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Comment from Susanjohn
That thing is such a pest!!!!! omgoodness... I know!..my poor lawn. Now, what a clever little piece here...lol Conqueror mole! hahah...Nice you! :-)))
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
That thing is such a pest!!!!! omgoodness... I know!..my poor lawn. Now, what a clever little piece here...lol Conqueror mole! hahah...Nice you! :-)))
Comment Written 17-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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Thanks, Susan
Comment from EverInParadise
Clever. I'm glad you made the reference to Poe so I can understand you knowingly "borrowed' that line. That picture reminds me of the wide variety of creatures in the garden. The paths of the moles are very distinct. Like a machine making a road as your reference to the highway. I like this piece.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
Clever. I'm glad you made the reference to Poe so I can understand you knowingly "borrowed' that line. That picture reminds me of the wide variety of creatures in the garden. The paths of the moles are very distinct. Like a machine making a road as your reference to the highway. I like this piece.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
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Thanks, EIP
Comment from BOO ghost
ha ha! my cats devour these dirt diggers with vigor and vengeance. Like this: The winding subterranean highway
painstakingly plowed beneath the sod,
Moles! moles!
BOO-tastic!
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
ha ha! my cats devour these dirt diggers with vigor and vengeance. Like this: The winding subterranean highway
painstakingly plowed beneath the sod,
Moles! moles!
BOO-tastic!
Comment Written 16-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
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Thanks, BOO, for the nice review. Bill
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Bill. Well, I like the poem a lot. Descriptive of this guy and the damage done to lawns. Is that his face? Oh yucky! And look at those gigantic claws. I hope I don't get any moles in my yard. The first two lines are especially well done. Marilyn
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
Hi Bill. Well, I like the poem a lot. Descriptive of this guy and the damage done to lawns. Is that his face? Oh yucky! And look at those gigantic claws. I hope I don't get any moles in my yard. The first two lines are especially well done. Marilyn
Comment Written 16-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
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Thanks, Marilyn, for giving this a look. Bill
Comment from nomi338
He may be the conqueror for now, but if I can just line up his head with my baseball bat. Pow, zoom, bap! Off to the moon his head would go. Yeah I know, I'm a beast. I'm a beast and all that, but a guy gets tired of fighting the losing battle of trying to have a decent lawn while fighting against a mole who lives for the most part below ground and does not have to look at the mess he creates.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
He may be the conqueror for now, but if I can just line up his head with my baseball bat. Pow, zoom, bap! Off to the moon his head would go. Yeah I know, I'm a beast. I'm a beast and all that, but a guy gets tired of fighting the losing battle of trying to have a decent lawn while fighting against a mole who lives for the most part below ground and does not have to look at the mess he creates.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
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Thanks, nomi
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes my friend you have done well I liked this well written fun piece the closing line the conquering mole well done regards Jill
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
Yes my friend you have done well I liked this well written fun piece the closing line the conquering mole well done regards Jill
Comment Written 16-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
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Thanks, Mrs P
Comment from damommy
Interesting. I've seen pictures of this mole. Very strange looking little guy.
I like the phrase "The winding subterranean highway painstakingly plowed beneath the sod."
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
Interesting. I've seen pictures of this mole. Very strange looking little guy.
I like the phrase "The winding subterranean highway painstakingly plowed beneath the sod."
Comment Written 16-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
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Thanks, da
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That is so clever, Bill. I loved the metaphor. I had a mole in my lawn, his job was to see how many mounds he could create in it. Drove me potty! Between the mole, the worm and the ant, it's a wonder we are safe to walk out! Well done, I enjoyed this one. :) Sandra x
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
That is so clever, Bill. I loved the metaphor. I had a mole in my lawn, his job was to see how many mounds he could create in it. Drove me potty! Between the mole, the worm and the ant, it's a wonder we are safe to walk out! Well done, I enjoyed this one. :) Sandra x
Comment Written 16-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
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Thanks, Sandra