Seagull
It's not always what it seems!15 total reviews
Comment from Curly Girly
Congratulations on this contest win. You did a great job. It told a story and it made sense. You made every word count--all began with an 's'. Fantastic!
I like:
Seriously spiced, strong stomach surge,
Spluttering, spitting, sorely scorched,
Sudden swoop . . . soothing submerge.
A great ending.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2017
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Congratulations on this contest win. You did a great job. It told a story and it made sense. You made every word count--all began with an 's'. Fantastic!
I like:
Seriously spiced, strong stomach surge,
Spluttering, spitting, sorely scorched,
Sudden swoop . . . soothing submerge.
A great ending.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2017
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Thank you so much for your time and encouraging review. Truly appreciated : )
Comment from Irish Rain
Well, I can certainly see why this won first place. A wonderful little write about that sneaky, thiefing seagull!! I love my sausage...no mercy, ha ha. Blessings...
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2017
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Well, I can certainly see why this won first place. A wonderful little write about that sneaky, thiefing seagull!! I love my sausage...no mercy, ha ha. Blessings...
Comment Written 21-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2017
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Thank you very much. I had fun writing it : )
Comment from Dean Kuch
Now that's quite A MOUTHFUL, alliteratively speaking of course, Kazzawin, and I ain't even that seagull with a spicy sausage in his beak!
It's pretty easy to see why this ran away with the contest.
Congrats on your win.
~Dean
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2017
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Now that's quite A MOUTHFUL, alliteratively speaking of course, Kazzawin, and I ain't even that seagull with a spicy sausage in his beak!
It's pretty easy to see why this ran away with the contest.
Congrats on your win.
~Dean
Comment Written 21-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2017
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Thanks Dean, it was a lot of fun and I'm pleased as punch with a first place : )
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You bet, Kaz. :)
Comment from sunnilicious
I completely understand how you took home the winning blue ribbon in this contest. You S-word alliteration is fantastic. Very descriptive. Your action word choices make this work together well. Enjoyable to read. Memorable.
However... Edit wise, I'm not sure how to feel about you mixing past (stolen, swallowed, spiced, scorched) and present. I say play around and turn this poem completely into all present tense. It'll make great turn amazing if you want. Just a thought.
Have a great week :)
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2017
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I completely understand how you took home the winning blue ribbon in this contest. You S-word alliteration is fantastic. Very descriptive. Your action word choices make this work together well. Enjoyable to read. Memorable.
However... Edit wise, I'm not sure how to feel about you mixing past (stolen, swallowed, spiced, scorched) and present. I say play around and turn this poem completely into all present tense. It'll make great turn amazing if you want. Just a thought.
Have a great week :)
Comment Written 21-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2017
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Thank you for your thoughts and suggestions and for a great review.
I always appreciate people's ideas and I will certainly look back at the poem with those in mind : )
Comment from JDRBAR
Alliterations are difficult at best but you managed to do a very good job of it while making sense of the words. Good luck with this in the contest. I wanted to try it but missed the deadline.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2017
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Alliterations are difficult at best but you managed to do a very good job of it while making sense of the words. Good luck with this in the contest. I wanted to try it but missed the deadline.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2017
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Thank you very much for your encouraging words : )
Comment from lyenochka
Really impressive! I know that 'S' words are the most abundant in English so it was really smart to use it for alliteration. But to tell the story so well and poetically is super!
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2017
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Really impressive! I know that 'S' words are the most abundant in English so it was really smart to use it for alliteration. But to tell the story so well and poetically is super!
Comment Written 20-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2017
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Wow, thank you so much for your lovely review and 6 stars. I am truly grateful : )
Comment from kathleenspalding
All words start with the same letter, and it even rhymes - very impressive!!!! Cute alliteration poem flows well and tells a funny story. Excellent choice of artwork. Well done!
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2017
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All words start with the same letter, and it even rhymes - very impressive!!!! Cute alliteration poem flows well and tells a funny story. Excellent choice of artwork. Well done!
Comment Written 19-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2017
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Thank you so much for your kind review : )
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You're welcome
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
This was a cute story and it made total sense when read. Very well done using the 's' and loved the part of the supper and saussage. Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2017
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This was a cute story and it made total sense when read. Very well done using the 's' and loved the part of the supper and saussage. Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 19-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2017
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Thank you so much for your kind review : )
Comment from Bill Schott
This alliterative poem, Seagull, sure takes the S through its paces. I know it must be tough keeping a theme going with this restrictive necessity. Nice job with this challenge.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2017
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This alliterative poem, Seagull, sure takes the S through its paces. I know it must be tough keeping a theme going with this restrictive necessity. Nice job with this challenge.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2017
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Thank you so much for your kind review : )
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes you have done well for the contest I imagine this wasn't an easy prompt at all I enjoyed you built the poem very well good luck regards Jill
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2017
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Yes you have done well for the contest I imagine this wasn't an easy prompt at all I enjoyed you built the poem very well good luck regards Jill
Comment Written 19-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2017
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Thank you so much for your kind review : )