My Life with Dad
The first man I fell in love with. I called him Dad.33 total reviews
Comment from Heidi M
Tears run down my cheeks as I type this, Mary. What a wonderful tribute to your dad. He would be so proud of what you have written. Not because of what he accomplished, but because of what you have become. What a wonderful daughter to write such meaningful memories of your dad. Well done!
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2016
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Tears run down my cheeks as I type this, Mary. What a wonderful tribute to your dad. He would be so proud of what you have written. Not because of what he accomplished, but because of what you have become. What a wonderful daughter to write such meaningful memories of your dad. Well done!
Comment Written 03-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2016
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Heidi, thank you for your lovely review and kind words. I'm going to print this and place it with my dad's service binder. So lovely. Thank you for acknowledging my dad on his birthday with your words.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
A moving tribute to your father. My sister died of esophageal cancer at the age of forty-eight. She underwent chemo treatments and lived for four years. She fed herself through a tube in her stomach and wasted away to sixty pounds.
When I was diagnosed with congestive heart failure the doctor told me I could die at any minute without warning. I said I would rather go like that than like my sister.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2016
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A moving tribute to your father. My sister died of esophageal cancer at the age of forty-eight. She underwent chemo treatments and lived for four years. She fed herself through a tube in her stomach and wasted away to sixty pounds.
When I was diagnosed with congestive heart failure the doctor told me I could die at any minute without warning. I said I would rather go like that than like my sister.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2016
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Thank you, Thomas for your RR&R. I was saddened to read of your sister. I can't imagine anyone surviving four years with that type of cancer. My dad wasted away before us in a matter of months. Four years is incredible. I'm with you on the instant 'outta here' though hope both of ours is a long way from now. I appreciate your review and kind words. Have a great weekend!
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
As your father would say ... you nailed it! Mary, what a wonderful tribute this is to your father. This is such a touching write and so very well written. Isn't it funny how as we age we become aware of so many more things about our parents and sacrifices that they made for us. I think when we are young we are still too self absorbed to be truly thankful to our parents for all they have done for us.
Like you, 16 years since my father has passed away, I often think, why didn't I ask my Dad more questions and get to know him even more. Why didn't I thank him more for being such a good father. My father, being German, was a prisoner in a Russian prison camp for four years during the second world war. I heard a bit about it, but not much. Mainly just that he nearly starved to death. If he were here today, I would want to know more.
Sounds like your father was a wonderful man. Every incident you described helped to form a picture in the reader's mind of what a great father he was to you and your siblings. I can't even tell which is my fave part, as there were many great parts to it. This is a terrific entry for the 'Share Your Story' contest. The repetition of "I should have written about my father" reinforces in the reader's mind that you loved him dearly and truly wished that you had written more in his eulogy.
Your story kept me glued from beginning to end. Loved it, Mary! Best wishes for the contest.
Connie
Connie
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2016
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As your father would say ... you nailed it! Mary, what a wonderful tribute this is to your father. This is such a touching write and so very well written. Isn't it funny how as we age we become aware of so many more things about our parents and sacrifices that they made for us. I think when we are young we are still too self absorbed to be truly thankful to our parents for all they have done for us.
Like you, 16 years since my father has passed away, I often think, why didn't I ask my Dad more questions and get to know him even more. Why didn't I thank him more for being such a good father. My father, being German, was a prisoner in a Russian prison camp for four years during the second world war. I heard a bit about it, but not much. Mainly just that he nearly starved to death. If he were here today, I would want to know more.
Sounds like your father was a wonderful man. Every incident you described helped to form a picture in the reader's mind of what a great father he was to you and your siblings. I can't even tell which is my fave part, as there were many great parts to it. This is a terrific entry for the 'Share Your Story' contest. The repetition of "I should have written about my father" reinforces in the reader's mind that you loved him dearly and truly wished that you had written more in his eulogy.
Your story kept me glued from beginning to end. Loved it, Mary! Best wishes for the contest.
Connie
Connie
Comment Written 21-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2016
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Connie, what a beautiful review. I originally wrote this back in April but revived it for Father's Day. Thank you so much for your extensive review and for b the stunning 6 rating! So true about what we don't know, I imagine your own Father's stories would have been amazing, just for the survival aspect of the human soul against all odds. I do find for that generation, they kept so much to themselves, so even if we thought to indulge their experiences, I suspect we wouldn't have gotten much 🤔. Thank you for the continued follow!
Comment from beizanten
I'm sorry with your lost.
Sad yet quite attention grabbing beginning. A good and very detail eulogy. Your love for your dad is moving. I'm sure is happy with a son like you.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2016
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I'm sorry with your lost.
Sad yet quite attention grabbing beginning. A good and very detail eulogy. Your love for your dad is moving. I'm sure is happy with a son like you.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2016
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Thank you do much, beizanten, for your RR&R, and type kind words. I was a daughter blessed with a great dad, to be sure. Thank you so much!
Comment from MTF1955
What a beautiful tribute. If I had six stars I would have given it to you. I have tears in my eyes as I write this. My dad's been dead 126 years and I still miss him. Thanks for a great read. Mary
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2016
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What a beautiful tribute. If I had six stars I would have given it to you. I have tears in my eyes as I write this. My dad's been dead 126 years and I still miss him. Thanks for a great read. Mary
Comment Written 04-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2016
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Thank you, MTF1955, your review almost had me in tears. It never goes away, does it.
I appreciate your virtual six, and for the time you took for a longer read too!
Comment from zanya
A heart wrenching tale of the powerful and wonderful and caring bond of love flowing between a caring.loving Dad and his daughter - simply suffused with eternal filial love - such a life gift
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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A heart wrenching tale of the powerful and wonderful and caring bond of love flowing between a caring.loving Dad and his daughter - simply suffused with eternal filial love - such a life gift
Comment Written 03-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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Thank you, zanya, for the RR&R, which itself read like beautiful script
In a Best Seller. Thank you so much.
Comment from divalover320
lie it because her story is very sad when the part when she said her dad died she fell in love with someone and start to call them dad the also sad part about it was she woke up at 2:30 a.m. and the phone rang she he died her mom sat down and cried this story was very sad and happy
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2016
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lie it because her story is very sad when the part when she said her dad died she fell in love with someone and start to call them dad the also sad part about it was she woke up at 2:30 a.m. and the phone rang she he died her mom sat down and cried this story was very sad and happy
Comment Written 01-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2016
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Thank you, divalover320, for your RR&R. I appreciate your comments and your review, and am happy to hear my story resonated with you in both happiness as well as the hard times. Have a great Thursday.
Comment from aryr
This was an absolutely profound piece of writing. It covered the depth of a special well loved man - your father (I use father rather than dad out of respect for both him and you- he was your dad). I know you felt that you had a lot of 'I should haves' but remember that in doing it especially here you have shared him with so many of us. It was great writing, very enjoyable reading, thank you.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2016
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This was an absolutely profound piece of writing. It covered the depth of a special well loved man - your father (I use father rather than dad out of respect for both him and you- he was your dad). I know you felt that you had a lot of 'I should haves' but remember that in doing it especially here you have shared him with so many of us. It was great writing, very enjoyable reading, thank you.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2016
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Thank you so very much, aryr, for your amazing review and rating. I very much appreciate reading your comments and take to heart your message. You are most welcome. Have an awesome Thursday!
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You my friend are most welcome, it was delightful to read and appreciate your bond. Blessed be.
Comment from Joy Graham
Mary, this is a lovely tribute to your dad. I got so caught up in this story. You have many wonderful memories to carry with you. I lost my own father three years ago. It is only now that I am able to begin to write poems to and about him. I remember the funeral as a highly emotional time. I was asked to write a poem to be read at the service and I said I didn't think I could do it. The Pastor looked me in the eye and said he knew I could do it. I somehow choked something out, but it was tough to do.
I am no expert, but I do work on my own novels and try my best to edit. I have a huge editing process that is daunting and makes me feel lazy sometimes lol! I always search for words like, "and" and "but" and put a comma in front of them. I notice I'm not doing that in this review. Bad, bad me!!! If there is anything you don't agree with, I won't be offended. Just hoping to help a fellow writing friend :)
So, this is a pay it forward review. I searched your portfolio to find a post that needed just one more review to bump it up to the blue ribbon status or the all time best. I think I helped you get the all time best status, but I'm not sure. Sometimes you need to get 26 reviews to get that. If that is the case, I hope I helped bump you up a little closer to it.
Some things I noticed and wondered about along the way:
- "His was the first profound illness and death I had experienced and as I read my eulogy for his services nineteen years ago over coffee this morning, I realized I did him a disservice in not writing more succinctly about the man I called 'dad' for 40 years."
- comma before "and" - experienced, and as I...
- this just seems like a long sentence with a few thoughts that confused me. It seems like you read the eulogy nineteen years ago over coffee this morning.
- "retort in (a) exaggeratedly miffed voice," - I think it should be - an.
- I learned in spag class that Mom has a capital when used as a name. Such as, Mom told me to eat every last vegetable on my plate. It doesn't need a capital when used as, my mom said this or that.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2016
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Mary, this is a lovely tribute to your dad. I got so caught up in this story. You have many wonderful memories to carry with you. I lost my own father three years ago. It is only now that I am able to begin to write poems to and about him. I remember the funeral as a highly emotional time. I was asked to write a poem to be read at the service and I said I didn't think I could do it. The Pastor looked me in the eye and said he knew I could do it. I somehow choked something out, but it was tough to do.
I am no expert, but I do work on my own novels and try my best to edit. I have a huge editing process that is daunting and makes me feel lazy sometimes lol! I always search for words like, "and" and "but" and put a comma in front of them. I notice I'm not doing that in this review. Bad, bad me!!! If there is anything you don't agree with, I won't be offended. Just hoping to help a fellow writing friend :)
So, this is a pay it forward review. I searched your portfolio to find a post that needed just one more review to bump it up to the blue ribbon status or the all time best. I think I helped you get the all time best status, but I'm not sure. Sometimes you need to get 26 reviews to get that. If that is the case, I hope I helped bump you up a little closer to it.
Some things I noticed and wondered about along the way:
- "His was the first profound illness and death I had experienced and as I read my eulogy for his services nineteen years ago over coffee this morning, I realized I did him a disservice in not writing more succinctly about the man I called 'dad' for 40 years."
- comma before "and" - experienced, and as I...
- this just seems like a long sentence with a few thoughts that confused me. It seems like you read the eulogy nineteen years ago over coffee this morning.
- "retort in (a) exaggeratedly miffed voice," - I think it should be - an.
- I learned in spag class that Mom has a capital when used as a name. Such as, Mom told me to eat every last vegetable on my plate. It doesn't need a capital when used as, my mom said this or that.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2016
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Joy, I loved this review and will go now and make the corrections and go through all the and's and but's and doctor those as well. I am so glad you brought that up about capitalizing mom and dad. CJ16 just pointed that out to me in my Teddy story two days ago. After much research, I know understand the rule and as you have pointed out, need to go back into my earlier posts and amend all those errors.
I will go back, too, and reword that first part about reading the eulogy. I literally did pull the binder I keep all his funeral information in out on the anniversary and read it again, feeling sad that it was so generic and I should have said more, thus the rewrite. Thank you, thank you, thank you, Joy. So appreciate you!
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Thank you again, Joy, corrections made and I even changed much of the body of work during the process.
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Good to hear. These stories would be lovely to pass on to your children so they will know about their Grandfather :)
Comment from BLACKDYKE
A most moving and enlightening write Mary. I enjoyed so much the story of your Mum and Dad, and the clever repetition throughout the eulogy. I cannot do the piece justice by giving you a sixer, but I can by saying that I would read and apply this gem to my own father and mother were I ably. Thank you for the opportunity of enjoying it. Eric (Blackdyke)
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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A most moving and enlightening write Mary. I enjoyed so much the story of your Mum and Dad, and the clever repetition throughout the eulogy. I cannot do the piece justice by giving you a sixer, but I can by saying that I would read and apply this gem to my own father and mother were I ably. Thank you for the opportunity of enjoying it. Eric (Blackdyke)
Comment Written 24-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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Eric, thank you for your amazing review and 6 star rating. What was an exercise in grief therapy for me, seemingly has touched others and that is likely another gift from my dad. I very much appreciate your commitment to a longer read, and again for your lovely words. Have an awesome Sunday!