Comment from flylikeaneagle

Excellent

CD: fun poem about the critters that fly and creep around. The roach got swashed, good for you, they are nasty. Mom was in shock! I like your rhymes and beat and big bug. Fun challenge and great poem. flylikeaneagle

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2016

Thank you for the lovely review, flylikeaneagle - much appreciated :)

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

A silly young girl named Sheree
Stepped onto a poor honey bee
Her mother was sad
"Girl, you are so bad"
"Tonight there's no honey for thee!"..........I'm guessing that sweet Sheree and her mum lived during the days of Shakespeare, then, heh-heh?

I was onboard with you completely until the very last limerick, Craig. No matter how I wrapped my warped, troubled, and tormented mind around that final line, I could not make myself rhyme "flowers" with either rock or shock.
Oh, I tried to, belive me.
I tried...

Way to answer the potlatch limerick challenge...
~Dean

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016

Or perhaps they live in an Amish community? ;-)

Thanks for pointing out the rhyme error in the last line Dean - I can only blame the pressure of a one hour time limit! (Though I think I probably had about 40 minutes left in which I should have noticed it).

Your good-humoured review is much appreciated. For some reason I am imagining a fair bit of head shaking over my innocent little entry - go figure :)

Craig

reply by Dean Kuch on 17-Apr-2016

Don't feel bad, Craig. I do the exact same thing sometimes.
Funny how you can compose something, then read it about fifty times to see if it sound all right, and still miss something, ain't it?
That's why authors have editors, LOL...

~Dean

Comment from ciliverde

Excellent

Haha, Craig, this is awesome, and such a realistic scene. You bet mom is going to crush that cockroach! Do as I say kiddies, not as I do! Dad got onto that one, quick enough :)
Fun limericks and a great break from pattern in the end.
Carol

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016

Thanks, Carol. For some reason, it wasn't as well received as the previous week's limerick - go figure! Your kind words are much appreciated :) Craig

reply by ciliverde on 17-Apr-2016

I usually get the most reviews on the poems that I put the least amount of work into - go figure! Lol. My mom HATED roaches - it was legendary :)

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A great Limerick the dead butterfly cause Teddy not to have any more butter. Sheree stepped on a bee and won't have any honey. Mom flattened the cochroach and wont get anymore flowers from dad. Lol

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016

Thank you Sandra. Rumor has it, mom wasn't too miffed about the flowers :) Much appreciated - Craig

Comment from strandregs

Excellent

It's a cruel world out there.
well done for trying.
meter a bit off I think but conveyance of idea very good.
very fun to read for budhist sosiopaths like me :-)) Z.

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016

Thanks for reviewing :)

Comment from ~Dovey

Excellent

Hi Craig,

Boy am I glad I was busy today! lol These are certainly limericks lol ummm... Flowers? Really? lmao I know better than that, you don't buy flowers ;) Nice cover story though. (You could have used stock lol)

I hope you had fun with these to alleviate the busy day... bugs... ewwwwwww...

*hugs*

Kim

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016

Thanks for the fun review, Kim :) Why would I say "stock" when I meant flowers? ;-)

reply by ~Dovey on 17-Apr-2016

Poppycock! (there are flowers in there somewhere) ;)

Comment from --Turtle.

Excellent

An entertaining limerick set with consistent limited punctuation, the first two sets do a nice job of setting up the pattern, and the third one, in good humor and naughty taste, breaks the pattern for amusing effect. Warning though, some people will likely have to stand up else they won't get it. (-- cause it might go over their head... that's why they'd have to stand... so their head will be higher. ; )

The punctuation enthusiast in me wants more punctuation, but it really isn't all that necessary. (the commas... it's the commas ... I miss them, example: His mom cried(,) "How cruel"

But then, if you added the commas... I'd probably want the periods next. And added emphasis near the flowers... From now on you'll get no more ... flowers.

I blame ... nope, got nothing. I only got me to blame for wanting punctuation where it's really not needed.

This potlock challenge was fun.

(a side-thought tangent I had after I read this poem... might be disturbing, but ... when I was little, my aunt had cockroaches... lots of them. When I went there, for entertainment, I remember my cousins and I would go into the kitchen and open all the upper cabinets to watch it rain cockroaches. Like a horror movie. Wait an hour and they would all find their way back into the same cabinets. I can remember the tapping sound their bodies made hitting the floor. Wow. That probably sounds way worse than I remember of it.)

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016

I'm thinking it went over quite a few heads, or just didn't meet with approval.

And to think, we used to play with meccano or build rockets out of 44 gallon drums for our entertainment ;-)

Thanks for the great comments, Turtle :)

Comment from Lovinia

Excellent

HI Craig

My girlfriend and I would chase my younger brother about the house to try and save the butterfly in his clutches; the poor butterfly about to be pinned in his collection.

I hope Sheree had shoes on. I can identify with her mother, I don't like killing, even little beasties that sting, especially bees. We would always give them honey when they ran out of zip, and watch them fly off ... it never occurred to us to kill it. :))

Dad likes cockroaches and doesn't want them killed? Mum the killer?

You've created a fun set of chuckles with a message, not to just randomly kill an insect, most of them are a vital part of our eco-system. Great presentation and you appear to have conquered rhyme, meter and syllable count .... though, it may just be me, I'm not sure "rock/shock/flowers", even constitutes near rhyme. Of course, I'm all for poetic license. hahahaha! Great fun. Mine is done, just need a few dollars to post. Hugs - Lovi xoxx

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016

Oops, well, the rest of it rhymes ;-) Thanks for the great review, Lovi. Actually, I balk at killing anything - even flies and mozzies lol - repellant works ;-) Craig

Comment from brenda bickers

Excellent

Hi CD,
this was pretty good considering the pressure we were under.
There have been some good poems this week.
Well done.
Brenda

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016

Thanks Brenda.

Comment from AnnaLinda

Excellent

Craig,

You did a great job on your limerick for the potlatch challenge.
So I assume the limerick challenge was about bugs. Yours is
the first I have read. I missed the date...we were out by the beach eating
crab cakes, steak and shrimp, listening to live music...lol

This is entertaining and creative...I hate cockroaches...and I've
seen them too many times inside...not out under a rock...Like
your mom saw.

Write on...you are so talented.

Linda

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016

Sounds like a great way to spend a Saturday, Linda :)

I forgot to copy the topic in the author notes - oops! Thanks for reminding me!

Cheers for the kind comments,

Craig

reply by AnnaLinda on 16-Apr-2016

:)