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Twister

tongue twister contest entry

7 total reviews 
Comment from Bill Schott
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This tongue-twister, Twister, seems to joining two unrelated ideas into one statement with a comma splice in the middle. The talking iguana sends me off into the rivers of surreality.

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2018

reply by the author on 30-Jul-2018
    Dear Bill, Thank you for your comments and rating.
Comment from BermyBye50
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Good job. A fine entry for the contest. It has character and spirit but seems to lack a little the transition. Perhaps the insertion of 'as' may help instead of the comma between rough and rhythm.

All the best in the contest.

Eugene

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2018

reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
    Dear Eugene, Thank you for your comments and rating.
Comment from Lady Jane
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I love the iguana? I can just see him/her trying to say this three times without tripping over the tongue and falling off the branch. Tongue twister is well presented and well, a tongue twister of prime penning worth. Good luck in the contest.
Janelle

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2018

reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
    Dear Janelle, Thank you for your comments and rating and your good luck wishes.
Comment from Sugarray77
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This is an excellent poem and answers the prompt beautifully. I love the flow and construction of your verse. This is a very good entry. Good job and Good luck!

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2018

reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
    Dear Sugarray, Thank you for your comments, rating and good luck.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
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Oh my goodness gracious....that's a lot of "r's" but what a really fun tongue twister you have crafted!! And I have to love the iguana with his tongue issue...!!! :) :)

Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest! :) :)

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2018

reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
    Dear Y.M., Thank you for your comments and rating. Thanks for your good luck wishes.
Comment from Mustang Patty
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Dear Anonymous Creator of Tongue Twisters,

Thank you for sharing your entry into this twisted contest. Your piece is difficult to say five times fast and I don't think I could remember it anyway. I wish you luck in the contest,

~patty~

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2018

reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
    Dear patty, Thank you for your good luck wishes and your review.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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Good job, Mystery Author, with your tongue twister that makes sense in the 'real' world. When I first read the title, I thought it would be a poem about a tornado. Best wishes. Jan

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2018

reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
    Dear Jan, Thank you for you comments and rating.