Christine's Poems
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Comment from frogbook
This is rally a great one. So original and really wove a complete story. The image was a great one. I loved how the witch's spell was broken by a tear-great thought on that one.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2016
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This is rally a great one. So original and really wove a complete story. The image was a great one. I loved how the witch's spell was broken by a tear-great thought on that one.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2016
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Hi frogbook, Thanks very mich for your review and lovely comments for my witchy tale and yes I had to get them back somehow LOL. what fun to do these challenges Cheers Christine😃
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Hi frogbook, Thanks very mich for your review and lovely comments for my witchy tale and yes I had to get them back somehow LOL. what fun to do these challenges Cheers Christine😃
Comment from dmt1967
This, my friend deserves a six. I thought the story flowed as well as the poem. I loved the picture and have just read another poem in this challenge a while ago. Both were totally different. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2016
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This, my friend deserves a six. I thought the story flowed as well as the poem. I loved the picture and have just read another poem in this challenge a while ago. Both were totally different. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2016
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Hi dmt1967.Thank you so much. I am so happy you thought my poem deserved a Six. I try to do something different each time with these challenge images and so your feedback has made this one worthwhile and I did enjoy creating a story about the gate. Have a great day and many Cheers to you Christine😀😀
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Hi dmt1967.Thank you so much. I am so happy you thought my poem deserved a Six. I try to do something different each time with these challenge images and so your feedback has made this one worthwhile and I did enjoy creating a story about the gate. Have a great day and many Cheers to you Christine😀😀
Comment from Chris Walker
This a unique take of the prompt-very interesting! Nicely penned with terrific rhyme and rhythm. Just like when I watch a suspenseful movie, I was telling the kids "don't touch the gate." Of course they touched it. But the child's tears saved the day. Thanks for sharing, Chris
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2016
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This a unique take of the prompt-very interesting! Nicely penned with terrific rhyme and rhythm. Just like when I watch a suspenseful movie, I was telling the kids "don't touch the gate." Of course they touched it. But the child's tears saved the day. Thanks for sharing, Chris
Comment Written 14-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2016
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Hi Chris. Oh yes the children couldn't resist ( well who could LOL) Thank your for your great review and rating for this witchy tale I am glad yOu thought it terrific in rhyme and rhythm. this is so much appreciated. Cheers Christine😃
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
This is well written and an interesting take on the picture. witches spell should be witch's spell. Yours is quite different from the others I have read and I enjoyed it very much. I agree that some gates are best left closed. Good work, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016
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This is well written and an interesting take on the picture. witches spell should be witch's spell. Yours is quite different from the others I have read and I enjoyed it very much. I agree that some gates are best left closed. Good work, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 13-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016
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Hi Debbie, Thanks you so much for your feedback and I have changed the witches to witch's from (plural to simgular witch) so thanks again for picking that up I must remember ror future poems LOL. Yes some gate should be left closed even as tempting as they may be . Have a great day Cheers Christine😃
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
Six stars for writing such an intriguing tale in poetry and also for the challenge itself. Thank you for sharing.
I really enjoyed the poem, a typical, swept away to a witches liar, but with a fresh flair in that they were loosed by the tear drop. And back they were, no memory parse of the witch experience , but with a newly acquired wisdom and the importance of listening to your inner warnings of danger.
Well done,
Carolyn
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016
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Six stars for writing such an intriguing tale in poetry and also for the challenge itself. Thank you for sharing.
I really enjoyed the poem, a typical, swept away to a witches liar, but with a fresh flair in that they were loosed by the tear drop. And back they were, no memory parse of the witch experience , but with a newly acquired wisdom and the importance of listening to your inner warnings of danger.
Well done,
Carolyn
Comment Written 12-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016
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Thank you Carolyn very much for such a beautiful review and the six stars, I really enjoyed doing this poem and hoped to pass on a little wisdom as well. I appreciate you seeing my intention through my Witchy tale. And how much fun do we all have creating many different poems and stories form each others pictures. Have a great day Cheers Christine😀😀
Comment from Sherylsart
Great story! This picture sure is bringing out creativity. Your rhyme and rhythm are really good, and pacing works well. A coule of line seem awkward to me:
And so they heaved the gate it fell ... Perhaps change the 'so' to 'as'
And with a woosh away they went
back to the place were quickly sent, this line is awkward
behind that gate and set on ground
they both stood up and looked around.
And with a woosh were quickly sent
back from that place without a dent...
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016
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Great story! This picture sure is bringing out creativity. Your rhyme and rhythm are really good, and pacing works well. A coule of line seem awkward to me:
And so they heaved the gate it fell ... Perhaps change the 'so' to 'as'
And with a woosh away they went
back to the place were quickly sent, this line is awkward
behind that gate and set on ground
they both stood up and looked around.
And with a woosh were quickly sent
back from that place without a dent...
Comment Written 12-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016
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Hi Sheryl .Many thanks for your time to read and review my poem and for your suggestions. I will revise some lines , but may keep some the same, however I love the fact that we can give each other suggestions for consideration and I do always appreciate them . With grateful thanks and many Cheers Christine😃
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Hi Sheryl .Many thanks for your time to read and review my poem and for your suggestions. I will revise some lines , but may keep some the same, however I love the fact that we can give each other suggestions for consideration and I do always appreciate them . With grateful thanks and many Cheers Christine😃
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Of course. It is your poem, you have ultimate say. I just gave you some thoughts I had, for your use , if you wanted. I agree, it is nice that we can give feedback in an amosphere of no hurt feelings in either direction. 8-)
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Hi Sheryl, have changed the so to as like you suggested and I agree it is a better word for this line, May leave the others though. We are a great bunch to be able to give each other suggestions and I never feel hurt if people don't always act on mine, but I think it's great if suggestions are given as I believe it has made the reader think about the composition of the work and I have learnt heaps from that. so again Many Cheers for your support Christine 😃
Comment from misscookie
You captured my attention from the first line to the last
You truly kept me at the end of my chair.
Thank you for this interesting a thrilling write.
Cookie
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016
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You captured my attention from the first line to the last
You truly kept me at the end of my chair.
Thank you for this interesting a thrilling write.
Cookie
Comment Written 12-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016
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Hi Cookie. Lovely to hear from you and many thanks for your encouraging review and I am so pleased to have captured you from line one to the last one. I enjoyed this picture challenge and love you comments Cheers Christine😀
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Hi Cookie. Lovely to hear from you and many thanks for your encouraging review and I am so pleased to have captured you from line one to the last one. I enjoyed this picture challenge and love you comments Cheers Christine😀
You're very welcome, have a nice day.
Cookie
Comment from BeasPeas
This is very good, Chrissy. (And I believe you supplied the image for this post?? Thank you for that.) Your interesting story flows, rhymes well and has an important message--some things are best left alone. Marilyn
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016
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This is very good, Chrissy. (And I believe you supplied the image for this post?? Thank you for that.) Your interesting story flows, rhymes well and has an important message--some things are best left alone. Marilyn
Comment Written 12-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016
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Hi Marilyn. Yes this was my image and I had no idea what I would do until I sat down and stared at the picture and then this little Witchy tale arrived with a little I hope wise message at the end. Many thanks for reading and commenting Cheers Christine😀
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Hi Marilyn. Yes this was my image and I had no idea what I would do until I sat down and stared at the picture and then this little Witchy tale arrived with a little I hope wise message at the end. Many thanks for reading and commenting Cheers Christine😀
Comment from GeraldS
I liked this narrative poem on face value. But the really nice thing about it is that it can be applied to many situations in life. It makes the reader think. And the moral can be interpreted in many ways.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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I liked this narrative poem on face value. But the really nice thing about it is that it can be applied to many situations in life. It makes the reader think. And the moral can be interpreted in many ways.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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Thank you very much GeraldS for taking the time to read and review my poem and for a lovely comment. Your interpretation is spot on Many Cheers to you Christine😃
Comment from PoemsOfDD
Christine, this is a wonderful interpretation of the Picture Challenge. You have a fantastic imagination to come up with this little ditty. I can see it as a children's story. I did wonder about the length but your story carried me through it with charm. Excellent work! ~DD
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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Christine, this is a wonderful interpretation of the Picture Challenge. You have a fantastic imagination to come up with this little ditty. I can see it as a children's story. I did wonder about the length but your story carried me through it with charm. Excellent work! ~DD
Comment Written 12-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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Thanks DD what a lovely review and I am glad you stayed with the story until the end . What great fun we are having with these challenges and it keeps the cobwebs out LOL. I so much enjoy your support for my work also Cheers heaps Christine😃