Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi Bill, Oh poor Mister Fly, he did need a break, but that Mrs Fly should be eaten by a spider was unfortunate. She should have watched the cocktails, but it gave him a well needed rest. Hehe. All the best. Ulla:))

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017

Mrs. Fly met the spider on the web.

reply by Ulla on 10-Aug-2017

Hahaha. I see!

Comment from nomi338

Excellent

It has been said more times than I can count, "Karma is a female dog that bites." Many husbands who labor nonstop in an effort to please our better halves, deserve a rest at some point. While we would not wish that our better halves get devoured by a spider, they do need to cut us some slack at some point.

 Comment Written 09-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Aug-2017

That's the truth.

Comment from frogbook

Excellent

Oh, what an evil little frog tale tis one is!. Haha. Guess the poor guy needed a break, and she needed to fly more carefully. Exquisite piece of imagination showcased in this humorous little gem.

 Comment Written 08-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017

Thanks, FB, for the kind review. Bill

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

LOL, Loved this! I thought for a while it was for children, then as I read on, realised it wasn't. The ending cracked me up, it was hilarious! Excellent poem, Bill, I really had a giggle with this, Well done! :) Sandra x

 Comment Written 08-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017

Thank you, Sandra.

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Yes this is well written my friend I suppose Mrs fly got her comeuppance in the end well done liked the fun and originality regards Jill

 Comment Written 08-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017

Hard to feel bad for that gadfly

Comment from Mitchell Brontė

Excellent

Hi Bill
Really enjoyed this hilarious poem, which flowed effortlessly,
lovely rhythm and rhyme throughout with some wonderful funny lines within.
I particularly enjoyed the last stanza which completed this excellent poem tremendously well
Mitchell

 Comment Written 08-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017

Thank you, YNWA

Comment from damommy

Excellent

Serves her right. She partied while he worked.

I love "Fly Estate." They must have been rich flies.

Keep 'em coming. I love these.

 Comment Written 08-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017

Thank you, da

Comment from kiwigirl2821

Excellent

Hi Bill. I'm not sure I got the last line. But I'm real sure Mrs. Fly got hers and properly too haha. Wrapped in silk half eaten. Love this grooly line of reasoning. xoxo Kiwi

 Comment Written 08-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017

The last line was extra long to make it funnier

Comment from Possummagic

Excellent

I hope he enjoyed his nap whilst his dearest had become spider food! I love the comic manner which you use in some of your poems. I love the beautiful words and the way you craft your work in all of your poetry. I can learn much from you by simply reading your work.

 Comment Written 08-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017

Thank you, PM, for the upbeat review. Bill

Comment from marybell1

Excellent

I enjoyed reading your poem "Fly World 7". You rhymed it well though your last line appeared a little long. You may wish to review this.
All the best.
Marybell1.

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 Comment Written 08-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017

Thanks, Marybell, for reviewing this. The final line is purposely long to make it stand out.

reply by marybell1 on 08-Aug-2017

You are most welcome.
Sincerely
Marybell1.