"The Book of Jay 1984 to 2003"
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Frozen At 18!"My Son Jason's Life.
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Comment from brenda bickers
Hi Ricky another poem about the loss of 'Jay'.
You have written a few pieces in the past that have been much easier to read when the format is set out more like a poem than prose and I know that when you use the computer your editing is so much better. I have to start using the right star system for rating a poem, so I will from now on give the correct rating. I know you have trouble with your phone editing and so the rating I give is only because I know you can do better with the right equipment.
I do hope you understand what I am saying and this has no bearing on what you are saying.
Brenda:))x
HI Ricky I see now you have corrected those mistakes and it now reads so much better, I hope you were not offended by my first review. I am just following FS rules.
I have up dated your rating.
Brenda:))x
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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Hi Ricky another poem about the loss of 'Jay'.
You have written a few pieces in the past that have been much easier to read when the format is set out more like a poem than prose and I know that when you use the computer your editing is so much better. I have to start using the right star system for rating a poem, so I will from now on give the correct rating. I know you have trouble with your phone editing and so the rating I give is only because I know you can do better with the right equipment.
I do hope you understand what I am saying and this has no bearing on what you are saying.
Brenda:))x
HI Ricky I see now you have corrected those mistakes and it now reads so much better, I hope you were not offended by my first review. I am just following FS rules.
I have up dated your rating.
Brenda:))x
Comment Written 02-May-2016
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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I slipped and sent it too early!
I.shallerth maketh daeth necessarily lee correctiobs with out futher corrections in a Heart Beat and...
By the by.
I left my Heart in San Fran Sick oh!!!
Ricky da poet of kbow nothing it!
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Always enjoy reading your stories.
You seem to pretty much keep to the same theme throughout them.
Keep writing these well done creations.
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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Always enjoy reading your stories.
You seem to pretty much keep to the same theme throughout them.
Keep writing these well done creations.
Comment Written 02-May-2016
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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Thanks and a part to later.
Ricky1024