Nature's Poetic Voice.
Viewing comments for Chapter 43 "Quilted Skies."A sensory appreciation of nature.
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Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh, this is lovely, Shirley - very evocative. I do, however, have a few suggestions (to match your description of what the form entails - I've never written one, but now I want to, after having read this lovely Octelle.
1) L1 is only seven syllables - perhaps adding "these" patchwork, quilted...?
2) L6, same thing - only seven syllables - easy solve - "a" universe
3) L7 - same as L1
This, my friend, goes in my bookcase!
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
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Oh, this is lovely, Shirley - very evocative. I do, however, have a few suggestions (to match your description of what the form entails - I've never written one, but now I want to, after having read this lovely Octelle.
1) L1 is only seven syllables - perhaps adding "these" patchwork, quilted...?
2) L6, same thing - only seven syllables - easy solve - "a" universe
3) L7 - same as L1
This, my friend, goes in my bookcase!
Comment Written 13-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
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Hi Dawn, Thanks for your review comments.
Blessings
Shirley
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You're very welcome, Shirley. Blessings to you, too!
Comment from Teri7
This is a very beautiful and interesting poem you have penned in the Octelle format. You used very good descriptive words and lovely art work. I enjoyed reading and reviewing it! love, Teri
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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This is a very beautiful and interesting poem you have penned in the Octelle format. You used very good descriptive words and lovely art work. I enjoyed reading and reviewing it! love, Teri
Comment Written 13-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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Thanks Teri,
I appreciate your time and review.
I am fascinated by the world around me and the night sky is so beautiful.
Blessinbs
Shirley
Comment from apky
Although I cannot help you with the techniques of poetry in my review, I do love how you wrote this beautiful octelle with the most amazing words to pay tribute to nature. I love nature too, especially the sunset or sunrise over the ocean. The sound of gentle waves always remind me of what I imagine to be the sound babies feel in their mother's wombs when she is happy and at peace...
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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Although I cannot help you with the techniques of poetry in my review, I do love how you wrote this beautiful octelle with the most amazing words to pay tribute to nature. I love nature too, especially the sunset or sunrise over the ocean. The sound of gentle waves always remind me of what I imagine to be the sound babies feel in their mother's wombs when she is happy and at peace...
Comment Written 13-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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Thank you for your time and review.
Blessings
Shirley
Comment from Mary Hollingsworth
Seken what a beautiful poem and the language a beauty used to describe the skies. I loved it the way you described the beauty of the sky and then in the night skies as well. Very good piece of art written on paper.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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Seken what a beautiful poem and the language a beauty used to describe the skies. I loved it the way you described the beauty of the sky and then in the night skies as well. Very good piece of art written on paper.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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Thank you Mary.
Your kind review is appreciated.
Blessings
Shirley
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My pleasure Shirley