannot get along with or find they are in the way to kill that person for money.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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Thanks Sandra
Comment from ciliverde
This poetic form is new to me. You have produced quite a thriller in this short poem, describing the work done by a hired assassin. It's a good paying job, and all in a day's work?
Well done,
Carol
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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This poetic form is new to me. You have produced quite a thriller in this short poem, describing the work done by a hired assassin. It's a good paying job, and all in a day's work?
Well done,
Carol
Comment Written 07-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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Many thanks for your great review
Comment from WildWithWords
Very nice work within strict limitations. All parameters met.
You've also managed to put in my head (via the chosen very minimalist photo) that this happened in Washington D.C., thereby adding a touch of political intrigue.
Though I'm fairly certain that the Lincoln Memorial's night lighting is white, the photo certainly reminds me (an Australian who has seen DC many times) of the Memorial design. If this was intended as a subtle hint, then kudos to you.
Spelling correction - assassin.
Best of luck for a very fine entry.
Bill (WildWithWords)
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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Very nice work within strict limitations. All parameters met.
You've also managed to put in my head (via the chosen very minimalist photo) that this happened in Washington D.C., thereby adding a touch of political intrigue.
Though I'm fairly certain that the Lincoln Memorial's night lighting is white, the photo certainly reminds me (an Australian who has seen DC many times) of the Memorial design. If this was intended as a subtle hint, then kudos to you.
Spelling correction - assassin.
Best of luck for a very fine entry.
Bill (WildWithWords)
Comment Written 07-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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Thank you so much for your grest review and for spotting the mistake.
Comment from Nanny 6
Oooooo... Nice work... The end was unexpected. To put a whole story together in so few syllables on this poem is remarkable. Good luck in the contest!
Judy
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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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Oooooo... Nice work... The end was unexpected. To put a whole story together in so few syllables on this poem is remarkable. Good luck in the contest!
Judy
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Comment Written 06-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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Many thanks, much appreciated.