Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Great message. There is such a reduced amount of pollinators these days. One summer I remember hand pollinating my zucchini plants using a brush going from male to femal flowers.

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2016

Thanks for the review. I did the same here in Tanzania wit my vanilla plant. When I get backto Vermont tis summer I am going to devote some land to wildflowers, hummingbird feeders, suet, bird baths... all the goodies that they love. Cheers, j

Comment from Quantum Traveler

Excellent

An Interesting Weave you have going here Judester.
I Love the Lily and you have blended it well with background color to enhance it's beauty.
This Sonnet weaves a Tale of Beauty that Once Was and no longer prevails.
The Beauty of Fireflies...Dragonflies...Songbirds...and...Polka Dot Lady Bugs and the Sweet Fragance of Soft Raindrops dancing on Lily Blossoms.
Gone are the days of beauty Silenced by the Mutations of caustic poisons.

The other side of the Weave I guess would be the Beautiful Young Lady that has been Muted to the Caustic Poisons of Narcotics and Alcohol.

I too prefer the Bees.
An Excellent Writing...Judester...O.T...Phil.

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 24-Nov-2016

Thanks for the encouraging review Phil. I seem to have a problem with meter, and trying out a sonnet was a great lesson for me. I remember when I was young and the garden was filled with butterflies, fireflies ,dragonflies, ladybugs etc. Not so much any more and I believe it is the random spraying of chemicals..At out farm we had rows of flowers that would attract the bugs that ate the bugs thatate the veg. It worked pretty good and looked wonderful. The first thing I am doing when I get back to Vermont this summer is make a big wildflower garden and hummingbird feeders for my little insect friends. I miss them, Cheers, j

Comment from persevere

Excellent

You have followed the rhyming requirements, a total of 14 lines, the last two being the essence of the poem, of a sonnet but there is no evidence of iambic pentameter . I,myself, battle to fulfill this requirement when trying to write an ode. However, your description of what poison spraying is destroying, is vivid. The killing of bees is having far reaching effect on our existence.

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 24-Nov-2016

Thanks for the review, could you please read again? I fixed it up and I think it is is better, cheers, j

reply by persevere on 24-Nov-2016

It is definitely better.

reply by the author on 24-Nov-2016

Thanks for that. I am just getting that meter business and poems like this certainly help. Cheers, j

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written sonnet. A beautiful garden is always great to look at and enjoy. But we still need the bees and butterflies to bring life to a beautiful summer garden.

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 24-Nov-2016

Thanks for the review, could you please read again? I fixed it up and I think this is better, cheers, j

reply by Sandra du Plessis on 24-Nov-2016

It seems better, not that I could find any faults the first time.

reply by the author on 24-Nov-2016

Thanks, I always have problems with the meter, but with each poem, I understand it a bit more, Thanks for your time, I appreciate you, cheers, j