What Breaks My Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "When the Pain is Silent"Poems and stories tellin' it like I see it.
3 total reviews
Comment from Betsy2
Well written. Your poem is poignant and sad for sure. I am wondering what that silent pain is about. Or, does it not matter as it is up to us to interpret your poem as how it relates to ourselves as well as the author?
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2018
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Well written. Your poem is poignant and sad for sure. I am wondering what that silent pain is about. Or, does it not matter as it is up to us to interpret your poem as how it relates to ourselves as well as the author?
Comment Written 04-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2018
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Again that you for the rating.
Comment from RodG
Anyone who's known pain or sorrow of any kind will sympathize with the Speaker in this poem. Good description of that ceaseless pain in stanza one. And it's easy to understand why others do not feel it, too, if they are indifferent or apathetic. May I suggest a way to make this sound even more PERSONAL or Immediate? Change your point of view to first person. "No one knows the hurt (omit "that") I feel." "Upon deaf ears MY words do fall." Rod
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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Anyone who's known pain or sorrow of any kind will sympathize with the Speaker in this poem. Good description of that ceaseless pain in stanza one. And it's easy to understand why others do not feel it, too, if they are indifferent or apathetic. May I suggest a way to make this sound even more PERSONAL or Immediate? Change your point of view to first person. "No one knows the hurt (omit "that") I feel." "Upon deaf ears MY words do fall." Rod
Comment Written 03-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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Thank you for the high review and the suggestion. I will look into correcting it.
Comment from kiwijenny
I empathize...and there is nothing like poetry to help when depression hits and sadness squats on your heart like a festering wound,,
Well penned . So glad you wrote it a while ago. Hope everything is better now
God bless
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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I empathize...and there is nothing like poetry to help when depression hits and sadness squats on your heart like a festering wound,,
Well penned . So glad you wrote it a while ago. Hope everything is better now
God bless
Comment Written 03-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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Yes. This was written many years ago. Thank you for your kind words and high review.