Comment from judiverse

Excellent

Probably not a good idea for the snail to be on the highway in the first place. Your syllable count is right on the money. You achieve the bonus of rhyme with highway and today. Nice alliteration with traffic and treacherous. Great picture of the snail. Looks like it's making tracks. judi

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018

Thanks, Judi

reply by judiverse on 02-Apr-2018

You're very welcome. judi

Comment from nomi338

Excellent

Ha! As if, a snail unfortunate enough to find himself on a California highway would become part of the roadway so quickly that unless you were watching, you would totally miss it. Drivers in Southern Cali do not mess around.

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018

Thanks, nomi

Comment from sunnilicious

Excellent

I have friends in France that eat snails. It's gross, but I liked watching them do it. You're hilarious. Strong visual imagery. Creative. Great poem. Good luck in the contest. Happy Springtime :)

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018

Thanks, Alicia.

Comment from emereaux

Excellent

Wonderful poem! It made me smile! It also perfectly describes my walk across the patio in the mornings - I always look down before I take a step. Thank you for using my artwork to illustrate your 5-7-5 poem. : ))

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018

Thanks, emereaux

reply by emereaux on 04-Apr-2018

: )

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

And it takes so long to cross the road that fate holds out and the shell protects, another great write for your series, Happy Easter Bill, have a great day, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018

Thanks, Dolly

Comment from damommy

Excellent

Bless their hearts. They're so slow. Definitely not lead-footed.

I wondered what you'd come up with next. Snails are so cute.

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018

We?ll take it slow at first

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Exceptional

This speaks an innocent snail goes down along the highway taking risk for death for there is no lead foot today, traffic is treacherous; well said, well done. Thank you for sharing this with us. Keep Writing Inspire Changing -- DR ALCREATOR (6-STAR)

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018

Thanks, ALD

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is another very cute 5-7-5 you have penned about the little snail on the highway. You used very good words and very cute imagery. I saw no errors or spag. I enjoyed this! Blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018

Thanks, again, Teri

Comment from Artasylum

Excellent

No Lead foot? Sorry sweet snail you better hope for reincarnation or you are screwed. I can hear the sound of the traffic, it is fast and coming straight to you... good luck. yours, diana

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018

Thanks, Diana. I hope no one veers to avoid this traffic hazard.

Comment from Swampfox1

Excellent

good luck in the contest. Interesting poem you created . No lead food, I guess not. this is cool. I wonder if the song Born to be Wild would go good with this one poem. Great job. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018

Get your motor running
head out on the highway
looking for adventure
in whatever comes our way
picture snail with wind blasted snail hair

reply by Swampfox1 on 31-Mar-2018

Lol. Yep, wouldn't that be something.