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Viewing comments for Chapter 34 "Collide. "From victim to survivor of abuse.
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Comment from Dawn Munro
Shirley, I LOVE this poem. I'm afraid I don't know the form, so I am unqualified (once again) to offer anything but my own feelings about it. The only tiny suggestion I might have is the "frigid" winds - while it's understandable, I'm not sure the contrasting imagery works as well as "fright'ning" might, simply because I envision flame and suddenly it's not heat...? But I LOVE this, regardless, and the alliteration is notable - not at all forced-sounding, as some alliteration can be, IMO. But if you don't agree about "frigid" - ignore me - it might be just me - seriously!
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2017
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Shirley, I LOVE this poem. I'm afraid I don't know the form, so I am unqualified (once again) to offer anything but my own feelings about it. The only tiny suggestion I might have is the "frigid" winds - while it's understandable, I'm not sure the contrasting imagery works as well as "fright'ning" might, simply because I envision flame and suddenly it's not heat...? But I LOVE this, regardless, and the alliteration is notable - not at all forced-sounding, as some alliteration can be, IMO. But if you don't agree about "frigid" - ignore me - it might be just me - seriously!
Comment Written 19-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2017
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Hi Dawn .
Thank you for revieing my poem.
I appreciate your suggestions.
:-) Shirley
Comment from Abby Wilson-hand
LIKE WHAT YOU HAVE PENNED HERE
IF THIS IS A CONTEST ENRTRY GOOD LUCK
GREAT IMAGERY TO GO WITH THIS WRITE
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
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LIKE WHAT YOU HAVE PENNED HERE
IF THIS IS A CONTEST ENRTRY GOOD LUCK
GREAT IMAGERY TO GO WITH THIS WRITE
Comment Written 16-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
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Thank you Abby.
Much appreciated.
:-) Shirley
Comment from Mustang Patty
thank you so much for sharing this poignant poem about post traumatic disorder. It often happens that a trigger can bring back all of the pain and flashbacks. I know that along with me, others on the site can relate to this well,
~patty~
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017
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thank you so much for sharing this poignant poem about post traumatic disorder. It often happens that a trigger can bring back all of the pain and flashbacks. I know that along with me, others on the site can relate to this well,
~patty~
Comment Written 15-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017
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Thank you for reviewing.
Your time is appreciated.
:-) Shirley
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written cameo poem. I am not familiar with the format but it seems you did it right. The topic you choose is sad but it is happening all over the world. The few that has not those memories are lucky indeed.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017
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A very well-written cameo poem. I am not familiar with the format but it seems you did it right. The topic you choose is sad but it is happening all over the world. The few that has not those memories are lucky indeed.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017
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Thank you Sandra.
I appreciate your continued support and kind review.
:-) Shirley
Comment from gudbjorg
I think this well-phrased write and has a clear and important message weaved into it.The Style is new to me but it feels right and has an excellent tone and flow. I really like this kind of write accompanied with a matching picture. Well done.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017
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I think this well-phrased write and has a clear and important message weaved into it.The Style is new to me but it feels right and has an excellent tone and flow. I really like this kind of write accompanied with a matching picture. Well done.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017
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Thank you for a love.y review.
Your time is appreciated.
:-) Shirley