Tender Persistence
Clearing away the entanglements from our heart18 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Love the imagery used in this spiritual poem, Liz. I like the surprising way you show that we need to be disrupted by God's ways as in "being blinded by the Light." Weeding is a great analogy of what we need to do to be free from the suffocating entanglements. Well done!
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018
  |
Love the imagery used in this spiritual poem, Liz. I like the surprising way you show that we need to be disrupted by God's ways as in "being blinded by the Light." Weeding is a great analogy of what we need to do to be free from the suffocating entanglements. Well done!
Comment Written 27-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018
-
Thank you for your beautiful review. I'm so glad you appreciated it so.
Comment from Sylvana Brannon
I wish I could write poetry, especially if I could write like this. It caught me from the first line. The image of the stubborn roots is so vivid. Well done.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018
|
I wish I could write poetry, especially if I could write like this. It caught me from the first line. The image of the stubborn roots is so vivid. Well done.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018
-
Thank you for your complimentary review. I'm glad you liked it. I taught creative writing and taught students they could write poetry and they did. It is actually quite simple. You can begin with sensory poetry. Choose a concept then list about the senses. Under each write 5 words that come to your mind. Now mess around with those concepts and at the end summarize with it makes me feel. Now you can write poetry. Keep writing. If you want to share on with me before you submit it I'd be honored to read it.
Comment from Henry King
Beautiful words are enhanced by the sibilence and other internal rhyme within the poem. As all good poetry should, this free verse poem, with it's odd verse structure, begged a reader to wonder. Well done.
Wondered I then did.
This poet's first words - Tender Moments. The poet then thanks the Lord for friends sent to wrench stubborn entanglements. That wrenching does not feel tender. The vision is not there. But, then the Lord clears the brambles away with tenderness. Some clarity, a volta if you will, is needed between the two clearings.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018
|
Beautiful words are enhanced by the sibilence and other internal rhyme within the poem. As all good poetry should, this free verse poem, with it's odd verse structure, begged a reader to wonder. Well done.
Wondered I then did.
This poet's first words - Tender Moments. The poet then thanks the Lord for friends sent to wrench stubborn entanglements. That wrenching does not feel tender. The vision is not there. But, then the Lord clears the brambles away with tenderness. Some clarity, a volta if you will, is needed between the two clearings.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018
-
Thank you for the delightfully expressed review. I like you love to read people's poetry and expand upon it. I usually remark on their use of figures of speech, so it was so fullfulling to read your review.
-
You are welcome. I wasn't given all the stuff, my sisters and female cousins were given. Because I was a boy, we didn't need to know those secrets.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This sounds a bit like the grip of depression and the yearning to be released so that the heart can once again flourish and love, a deeply emotional poem, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018
|
This sounds a bit like the grip of depression and the yearning to be released so that the heart can once again flourish and love, a deeply emotional poem, love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018
-
Thank you for your comprehensive review. I'm glad it touched you.
Comment from karenina
What a tender write, evocative of a lament to the Lord above to be patient with you ad you find your way towArd him, bathed in light and love.
Karenina
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018
|
What a tender write, evocative of a lament to the Lord above to be patient with you ad you find your way towArd him, bathed in light and love.
Karenina
Comment Written 16-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018
-
Thank you for your inspired review. I glad you appreciated it.
Comment from Poetic Friend
Liz,
I am convinced that we have kindred spirits. You write the type of poetry that I enjoy reading and writing. There is always deeper meaning for understanding in your poetry,
This poem would also be a great entry for the poem about God. Of course, you can only enter it one contest.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018
|
Liz,
I am convinced that we have kindred spirits. You write the type of poetry that I enjoy reading and writing. There is always deeper meaning for understanding in your poetry,
This poem would also be a great entry for the poem about God. Of course, you can only enter it one contest.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018
-
Thank you for your review expressing kinship in our spirituality and also thank you so much for nominating me. I will definitely be checking out your portfolio.
Comment from BeasPeas
Your poem is illustrated beautifully. Word choices are descriptive and blend well with each other and your theme. From my point of view, your poem is spiritual and uplifting. Marilyn
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018
|
Your poem is illustrated beautifully. Word choices are descriptive and blend well with each other and your theme. From my point of view, your poem is spiritual and uplifting. Marilyn
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018
-
Thank you for your generous review. I was thrilled when I found that picture.
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem about emotions, Tender Persistence, speaks to the twisted and tight place we get ourselves into as we work without a goal or clue. God finds and untangles that life, so growth can occur. Nice poem.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2018
|
This poem about emotions, Tender Persistence, speaks to the twisted and tight place we get ourselves into as we work without a goal or clue. God finds and untangles that life, so growth can occur. Nice poem.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2018
-
Thank you form your insightful review. I'm glad it drew you into deeper thought and that you liked it.
Comment from Deb Kincaid
I enjoyed the gentleness of this poem. Especially enjoyed the first two stanzas--lovely. And the photo you paired with: perfect, as if it were created for this poem. Well done.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2018
|
I enjoyed the gentleness of this poem. Especially enjoyed the first two stanzas--lovely. And the photo you paired with: perfect, as if it were created for this poem. Well done.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2018
-
Thank you so much for your spirited review. I'm glad you enjoyed so.
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
You have successfully chosen a wonderful topic to share about the emotions writing prompt. I like the use of the words "roots/weeds" in the poem. This is a good entry for the contest. Good luck!
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2018
|
You have successfully chosen a wonderful topic to share about the emotions writing prompt. I like the use of the words "roots/weeds" in the poem. This is a good entry for the contest. Good luck!
Comment Written 14-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2018
-
Thank you for your appreciative review. I'm glad you like the roots/weeds ...that is one of my favorite expressions too