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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
LOL!!! Absolutemente perfecto! Loved this one, you got him back in a way that you'd not thought of! Loved it. I'm enjoying these little stories, Bill. Well done again. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2022
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LOL!!! Absolutemente perfecto! Loved this one, you got him back in a way that you'd not thought of! Loved it. I'm enjoying these little stories, Bill. Well done again. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 29-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2022
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Thank you, Sandra.
Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
Speaking of "Perfecto." I love this teensy tiny story of revenge. Good use of the fifty with nothing wasted nothing omitted. Fun to read. - Wendy
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2017
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Speaking of "Perfecto." I love this teensy tiny story of revenge. Good use of the fifty with nothing wasted nothing omitted. Fun to read. - Wendy
Comment Written 09-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2017
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Thanks, Wendy.
Comment from Aiona
Heh! It took me a while, but I see what you did there. Very cute story, and funny! It is a story of retribution, with a twist, and ANOTHER twist! All in only fifty words. Pretty damn swank.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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Heh! It took me a while, but I see what you did there. Very cute story, and funny! It is a story of retribution, with a twist, and ANOTHER twist! All in only fifty words. Pretty damn swank.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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Thanks, Aiona, for the excellent review. Bill
Comment from BeasPeas
The plot worked out perfectly anyway, even though it wasn't the intended outcome. Colorful display of your little story. Fun to read and brought a smile. Marilyn
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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The plot worked out perfectly anyway, even though it wasn't the intended outcome. Colorful display of your little story. Fun to read and brought a smile. Marilyn
Comment Written 09-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Marilyn, for the excellent review. Bill
Comment from lyenochka
That's a pretty hilarious story with a twist and still the narrator's intended result all told in fifty words! That is quite an achievement! Good use of tone in the narrator's language which really sounds like a young boy.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
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That's a pretty hilarious story with a twist and still the narrator's intended result all told in fifty words! That is quite an achievement! Good use of tone in the narrator's language which really sounds like a young boy.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
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Thank you for the terrific review.
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You had my vote and I appreciated the laugh it gave.
Comment from winnona
a well-written contest entry, I think you completed the challenge of the contest well
The story flows well from beginning to the end. Your artwork completed it well. One has to see the humor in the story also. It could not have been your brother in the bathroom first,
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
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a well-written contest entry, I think you completed the challenge of the contest well
The story flows well from beginning to the end. Your artwork completed it well. One has to see the humor in the story also. It could not have been your brother in the bathroom first,
Comment Written 09-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
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Thank you, winnona, for the kind review. Bill
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
LOL! This is a splendid entry. You set the reader up nicely thinking it is your brother who will open the lid and then deliver a bang up ending as you were setting your brother up for punishments all along. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
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LOL! This is a splendid entry. You set the reader up nicely thinking it is your brother who will open the lid and then deliver a bang up ending as you were setting your brother up for punishments all along. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Monica, for the excellent review.
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My pleasure. It seems safer to read than write these days.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Well, on the downside you got your father with this goofy gag instead of you brother, Dave, whom you wanted to scare half to death, and rightly so, I'm certain.
On the positive side, your dad knows a great practical joke when he sees or becomes a part of one, so he's not going to kill you, heh-heh.
Best wishes to you in the voting.
~Dean :)
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
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Well, on the downside you got your father with this goofy gag instead of you brother, Dave, whom you wanted to scare half to death, and rightly so, I'm certain.
On the positive side, your dad knows a great practical joke when he sees or becomes a part of one, so he's not going to kill you, heh-heh.
Best wishes to you in the voting.
~Dean :)
Comment Written 09-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Dean, for the fun review.
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My pleasure. :)
Comment from w.j.debi
Seems David must have a reputation as a prankster or dad would not have automatically assumed the blame should be assigned to him. Brother gets the revenge after all. Good luck in the contest with your humorous tale.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017
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Seems David must have a reputation as a prankster or dad would not have automatically assumed the blame should be assigned to him. Brother gets the revenge after all. Good luck in the contest with your humorous tale.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017
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Thank you, wj, for the excellent review. Bill
Comment from Marykelly
Pranks have a way of sometimes backfiring on the prankster and in this story you certainly discovered that on several levels. Is your brother still laughing?
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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017
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Pranks have a way of sometimes backfiring on the prankster and in this story you certainly discovered that on several levels. Is your brother still laughing?
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Comment Written 08-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Marykelly, for the great review. Bill