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2017 JAPANESE POETRY

Viewing comments for Chapter 31 "haiku (after harvest)"
A collection of Japanese poetry

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Comment from Joan E.
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Thank you for sharing the perfect harvest scene to match your words. Your abundant use of alliteration is very effective. Happy weekend when it arrives- Joan

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2017

reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
    Thank you for the review and kind words. You have a nice weekend too, honey.
    Gypsy
Comment from l.raven
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HI Gypsy, a farmer dream...rain...not a flood...just a gentle rain...I love the feel of this poem...and the picture is calming...so very nicely written my sweet friend...so good to see you...love you Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2017

reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
    Thank ya, darlin', luv ya

    gypsy hugs
reply by l.raven on 27-Apr-2017
    your so welcome...love ya too...goodnight...going to bed...xxoo
Comment from Thomas Bowling
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It reminds me of fall in Ohio where I grew up. It's strange how green fields can quickly turn brown after the first frost.

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2017

reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
    thank you, my friend

    gypsy
Comment from judiverse
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The black and white picture, with all the clouds, really goes along with the idea in your poem. Winter must be a depressing time for the farmers. They have spare time, as the crops are in. They are concerned about taking care of the animals in extreme winter weather. You mention the daylight dripping away. The added hours of darkness may also make someone depressed. Nice alliteration with fallow fields. That description works so well because there's not much going on in winter. judi

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2017

reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
    Thank you for reviewing my poem, my friend, you are very kind.
    Gypsy
reply by judiverse on 26-Apr-2017
    You're welcome. May the writing force be with you. judi
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
    heh heh... may the force be with you, honey.
reply by judiverse on 26-Apr-2017
    I like to use that expression a lot. judi
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
    it's cool, we must be about the same age... same generation :)
reply by judiverse on 27-Apr-2017
    You're welcome. I'm sure you're much younger. I do remember what it was like on the farm. judi
Comment from bookishfabler
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Very nice. Since it is now spring and here in Florida it really feels more like summer, it is refreshing to read about autumn. Very well done.
hugs Heidi

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2017

reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
    Thank you for reviewing my poem, my friend, you are very kind.
    Gypsy
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
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A haiku about my least favorite time of year--when it grows cold and days are so short. Good image in the first two lines. Strong satori at the end. Well done, my friend~DEbbie

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2017

Comment from Mark Schardine
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You capture that moment when nothing more remains to be harvested, and the fields seem empty. Only an experienced farmer knows how to appreciate this moment.

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2017

reply by the author on 24-Apr-2017
    Thank you very much for reading, my friend :)

    take care,


    Gypsy Haijin Sensei
    Fanstory Instructor and Poet
    Member of the Haiku Society of America
    ~*~ a new haiku class every month ~*~
    <>Haiga class starts on May 1st <>
Comment from Hitcher
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I worked the land in Holland for a few years and your poem reminds me of winter's cold chilling touch, the cold beauty of Barron fields after many abundant harvests.
impressive 4-8-3(i like that) haiku Gypsy!

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2017

reply by the author on 25-Apr-2017
    Thank you for reading, my friend, you are very kind, AND thank you for the six stars... I am grateful.

    Gypsy
Comment from Gert sherwood
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Hello Gypsy,
I can relate to your haiku
sounds like Autumn here in Vermont after harvesting is done (empty) fallowed fields

Gert

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2017

reply by the author on 24-Apr-2017
    Thank you very much for reading, my friend :)

    take care,


    Gypsy Haijin Sensei
    Fanstory Instructor and Poet
    Member of the Haiku Society of America
    ~*~ a new haiku class every month ~*~
    <>Haiga class starts on May 1st <>
Comment from Marykelly
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There is a nice juxtaposition in this poem of light and dark, plenty and little. The verbs drips and creeps give animation to the whole piece.

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2017

reply by the author on 24-Apr-2017
    Thank you very much for reading, my friend :)

    take care,


    Gypsy Haijin Sensei
    Fanstory Instructor and Poet
    Member of the Haiku Society of America
    ~*~ a new haiku class every month ~*~
    <>Haiga class starts on May 1st <>