Flower in the Attic
Lives are short from birth to death.56 total reviews
Comment from winnona
A well written 2-10-2 poem contest entry. I think you completed the challenge of this contest well. Your choice of artwork and background color completes the piece nicely.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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A well written 2-10-2 poem contest entry. I think you completed the challenge of this contest well. Your choice of artwork and background color completes the piece nicely.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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winnona: thanks so much for reading and for your positive remarks. I didn't win but tied for second . . . $6.88 win! livelylinda
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well done, you placed and that is great.
Comment from Joy Graham
Hi mystery author,
I get an image of an old baby doll when I read this. I can't imagine a real live baby being banned to the attic. Maybe I'm missing the point here? It wouldn't be my first time not getting the obvious.
Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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Hi mystery author,
I get an image of an old baby doll when I read this. I can't imagine a real live baby being banned to the attic. Maybe I'm missing the point here? It wouldn't be my first time not getting the obvious.
Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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Joy: thank you for reading. This is a metaphor of how quickly goes our lives. I recently moved in with a few friends from my church in this big old house. My bedroom is on the second floor which has slanted ceiling. I immediately thought of the VCAndrew book series of "Flowers in the Attic" and had quite a chuckle. The book begins with three children banned to the attic so their rich grandmother doesn't know they exist. A mixture of thoughts put together this piece. I tied for second place and won a whopping $6.88! I'm so proud this morning! LOL Linda
Comment from Alan K Pease
A delineation of life in a Dandelion from a beautiful flower to a purveyor of immortality seen in the wafting of its seeds by the wind. Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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A delineation of life in a Dandelion from a beautiful flower to a purveyor of immortality seen in the wafting of its seeds by the wind. Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 17-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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Alan: tied for second place and won a whopping $6.88! I'm so proud! LOLOL Thanks for reading. Linda
Comment from rjuselius
This is a rather sorrowful piece of poetry dear anonymous! It kind of reminds me of psycho at least the last line.
Thank you for sharing!
Good luck!
Blessings!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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This is a rather sorrowful piece of poetry dear anonymous! It kind of reminds me of psycho at least the last line.
Thank you for sharing!
Good luck!
Blessings!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 17-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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Rebekka: this is actually a funny poem but got lost in the translation somehow. Thanks for reading. Linda
Comment from HAREEDS
A weird syllable count of 2-10-2 for this writing prompt. I think the poet did an excellent job here of creating a poem with a depth of feeling in such a short poetic form. Life and death, how fickle the hold on life is, all wonderfully portrayed in such a short poem. The picture is a perfect accompaniment for the poem and it's as if the poem's author took the picture themselves to perfectly accompany the poem. An excellent contest entry, good luck.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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A weird syllable count of 2-10-2 for this writing prompt. I think the poet did an excellent job here of creating a poem with a depth of feeling in such a short poetic form. Life and death, how fickle the hold on life is, all wonderfully portrayed in such a short poem. The picture is a perfect accompaniment for the poem and it's as if the poem's author took the picture themselves to perfectly accompany the poem. An excellent contest entry, good luck.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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HAREEDS: I spent more time searching for that picture than I did writing the poem! Tied for second place in the contest and won a whopping $6.88! I'm SO proud! LOLOL Linda
Comment from Neonewman
Wonderfully crafted piece you have delivered for this 2-10-2 contest prompt. I love Brilliant choice in artwork as well. Best of luck with the voting my friend.
God bless!
Steve
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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Wonderfully crafted piece you have delivered for this 2-10-2 contest prompt. I love Brilliant choice in artwork as well. Best of luck with the voting my friend.
God bless!
Steve
Comment Written 17-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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Steve: thanks for reading and commenting. I tied for second place and won $6.88! I'm so proud! LOLOL Linda
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Awesome! It's always a pleasure my friend
Comment from I am Cat
yikes! Reminds me of "Children in the Attic" or whatever that series of books was called. I love the alliteration of the b's... but, blasted, why the baby gotta be banned? lol ;)
Well done, and great luck to you in the contest
Cat
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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yikes! Reminds me of "Children in the Attic" or whatever that series of books was called. I love the alliteration of the b's... but, blasted, why the baby gotta be banned? lol ;)
Well done, and great luck to you in the contest
Cat
Comment Written 17-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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Cat: Thank you for reading. I recently moved and my bedroom in a large house in on the second floor with slanted ceiling. I'm only 5'2" tall so it is no problem. But, I thought about that "Flowers in the Attic" series and began laughing at myself and so came this poem. It is leaving many people confused and concerned about the 'baby'. No worry . . . I am the only one up here except for the two teenagers in the other two bedrooms. Anyway, I tied for second place and won $6.88! I am so proud! LOLOL Linda
Comment from TPAC
I do hope we talking about flowers and not an infant: joy gone after months arrival: placed in attic. Which ever I found interests in this thought learning more about proper written expressed views.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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I do hope we talking about flowers and not an infant: joy gone after months arrival: placed in attic. Which ever I found interests in this thought learning more about proper written expressed views.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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Thanks for reading TPAC, but you just didn't get it. Linda
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Aww, that is so sad. I see this as a metaphor of us growing old and being discarded, which many elderly people are. It's sad and also frightening. Excellent 2-10-2 contest entry, and the picture is well chosen. Good luck in the contest! :) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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Aww, that is so sad. I see this as a metaphor of us growing old and being discarded, which many elderly people are. It's sad and also frightening. Excellent 2-10-2 contest entry, and the picture is well chosen. Good luck in the contest! :) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 17-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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Sandra: at last! Someone who 'got it'! Some people have been uncomfortable because they thought the poem was about banning a baby to the attic! I tied for second place and won a gigantic $6.88! I'm so proud this morning! LOLOL Linda
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I have to laugh too, did they not read it properly? The last line gives it away perfectly. It should have won. But congrats on 2nd place. :)
Comment from John Parkin
Excellent 2-10-2 describing the cycle of life. How descriptive and true your words for many. The artwork was apropos showing the many phases of a flower and the analogy you give relating to a persons life.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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Excellent 2-10-2 describing the cycle of life. How descriptive and true your words for many. The artwork was apropos showing the many phases of a flower and the analogy you give relating to a persons life.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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John: thank you for reading and understanding this piece. Many people did not. Tied for second place in the contest and won big . . . $6.88! Joy, joy, I am so proud! LOLOL Linda
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You are welcome.