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Viewing comments for Chapter 35 "The Castle"Eclectic style
10 total reviews
Comment from oliver818
I enjoyed your little
Story. It flows well and I like the characters in it. The setting is well described and the plot is interesting. Thanks for sharing and have a really great day
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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I enjoyed your little
Story. It flows well and I like the characters in it. The setting is well described and the plot is interesting. Thanks for sharing and have a really great day
Comment Written 19-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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Hi, Oliver! I really appreciate your review, and I'm glad you enjoyed my short fiction story. Have areally great day yourself
Trisha
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written story. Many relationships start off well and seems to flourish until the one or both start to control the other. Sometimes the unhappy conditions can be escaped from, other times there is no outcome.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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A very well-written story. Many relationships start off well and seems to flourish until the one or both start to control the other. Sometimes the unhappy conditions can be escaped from, other times there is no outcome.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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Thank you Sandra for your supportive review. It's much appreciated"
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
'on' his planet
OH dear this is an exceptional piece of writing. I love the start of what was thought of as love, then the heartache that destroyed her, then hope that restored her.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2017
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'on' his planet
OH dear this is an exceptional piece of writing. I love the start of what was thought of as love, then the heartache that destroyed her, then hope that restored her.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2017
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I struggled with 'in' or 'on' . I don't know why you didn't get notified, but thanks for reviewing. Stories are a newer style for me.
Comment from Mustang Patty
a tale of life, love, redemption, and the restoration of a soul. I liked the way you wove a bit of fairy tale and a bit of mythology into this piece. Well done, Trisha. Thank you for sharing,
~patty~
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2017
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a tale of life, love, redemption, and the restoration of a soul. I liked the way you wove a bit of fairy tale and a bit of mythology into this piece. Well done, Trisha. Thank you for sharing,
~patty~
Comment Written 18-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2017
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Thanks for a very encouraging review, patty. It is a relatively new genre for me, so I am very happy you enjoyed it.
Hugs, Trisha
Comment from Asem.inspirations
Good morning Trisha:
This is a quite interesting and creative story your have written. Some of it is quite poetic too, as you describe some of the fantasy.
There is a lot of this story that I can personally relate to but what a story. Excellent!...Oh and I love your new profile photo. That is a beautiful cat. I always said that if I was going to own a cat it had to be one as fluffy as this one.
Hey I wanted to ask you did my latest post - post in your messages. It's called, "Be Still My Heart 2"
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2017
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Good morning Trisha:
This is a quite interesting and creative story your have written. Some of it is quite poetic too, as you describe some of the fantasy.
There is a lot of this story that I can personally relate to but what a story. Excellent!...Oh and I love your new profile photo. That is a beautiful cat. I always said that if I was going to own a cat it had to be one as fluffy as this one.
Hey I wanted to ask you did my latest post - post in your messages. It's called, "Be Still My Heart 2"
Comment Written 17-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2017
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No, I did not get that poem. After some detective work (LOL) it turned out to be a blind entry contest. No notifications sent. I will review it for you.
Thank you, thank you! I used to have a white cat called Snowy (original!) she was short haired and I love the fuzzy ones.
Your complimentary review was appreciated, as always.
Hugs, hugs for your day, Trisha
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
A broad stroke metaphor here for an unhappy/abusive relationship and hope at the end. It is a little passive in places but does nothing to hurt the story.
lest a piece was lost.. - delete the double punctuation here.
toward her room.Help had arrived - spacing here.
back to his castle called 'Restore' - end punctuation needed here.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2017
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Hi there,
A broad stroke metaphor here for an unhappy/abusive relationship and hope at the end. It is a little passive in places but does nothing to hurt the story.
lest a piece was lost.. - delete the double punctuation here.
toward her room.Help had arrived - spacing here.
back to his castle called 'Restore' - end punctuation needed here.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2017
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Well hello! It's nice to be honored by your review, as you are one of the best known reviewers on FS. I appreciated your eagle eyed scan for typos. Your suggestion about "passive" parts was duly noted. I have now corrected the punctuation errors, and I sincerely thank you for helping.
Trisha
Comment from royowen
Probably a little short, the concept of the story is fairly broad based, the reader would need time to grasp the varied perceptions in the short tale. One needs a little time to be sympathetic to both the plot and the characters. But well done, good effort, blessings, Roy
Typo (less) a piece was lost. Lest?
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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Probably a little short, the concept of the story is fairly broad based, the reader would need time to grasp the varied perceptions in the short tale. One needs a little time to be sympathetic to both the plot and the characters. But well done, good effort, blessings, Roy
Typo (less) a piece was lost. Lest?
Comment Written 16-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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Typo? Yes, and I appreciated your view Roy, thanks for reading it.
Trisha
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Well done
Comment from Cindy Warren
What a sad story. Does anybody really live happily ever after? I'm glad she was rescued and I hope she chooses her knights more carefully on the future. They have way of turning into toads.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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What a sad story. Does anybody really live happily ever after? I'm glad she was rescued and I hope she chooses her knights more carefully on the future. They have way of turning into toads.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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Hi Cindy, I think it takes work on both sides, but also happiness comes from within ourselves.The maiden only learned that too late and the rescue knight was a professional ( according to the story in my head,) not explained. I sincerely thank you for your review .
Hugs,Trisha
Comment from Heather Knight
This is beautiful, full of symbolism and very well written. It's a fairy tale for grown ups that mirrors the life of many (unfortunately).
I have enjoyed reading it very much.
Thanks.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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This is beautiful, full of symbolism and very well written. It's a fairy tale for grown ups that mirrors the life of many (unfortunately).
I have enjoyed reading it very much.
Thanks.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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Thank you. I m just trying trying prose for a change.Your review is special, because you are a great prose writer. Much appreciated
Hugs, Trisha
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You're welcome. I really enjoyed your post.
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Anytime, I hope!
Comment from rjuselius
This is an intriguing piece of prose dear bucket list! I think I can slightly relate as my ex was horrible and my new fiance just the opposite.
Thanks for sharing!
Blessings and a big squeeze!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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This is an intriguing piece of prose dear bucket list! I think I can slightly relate as my ex was horrible and my new fiance just the opposite.
Thanks for sharing!
Blessings and a big squeeze!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 16-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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Thanks Rebecca, I've just got into prose writing. Imagination just oozed on this one. I'm glad you found it of interest.i wish you all the happiness with your new love. I very much appreciated your review.
Big hug squeeze back
Trisha