2017 JAPANESE POETRY
Viewing comments for Chapter 39 "Haiku (Valentine's bouquets)"A collection of Japanese poetry
24 total reviews
Comment from Mark Schardine
We can make many comments about this poem. Should we see it as flower sellers who overestimated the demand, or a reflection of the fact that couples do not live as harmoniously as they should? You give us many ideas to consider.
reply by the author on 26-May-2017
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We can make many comments about this poem. Should we see it as flower sellers who overestimated the demand, or a reflection of the fact that couples do not live as harmoniously as they should? You give us many ideas to consider.
Comment Written 26-May-2017
reply by the author on 26-May-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from l.raven
Hi Gypsy, I never thought about it...but it is so true...all the flowers left over just wilt and get thrown away...so very sad.... good to see you in my PM Queen of Haiku...I hope all is well with you...I have been busy on my house...and hope to be done soon...I love your poem sweet girl...take care...love ya you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Hi Gypsy, I never thought about it...but it is so true...all the flowers left over just wilt and get thrown away...so very sad.... good to see you in my PM Queen of Haiku...I hope all is well with you...I have been busy on my house...and hope to be done soon...I love your poem sweet girl...take care...love ya you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Hello sweetie pie, I am okay. It's always good to hear fro you. Luv ya
Thank you for the review and kind words.
Gypsy
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so good to hear sweet angel...you are always sooooo welcome...xxoo love..
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi Gypsy, Yes I wonder how many bouquets are still waiting to be purchased. Your Haiku makes one think and good word choice. Cheers Christineð???ð???
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Hi Gypsy, Yes I wonder how many bouquets are still waiting to be purchased. Your Haiku makes one think and good word choice. Cheers Christineð???ð???
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Cheers :) thank you for the review and kind words sweetie pie.
Gypsy
Comment from Mustang Patty
Gypsy; this is so sad! I can see the wilted flowers waiting for a buyer who will never come. The withering blooms will soon blow away--turned to dust by time,
~patty~
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Gypsy; this is so sad! I can see the wilted flowers waiting for a buyer who will never come. The withering blooms will soon blow away--turned to dust by time,
~patty~
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Yeah... Thank you for the review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from emptypage
Making the bouquets is more of a waste.
I don't like the... something is off. There's no "aha."
And I don't see a point at all. What are you trying to say?
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Making the bouquets is more of a waste.
I don't like the... something is off. There's no "aha."
And I don't see a point at all. What are you trying to say?
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 23-May-2017
Comment from Mark Valentine
This is one that you have to let sink in. I love the metaphor of unbought (and ungiven) bouquets - for me it speaks to all the missed chances at saying "I love you" or doing an act of kindness - love was meant to be given to others and letting it sit on the shelf is a "waste".
Lovely poem! And, in the spirit of its message, let me say that you are a phenomenal poet, and a gift to all of us here on Fanstory!
reply by the author on 23-May-2017
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This is one that you have to let sink in. I love the metaphor of unbought (and ungiven) bouquets - for me it speaks to all the missed chances at saying "I love you" or doing an act of kindness - love was meant to be given to others and letting it sit on the shelf is a "waste".
Lovely poem! And, in the spirit of its message, let me say that you are a phenomenal poet, and a gift to all of us here on Fanstory!
Comment Written 23-May-2017
reply by the author on 23-May-2017
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Yes! You got the satori....the message. Thank you very much for your review and kind words and the six stars! I am overwhelmed by your exceptional interpretation and kindness. Thank you!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written haiku. The day after Valentine's is the worst day ever when the leftover bouquets have to be thrown out when no one wants it until next year.
reply by the author on 22-May-2017
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A very well-written haiku. The day after Valentine's is the worst day ever when the leftover bouquets have to be thrown out when no one wants it until next year.
Comment Written 22-May-2017
reply by the author on 22-May-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from bookishfabler
Those must be some rotten flowers if they came from Valentine's Day. Gee it's almost June. LOL. Very lovely. Sometimes I find it hard to review these short Haiku and similar poems. My review is way longer than the poem.
hugs Heidi
reply by the author on 22-May-2017
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Those must be some rotten flowers if they came from Valentine's Day. Gee it's almost June. LOL. Very lovely. Sometimes I find it hard to review these short Haiku and similar poems. My review is way longer than the poem.
hugs Heidi
Comment Written 22-May-2017
reply by the author on 22-May-2017
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Thank you
Comment from Lindagail Hall
Flowers being the symbol of love all over the world, love the last final word, I have always said I don't won't flowers at my funeral as I won't be able to smell them. I watch men carrying bunches thinking he must have a lot to be forgiven for. Your too good at these.
reply by the author on 22-May-2017
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Flowers being the symbol of love all over the world, love the last final word, I have always said I don't won't flowers at my funeral as I won't be able to smell them. I watch men carrying bunches thinking he must have a lot to be forgiven for. Your too good at these.
Comment Written 22-May-2017
reply by the author on 22-May-2017
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Thank you for the review.
Gypsy
Comment from MizKat
Hi Gypsy,
I always look forward to reading your work. You are great at writing
short poems that are always nice to read. I should try to write smaller
ones too.
Kat
reply by the author on 22-May-2017
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Hi Gypsy,
I always look forward to reading your work. You are great at writing
short poems that are always nice to read. I should try to write smaller
ones too.
Kat
Comment Written 22-May-2017
reply by the author on 22-May-2017
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Thank you
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You're very welcome, my friend. Kat