Cozy and Vain
5-7-5 bird12 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5 about birds, Cozy and Vain, has the proper set up and seems to point a finger at consumers for liking and wanting down filled coats and plumes of feathers for designs.
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This 5-7-5 about birds, Cozy and Vain, has the proper set up and seems to point a finger at consumers for liking and wanting down filled coats and plumes of feathers for designs.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2018
Comment from Cheryl Baker
A really good poem. Loved the presentation. The black background for those ever so coloured words, then the punch line in a fading grey, thie size of the font too. " Cosy and Vain". The syllable count is perfect and your verse reads well. Designed for it's impact. Thank you for the author's notes. Really makes us stop and think doesn't it? What we do for our own vanity.
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A really good poem. Loved the presentation. The black background for those ever so coloured words, then the punch line in a fading grey, thie size of the font too. " Cosy and Vain". The syllable count is perfect and your verse reads well. Designed for it's impact. Thank you for the author's notes. Really makes us stop and think doesn't it? What we do for our own vanity.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2018
Comment from angel123
I like your profound message. Your poem is well-written and I like the way you described a couple uses of bird feathers to explain how birds suffer. Your artwork choice goes well with your thoughts. Best wishes!
angel123
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I like your profound message. Your poem is well-written and I like the way you described a couple uses of bird feathers to explain how birds suffer. Your artwork choice goes well with your thoughts. Best wishes!
angel123
Comment Written 12-Apr-2018
Comment from Debra White
Hi :)
Your entry meets the criteria for the writing prompt.
- 5-7-5 syllable count
- about a bird / birds
I enjoy your artistic presentation and the author notes are very interesting.
Good luck in the contest.
Regards, Debra :)
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Hi :)
Your entry meets the criteria for the writing prompt.
- 5-7-5 syllable count
- about a bird / birds
I enjoy your artistic presentation and the author notes are very interesting.
Good luck in the contest.
Regards, Debra :)
Comment Written 12-Apr-2018
Comment from rhonnie69
HELLO Witty Writer: What you have expressed here is interesting to me. Since long ago, I've heard that if I carry a rabbit's foot around with me; that that's. "good luck," for me. I've come to look at that this way. "Hey. What about the rabbit???" WOW! I've imagined that the rabbit felt that her/his foot was, "good luck," for her/him. Especially since God gave it to her/him to make
her/him whole. Honestly, Witty writer; more people should think like you think regarding our God's provisions for his living creatures. I agree with you. rhonnie69.
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HELLO Witty Writer: What you have expressed here is interesting to me. Since long ago, I've heard that if I carry a rabbit's foot around with me; that that's. "good luck," for me. I've come to look at that this way. "Hey. What about the rabbit???" WOW! I've imagined that the rabbit felt that her/his foot was, "good luck," for her/him. Especially since God gave it to her/him to make
her/him whole. Honestly, Witty writer; more people should think like you think regarding our God's provisions for his living creatures. I agree with you. rhonnie69.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2018
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
So well written. Thanks for sharing the additional author notes to bring awareness to the treatment of animals for man's pleasures. So sad! Your ending line is very powerful and haunting. I am hoping it affects others who read as well. A virtual six!
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So well written. Thanks for sharing the additional author notes to bring awareness to the treatment of animals for man's pleasures. So sad! Your ending line is very powerful and haunting. I am hoping it affects others who read as well. A virtual six!
Comment Written 11-Apr-2018
Comment from royowen
An excellent entry in this 5/7/5 poetry contest, although one doesn't see much made from down these days, when I was young, there was eiderdowns on our beds, but haven't seen them for years. Well done an excellent presentation, good luck, blessings, Roy
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An excellent entry in this 5/7/5 poetry contest, although one doesn't see much made from down these days, when I was young, there was eiderdowns on our beds, but haven't seen them for years. Well done an excellent presentation, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 11-Apr-2018
Comment from Roxanne Barbour
Excellent choice in photo.
And you have made your topic elegantly clear, although I have to admit your added paragraphs explain the situation clearly.
Thanks for sharing.
Roxanne
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Excellent choice in photo.
And you have made your topic elegantly clear, although I have to admit your added paragraphs explain the situation clearly.
Thanks for sharing.
Roxanne
Comment Written 11-Apr-2018
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello, great contest entry from the prompt. Good word choices and a great pic that suits the poem so well. I also appreciate the work that's gone into the author notes. You old post it as an essay. I notice no errors and thanks for sharing your poetry, Ana.
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Hello, great contest entry from the prompt. Good word choices and a great pic that suits the poem so well. I also appreciate the work that's gone into the author notes. You old post it as an essay. I notice no errors and thanks for sharing your poetry, Ana.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2018
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the 5-7-5 Bye Bye Blackbird writing prompt.
Your short verse speaks of gathering feathers at the cost of the birds.
Well done and good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
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I think this is a good entry for the 5-7-5 Bye Bye Blackbird writing prompt.
Your short verse speaks of gathering feathers at the cost of the birds.
Well done and good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 11-Apr-2018