Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

You are so good at these, I'd need a dictionary by me all the time. I love that the story was all in T until the last sentence, and you then change to J. Well done, I'll be trying this one, too!! I read some of your other reviews, I think the last one missed the point. Lol. I'm not going to be a lion tamer, either! :)) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 06-May-2022

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reply by the author on 06-May-2022

I?m happy with this one as it is grammatically correct without squinting my eyes for allowance.

Comment from Lynn27

Good

I like the story idea.

For a short story this moves way to fast. I know these short story can be difficult to write. Just focus one one event when your character faces the tiger.


Also, changed the font color to hard to read.


Lynn

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2016

Thank you, Lynn, for the helpful review. Bill

reply by Lynn27 on 29-Jun-2016

You're welcome.

Keep writing that's how we improve.

Comment from Ginger Banks

Excellent

An infinite tongue twister for a poem if I ever heard one! What a funny fun poem, the tiger in the picture look like he tried to read it aloud and got lost, ha! Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2016

Thank you, Ginger, for the excellent review. Bill

reply by Ginger Banks on 28-Jun-2016

You're welcome.

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is a very interesting story you have penned. I don't think I want to be a tiger trainer. lol You used very good wording and imagery too. Teri

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2016

Thank you, Teri, for the great review. Bill

Comment from frogbook

Exceptional

Dare I say I noticed a bit of alliteration here-haha. A tantalizing tale told terribly well. A jaunt through t's later joined by a jolly jovial letter that I, JoAnn approved of. Well done!

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2016

Wow! Thank you, JoAnn, for the grand review. I had a lot of T's in my alphabet soup. Bill

Comment from Corporal Rumjugs

Good

First of all, hilarious little story! The sing-song quality of the story suits the premise selected quite nicely, but, on a whole, the story seems more like a free verse poem than a short story. But I understand that the word limit placed constraints on the expression and frankly, the story is a wonderful little light hearted entertainer with it's alliterations and colourful prose. My only complaint is that it feels more like a poem than a short story, but that is simply a matter of perspective, I guess.

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 Comment Written 27-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2016

My wife beat me up in a similar fashion about this one. She liked it for what it was, but saw no plot. I attempted for a while to point one out, but was unconvincing. Thank you for your kind and honest review. Bill

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

my tongue is all tied in knots and I'm spitting everywhere:) This is a unique flash fiction piece. Always fun to read you.

teresa

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016

Thank you, Teresa, for the great review. Bill

Comment from nomi338

Excellent

Sad stories sure sound silly when written with wry words.
This tale truly tries to tell the timely torturous travails of Tom taking too tough am assignment..

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016

Thank you, nomi, for the truly tasteful and tolerant tallying of this try. Till

Comment from krys123

Excellent

Hello Bill;
-a very totally tongue twisting theoretical story written in a poem of Ted's learning to be a tiger trainer. Along with your many alliteration throughout of the letter T was very convincingly and cacophonously carried out.
-Also I found the story of this poem very humorous with a twist on the vernacular
and of a lawyer's position.
-Thanks for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always my friend.
Alex

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016

Thank you, Alex, for the excellent review. Bill

Comment from damommy

Excellent

What a tongue twister. Try reading that fast. Great!

This is so creative and to come up with so many "t" words. The last line was a total surprise, changing to "j."

Good job. You should have saved this for a contest. 8-)

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016

Thank you, da, for the excellent review. Bill