Aiona's Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 37 "Harvey Plunge"Because my portfolio is too messy and I have OCD.
9 total reviews
Comment from Sis Cat
A most fine clerihew--a form I have never heard of before. It is humorous and witty like a limerick, but consists of two couplets and a specific rhyming scheme. Poem feels classic like something out of the nineteenth century. It has a dark nursery rhyme quality about it that I can imagine girls playing jump rope singing.
Thank you for sharing your well deserved win.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2017
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A most fine clerihew--a form I have never heard of before. It is humorous and witty like a limerick, but consists of two couplets and a specific rhyming scheme. Poem feels classic like something out of the nineteenth century. It has a dark nursery rhyme quality about it that I can imagine girls playing jump rope singing.
Thank you for sharing your well deserved win.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Sis Cat.
Comment from Halfree
Oh well, a bit on nonsense is welcomed at times. This was a good way to start a cold day, cold winds...a good day to stay inside and to read some nonsense...enjoyed the poem.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2017
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Oh well, a bit on nonsense is welcomed at times. This was a good way to start a cold day, cold winds...a good day to stay inside and to read some nonsense...enjoyed the poem.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2017
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Thank you, Halfree. It's cold where I am too.
Comment from judester
Hey you, congratulations on your win, it was a great entry and I thought it was a fun style to write, cheers, judester. Have a lucky sunday,
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2017
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Hey you, congratulations on your win, it was a great entry and I thought it was a fun style to write, cheers, judester. Have a lucky sunday,
Comment Written 12-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2017
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Thank you, judester!
Comment from winnona
A well-written contest entry. I think you completed the challenge fo the contest well. Your words flowed well line to line combining easily and forming the message of the poem for the reader.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2017
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A well-written contest entry. I think you completed the challenge fo the contest well. Your words flowed well line to line combining easily and forming the message of the poem for the reader.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2017
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Thank you, winnona.
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
A well written Clerihew writing prompt entry that sees the protagonist as a sponge which fell into a well and as a result was made to swell.
The work earns its Clerihew texture through its traditional aabb rhyming scheme of the two couplets. Equally accruable to it is its dexterous use of the rhymes: plunge and sponge; well and swell which truly makes it a comic verse.
Excellent work! Bravo!
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2017
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A well written Clerihew writing prompt entry that sees the protagonist as a sponge which fell into a well and as a result was made to swell.
The work earns its Clerihew texture through its traditional aabb rhyming scheme of the two couplets. Equally accruable to it is its dexterous use of the rhymes: plunge and sponge; well and swell which truly makes it a comic verse.
Excellent work! Bravo!
Comment Written 10-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2017
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Thank you, Lloyd.
Comment from Sixty70
Very well done! I like the juxtaposition of 'sponge' and 'well'. Did Harvey's wife 'swell' up with water? Reminded me of nursery rhymes!
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2017
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Very well done! I like the juxtaposition of 'sponge' and 'well'. Did Harvey's wife 'swell' up with water? Reminded me of nursery rhymes!
Comment Written 10-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2017
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Thank you, Sixty70. Because of this contest, I realized that a lot of nursery rhymes are Clerihews!
Comment from Dean Kuch
Hahaha, this is pretty clever, Anonymous Poet.
It is definitely one of the best entries I have read that have been entered in this contest thus far.
I'll be watching for your entry when it comes time to vote.
Funny stuff!
~Dean :}
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2017
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Hahaha, this is pretty clever, Anonymous Poet.
It is definitely one of the best entries I have read that have been entered in this contest thus far.
I'll be watching for your entry when it comes time to vote.
Funny stuff!
~Dean :}
Comment Written 10-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2017
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Thank you, Dean.
Comment from Benny Beeharry
Hi friend, this is a very good write. A goid message. She may be a sponge, bt she is still there. She is missed when she is not there ..into the well.
Danny Jock
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2017
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Hi friend, this is a very good write. A goid message. She may be a sponge, bt she is still there. She is missed when she is not there ..into the well.
Danny Jock
Comment Written 10-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2017
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Thank you, Danny.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I have to say never come across this form before. it really feels like something someone just wrote and went I know, let's call this a... LOL
I like the full commitment to the idea here which follows through both couplets.
best of luck to you.
GMG
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2017
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Hi there,
I have to say never come across this form before. it really feels like something someone just wrote and went I know, let's call this a... LOL
I like the full commitment to the idea here which follows through both couplets.
best of luck to you.
GMG
Comment Written 10-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2017
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LOL! Thanks, giraffmang