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Warm hearts turn cold18 total reviews
Comment from PoemsOfDD
jaded831 - this is an interesting 5-7-5 moon entry. You have all the syllables in check and written a piece that has quite a sinister feel with the end line - very effective. The picture is excellent, even going as far as to say it looks like an eye, black and watching. Great job and best of luck in the competition. ~DD
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017
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jaded831 - this is an interesting 5-7-5 moon entry. You have all the syllables in check and written a piece that has quite a sinister feel with the end line - very effective. The picture is excellent, even going as far as to say it looks like an eye, black and watching. Great job and best of luck in the competition. ~DD
Comment Written 28-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Possummagic
This is a really interesting 5-7-5 poem and I wish you well in the contest.1 loved your imagery and used something similar in a different contest. All the very best. PM
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2017
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This is a really interesting 5-7-5 poem and I wish you well in the contest.1 loved your imagery and used something similar in a different contest. All the very best. PM
Comment Written 27-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2017
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Thanks for your review.
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You're welcome
Comment from Natali Holden
The picture goes nicely with your eclipse poem. The syllable count is correct. Good job putting so much into so few words! What I don't get is the last line. Why do warm hearts turn cold? Beautiful poem!
Natali ;)
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2017
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The picture goes nicely with your eclipse poem. The syllable count is correct. Good job putting so much into so few words! What I don't get is the last line. Why do warm hearts turn cold? Beautiful poem!
Natali ;)
Comment Written 27-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2017
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When the sun is blocked I get a sinking, cold feeling. When the sun is out my mood is happier. So for me it turns my heart cold, that is how I feel. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Scott Pettipas
This is my first time reviewing a 5-7-5 poem, I think you did really well. I'm sure it's a challenge to be descriptive with the very limited syllable requirements. I think
moon was pretty good. Good luck jaded831 in the contest. All the best Scott
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2017
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This is my first time reviewing a 5-7-5 poem, I think you did really well. I'm sure it's a challenge to be descriptive with the very limited syllable requirements. I think
moon was pretty good. Good luck jaded831 in the contest. All the best Scott
Comment Written 27-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2017
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks by degrees warm hearts turn cold, darkness up in the sky reigns as per process the moon blocks the sun from shining, changes up and down everywhere; I liked.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017
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This speaks by degrees warm hearts turn cold, darkness up in the sky reigns as per process the moon blocks the sun from shining, changes up and down everywhere; I liked.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Octavia
This was a very timely write about the eclipse, mystery author.
Wondering if the " turning warm hearts cold" line has anything to do with all the predictions of gloom and doom surrounding this particular eclipse?
Time will tell.
Great job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017
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This was a very timely write about the eclipse, mystery author.
Wondering if the " turning warm hearts cold" line has anything to do with all the predictions of gloom and doom surrounding this particular eclipse?
Time will tell.
Great job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Laine Carson
Appropriate for today for sure, but sad that it would change a warm heart. I hope no weirdos did anything LUNEY during this exciting occasion. I did enjoy your perspective...captured in so few words.
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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017
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Appropriate for today for sure, but sad that it would change a warm heart. I hope no weirdos did anything LUNEY during this exciting occasion. I did enjoy your perspective...captured in so few words.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Janilou
Interesting analogy indeed. It is just hours away, this eclipse of the sun, or the heart! We are experiencing heavy cloud cover where I live unfortunately.
The poem is good. Nothing to suggest in the way of improvements. Best of luck in the contest and lots of votes!
Jan
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017
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Interesting analogy indeed. It is just hours away, this eclipse of the sun, or the heart! We are experiencing heavy cloud cover where I live unfortunately.
The poem is good. Nothing to suggest in the way of improvements. Best of luck in the contest and lots of votes!
Jan
Comment Written 21-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from rjuselius
"Darkness reigns as the
moon blocks the sun from shining,
turning warm hearts cold"
this is an interesting piece of poetry dear jaded831! especially that the sunless sky causes physical changes in the body. not a first thought but originally written.
thank you for sharing!
blessings and a big squeeze!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017
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"Darkness reigns as the
moon blocks the sun from shining,
turning warm hearts cold"
this is an interesting piece of poetry dear jaded831! especially that the sunless sky causes physical changes in the body. not a first thought but originally written.
thank you for sharing!
blessings and a big squeeze!
rebekka x
Comment Written 21-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello my friend
Darkness reigns as the 5
moon blocks the sun from shining, 7
turning warm hearts cold. 5..........................good syllable count. A nice presentation. A poem about the eclipse, the second I read in this contest. Good luck.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
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Hello my friend
Darkness reigns as the 5
moon blocks the sun from shining, 7
turning warm hearts cold. 5..........................good syllable count. A nice presentation. A poem about the eclipse, the second I read in this contest. Good luck.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
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Thank you for your review.