Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is a very interesting tanka poem you have penned about leaving your home town starting somewhere new. You used very good descriptive wording and great imagery from the art work. Blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 09-May-2017

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reply by the author on 09-May-2017

Thanks, Teri.

Comment from nomi338

Excellent

Heaven help you if you are from the middle east and hope to resettle in the US. If you identify as Christian you may be OK, but if you identify as Muslim, you may find the going a little bit tougher. Such is the way things are in the world today, thanks to radical Islam.

 Comment Written 09-May-2017

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reply by the author on 09-May-2017

Thanks, nomi, for responding to this one. Bill

Comment from Natalie Walker

Excellent

This is a nice tanka poem. It tells a story in just a few words. It conveys the feeling of leaving home in search of a new community.

I didn't notice any errors or typos.

Nice work!

 Comment Written 08-May-2017

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reply by the author on 08-May-2017

Thanks, Natalie

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi Bill, it's a very good tanka with a strong message. They're leaving the area where they live in search of a better life and a better community. I liked it a lot. All the best. Ulla:))

 Comment Written 08-May-2017

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reply by the author on 08-May-2017

Thanks, Ulla.