The Eidolon
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Chapter 5 - Part 3: Chasing Ghosts"Family heinously murdered. The question is by who?
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Comment from Asem.inspirations
Good afternoon, Brett:
We are getting somewhere now with this story. It has been extremely interesting so far but now its getting to the point where the story is addressing my curiosity.
"Darren knew his past was now his present.". Beautiful, I knew it was coming to this. I can't wait to see how this kid is related to the other murderer but it is clear there is some relation there. Why else would revenge be the reason.
I am still anticipating the rest of this marvelous story. I'm so sorry but I ran out of sixes. I have to learn to save you one or two.
I just posted " Two Boys Stabbed In School Classroom". You might like that one. Let me know.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Good afternoon, Brett:
We are getting somewhere now with this story. It has been extremely interesting so far but now its getting to the point where the story is addressing my curiosity.
"Darren knew his past was now his present.". Beautiful, I knew it was coming to this. I can't wait to see how this kid is related to the other murderer but it is clear there is some relation there. Why else would revenge be the reason.
I am still anticipating the rest of this marvelous story. I'm so sorry but I ran out of sixes. I have to learn to save you one or two.
I just posted " Two Boys Stabbed In School Classroom". You might like that one. Let me know.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Read and reviewed.
Appreciate your comments and support on this portion of chapter five.
Comment from pbomar1115
Darden continues to search the rooms, looking for clues that would help him understand who did the murderous acts. Even though, Drew confessed to the acts, is it possible that a thirteen-year-old did them? With the aid of past reading material, it showed likeness, but he continues the head-scratching.
Phillip
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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Darden continues to search the rooms, looking for clues that would help him understand who did the murderous acts. Even though, Drew confessed to the acts, is it possible that a thirteen-year-old did them? With the aid of past reading material, it showed likeness, but he continues the head-scratching.
Phillip
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of chapter five.
Appreciate your insights and the review.
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You're welcome, Brett.
Phillip
Comment from MTF1955
You paint a chilling picture. The detective's horror is papable. You leave the reader begging for more. Can't wait for the rest. Mary
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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You paint a chilling picture. The detective's horror is papable. You leave the reader begging for more. Can't wait for the rest. Mary
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of chapter five.
Appreciate your insightful comments and the review.
Comment from Possummagic
Your story is progressing nicely. Drew is still the only suspect they have and by his own account he is guilty of murder. Darden finds a ribbon with "revenge" written on it and this is apparently Drews motive. It's not looking good for Drew. Great story.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2017
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Your story is progressing nicely. Drew is still the only suspect they have and by his own account he is guilty of murder. Darden finds a ribbon with "revenge" written on it and this is apparently Drews motive. It's not looking good for Drew. Great story.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of chapter five.
Drew is the suspect. The question remains is he guilty?
Time will tell.
Appreciate your comments and support.
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Enjoying the story Brett. Marie PM
Comment from Sankey
Plenty of doom and gloom still to go I imagine. All very stark and mysterious. I am keen to read about the solution to the connection between these two murders. Very expressive and drawing writing friend.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2017
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Plenty of doom and gloom still to go I imagine. All very stark and mysterious. I am keen to read about the solution to the connection between these two murders. Very expressive and drawing writing friend.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2017
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Plenty of doom and gloom still to go.
Glad you enjoyed this portion of chapter five.
Appreciate your comments and support.
Comment from doggymad
Good strong wording to portray the crime scene. I can quite easily visualise the blood and smell the death.
This is going to be a great work, but as usual I am left waiting for the next instalment with baited breath
hugs
Freda
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2017
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Good strong wording to portray the crime scene. I can quite easily visualise the blood and smell the death.
This is going to be a great work, but as usual I am left waiting for the next instalment with baited breath
hugs
Freda
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of chapter five.
I tried to convey the scene strongly to create the proper atmosphere for the story.
Your support and comments appreciated.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Yes you are right, my questions will be answered in time as you are so patiently doing. This is well written and leads us each time to the next in an intriguing way
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2017
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Yes you are right, my questions will be answered in time as you are so patiently doing. This is well written and leads us each time to the next in an intriguing way
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of chapter five.
Can't provide all the answers in one chapter. That would make an awfully short story.
As always, appreciate you taking the time to read it and to write another very informative review.
Comment from Rasmine
This is a good chapter. I love the eerie way it is linked to the Lancaster murders.
Are you having fun torturing us? Every time you end on a really cool note, we have to wait with bated breath for the next chapter. Now you need to make a boring end. LOL!
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2017
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This is a good chapter. I love the eerie way it is linked to the Lancaster murders.
Are you having fun torturing us? Every time you end on a really cool note, we have to wait with bated breath for the next chapter. Now you need to make a boring end. LOL!
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2017
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Torturing you? The fun hasn't even started yet! :)
Glad you enjoyed this portion of chapter five.
Appreciate your comments and support.
Comment from Spitfire
While this is skillfully written and records the detective's physical and emotional reactions, I would like to into the mind of Drew for a change of pace. Novels usually have a subplot. I haven't picked one up here except for Drew's reference to the fact that the detective knew.
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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2017
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While this is skillfully written and records the detective's physical and emotional reactions, I would like to into the mind of Drew for a change of pace. Novels usually have a subplot. I haven't picked one up here except for Drew's reference to the fact that the detective knew.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2017
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There is a subplot that will be defined soon.
Have to get Darden out of the house first.
Thanks for asking about that issue.
I appreciate your comments, support, and insights.
Comment from Janilou
I could find no errors in this very well-written chapter. That may be because I was too engrossed in the story to notice but I did skim through again to make sure. All I found were vivid descriptions, naturally flowing dialogues and a great nail-biting chapter!
Jan
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2017
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I could find no errors in this very well-written chapter. That may be because I was too engrossed in the story to notice but I did skim through again to make sure. All I found were vivid descriptions, naturally flowing dialogues and a great nail-biting chapter!
Jan
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2017
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Appreciate your insights into this portion of chapter five.
Also appreciate you taking the time to read it and to write a review.
The six-stars definitely appreciated.