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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That is really clever! I'm going to see if I can write one like that. It must have taken you ages! I think I'd go for Lazarus, too! Lol. Another fabulous story, Bill, and this one should have been in a contest and won. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 06-May-2022
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That is really clever! I'm going to see if I can write one like that. It must have taken you ages! I think I'd go for Lazarus, too! Lol. Another fabulous story, Bill, and this one should have been in a contest and won. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 06-May-2022
reply by the author on 06-May-2022
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Thank you, Sandra.
Comment from nomi338
That is an interesting concept, I may even try it myself in future. I have already reviewed I killed Lazarus and I found the idea both menacing and illustrative. While I believe that Jesus did in fact resurrect Lazarus and others they did die later on. Demonstrating the destructive power that death has on us all. Sorry Dr. Frankenstein.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2016
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That is an interesting concept, I may even try it myself in future. I have already reviewed I killed Lazarus and I found the idea both menacing and illustrative. While I believe that Jesus did in fact resurrect Lazarus and others they did die later on. Demonstrating the destructive power that death has on us all. Sorry Dr. Frankenstein.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2016
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Thank you, nomi, for giving this a peek. Bill
Comment from djsaxon
Gotta burn a six pack. How could I not? Radical concept from go to whoa. Brilliant acrostic para, a clever exposition, and a powerful 5 7 5. cheers - DJ
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2016
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Gotta burn a six pack. How could I not? Radical concept from go to whoa. Brilliant acrostic para, a clever exposition, and a powerful 5 7 5. cheers - DJ
Comment Written 24-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2016
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Wow! Thank you for the terrific review. Bill
Comment from rama devi
What a unique post, my friend. I enjoyed it's originality and the awesome seamless and unforced prose acrostic. Wow, muse's can have such unusual ideas! It works.
The three liner closing makes this feel like a haibun.
I'm wondering what the nephew's secret is...are you going to expand this to a full story?
Warm Smiles, rd
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2016
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What a unique post, my friend. I enjoyed it's originality and the awesome seamless and unforced prose acrostic. Wow, muse's can have such unusual ideas! It works.
The three liner closing makes this feel like a haibun.
I'm wondering what the nephew's secret is...are you going to expand this to a full story?
Warm Smiles, rd
Comment Written 22-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2016
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Thank you, rd, for the giving this a look. I may pen a flash fiction story if a likely contest pops up. I went will the 5-7-5 which I posted as a tanka formatted poem. UBill
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Comment from Jay Squires
A prose acrostic! Wow, so that's why you didn't rhyme it. LOL, to be honest with you I didn't even read it as an acrostic the first time through. I just thought it was a kind of minimalist prose. So it DID hold together to make sense.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2016
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A prose acrostic! Wow, so that's why you didn't rhyme it. LOL, to be honest with you I didn't even read it as an acrostic the first time through. I just thought it was a kind of minimalist prose. So it DID hold together to make sense.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2016
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This was a bit of an experiment, Jay. Thank you for giving it some credibility. Bill
Comment from Mary Wakeford
Why do I get the notion this mini-essay is tied to my Lazarus the Duck story currently being promoted?! LOL. Once I got passed that weird irony.
The acrostic formatted paragraph is my first to review. I'm not even sure what to say about it except that it is original, and very creative in its uniqueness!
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2016
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Why do I get the notion this mini-essay is tied to my Lazarus the Duck story currently being promoted?! LOL. Once I got passed that weird irony.
The acrostic formatted paragraph is my first to review. I'm not even sure what to say about it except that it is original, and very creative in its uniqueness!
Comment Written 21-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2016
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Thank you, Mary, for giving this a look. Bill
Comment from VictoriaJoyce
Ok, you had me a bit confused here. To me, it was quite jumbled and I never really got the message in it. However, I do have cognitive 'issues' so that may be in part to blame. Did not enjoy this one. Sorry..
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2016
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Ok, you had me a bit confused here. To me, it was quite jumbled and I never really got the message in it. However, I do have cognitive 'issues' so that may be in part to blame. Did not enjoy this one. Sorry..
Comment Written 21-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2016
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Sorry, Victoria. It was a mini-essay on the writing process. Sometimes my prewriting involves wring an acrostic paragraph to get some ideas flowing.
Comment from mfowler
This is a most interesting way to stir up the little grey cells and springboard into a great story. Your closing poem, comment line looks good to me. I can see a good murder mystery emerging there. I'd go with that opening sentence about the brash client. I reckon my central character would be a slick, win at all costs political hustler who promises an unfashionable billionaire that he can take him all the way to the top. His calling card is: Lazarus may have died but I raised him again. I'm assuming Lazarus is a pseudonym for a politician who'd been resurrected.
A suggestion: remove 'with which' in the first sentence. It is not only grammatically correct this way, but also reads more smoothly.
Sorry to take over the review with my idea, but such was the power of your piece that you stimulated me. Well done.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2016
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This is a most interesting way to stir up the little grey cells and springboard into a great story. Your closing poem, comment line looks good to me. I can see a good murder mystery emerging there. I'd go with that opening sentence about the brash client. I reckon my central character would be a slick, win at all costs political hustler who promises an unfashionable billionaire that he can take him all the way to the top. His calling card is: Lazarus may have died but I raised him again. I'm assuming Lazarus is a pseudonym for a politician who'd been resurrected.
A suggestion: remove 'with which' in the first sentence. It is not only grammatically correct this way, but also reads more smoothly.
Sorry to take over the review with my idea, but such was the power of your piece that you stimulated me. Well done.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2016
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That first sentence did seem sketchy to me. Thanks for legitimizing this process with a neat plot line.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Geesh, it takes me long enough already, not to mention TONS of expended energy, just to channel my Poe muse long enough to help me write anything, Bill. I couldn't imagine doing a precursor!
Usually he just starts talkin', so I allow him to ramble on, without interruption.
Good idea for some, though, I would imagine...
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2016
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Geesh, it takes me long enough already, not to mention TONS of expended energy, just to channel my Poe muse long enough to help me write anything, Bill. I couldn't imagine doing a precursor!
Usually he just starts talkin', so I allow him to ramble on, without interruption.
Good idea for some, though, I would imagine...
Comment Written 21-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2016
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There a poetic form called a sestina, that originated as an exercise in using words in different ways within one work in order to develop ideas for a sonnet. It exists today as its own form, but was just a tool once. Sometimes ideas need to be pumped up from the resouvoirs they hide in. Thanks, Dean, for giving this a look. Bill