Of Hearts and Heartaches
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Last Heart Standing"Poems about falling in or out of love.
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Comment from Kathleen S.
Nice. I don't think I've ever had that experience, but if I do then I'll think about your words and how to bring on the "tirade." Fiery poem it is. I like it.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2018
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Nice. I don't think I've ever had that experience, but if I do then I'll think about your words and how to bring on the "tirade." Fiery poem it is. I like it.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2018
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Thank you for your rating and comments.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written rhyming poem about a cheating partner. When he cheated once he will cheat again. When he is caught out he must pay for the unfaithfulness and cheating on the other.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2018
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A very well-written rhyming poem about a cheating partner. When he cheated once he will cheat again. When he is caught out he must pay for the unfaithfulness and cheating on the other.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2018
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Thank you for your rating and comments.
Comment from kiwijenny
Wow your head is an amazing place for this to come out of it...it was like the gunfight at ok corral ...or Custers last stand...no wait ...no survivors there...it played like a fast action gun slinging western...well done
Well penned and played
God bless
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2018
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Wow your head is an amazing place for this to come out of it...it was like the gunfight at ok corral ...or Custers last stand...no wait ...no survivors there...it played like a fast action gun slinging western...well done
Well penned and played
God bless
Comment Written 28-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2018
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Thank you so ever much for your rating and comments.
Comment from LoveLifeKnight
this poem is quite clever and fun to read. at first thought it was all dramatic blood and death! but it appears words had enough power this time to satisfy one heart and squash another! I do believe it can happen. whatever your speaker said must have been great!
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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this poem is quite clever and fun to read. at first thought it was all dramatic blood and death! but it appears words had enough power this time to satisfy one heart and squash another! I do believe it can happen. whatever your speaker said must have been great!
Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Basically I just believed my speaker as telling all his dirty little secrets. Thanks for the rating and comments.
Comment from Michele Harber
Wow! I'm glad I'm not on the receiving end of that tirade. I have to say that there were moments when the variance in meter threw me off a bit. On the other hand, to your total credit, you had me believing until the reveal at the end that I was reading about an actual shoot out and not a verbal one, and you did have me in your thrall. I enjoyed your rhymes and, if this is autobiographical, I fully respect that you stood up to the lying (word I'm too much of a lady to say). Good for you!
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Wow! I'm glad I'm not on the receiving end of that tirade. I have to say that there were moments when the variance in meter threw me off a bit. On the other hand, to your total credit, you had me believing until the reveal at the end that I was reading about an actual shoot out and not a verbal one, and you did have me in your thrall. I enjoyed your rhymes and, if this is autobiographical, I fully respect that you stood up to the lying (word I'm too much of a lady to say). Good for you!
Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Wasn't autobiographical. The first two of every three stanzas have the same number of beats while every third stanza matches every third stanza. Anyway thank you for the rating and comments.
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Thanks for the explanation. I'm glad this wasn't autobiographical, although I know several men who'd benefit greatly from the thrashing the man in your poem took.
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Yeah, no personal experience. Just something that came into my head.
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Whew! :-)
Comment from LeftHandedScribe
Well done! This reminds me of The Devil Went Down to Georgia. It has almost a Noir feel. The setting is gritty and quite delicious to take a ride on. The humor shines throughout the piece.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Well done! This reminds me of The Devil Went Down to Georgia. It has almost a Noir feel. The setting is gritty and quite delicious to take a ride on. The humor shines throughout the piece.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Thank you for your wonderful rating and comments.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks how bravely and confidently you dealt with the cheating lover who approached you again for reviving a relationship, he sought for apology, you escaped him smiling simply; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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This speaks how bravely and confidently you dealt with the cheating lover who approached you again for reviving a relationship, he sought for apology, you escaped him smiling simply; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Thank you for your wonderful rating and comments.
Comment from homewriter
I loved the showdown being compared to a gun fight like in the old westerns. I think this was a great poem and I really enjoyed reading it. I am from the black and white western era and this is the feeling I got at first great job!
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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I loved the showdown being compared to a gun fight like in the old westerns. I think this was a great poem and I really enjoyed reading it. I am from the black and white western era and this is the feeling I got at first great job!
Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Thank you, that's where I got the idea and was trying for that type of setting. Thanks so much for your kind rating and comments.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello fm wright
Great couplets I like the way you told us in your poem why not to cheat on your lover otherwise
For after the proceeding brandishing
there could only remain one last heart standing.
I see this metaphorical
Gert
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Hello fm wright
Great couplets I like the way you told us in your poem why not to cheat on your lover otherwise
For after the proceeding brandishing
there could only remain one last heart standing.
I see this metaphorical
Gert
Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Yes, it was meant to be metaphorical. Thanks for the rating and your comments.
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You are so welocme fm wright
gert
Comment from royowen
I rather like inspired inference in this work, sort of like a metaphorical encounter, likening it to a saloon shoot out, with fine literary rhetoric to define the "gun battle". Written in rhyming couplets, with a smooth, articulate delivery to make the enjoyable reading, well done, good job, blessings, Roy
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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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I rather like inspired inference in this work, sort of like a metaphorical encounter, likening it to a saloon shoot out, with fine literary rhetoric to define the "gun battle". Written in rhyming couplets, with a smooth, articulate delivery to make the enjoyable reading, well done, good job, blessings, Roy
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Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Thank you so very much for your rating and comments. Much appreciated.
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Most welcome