A Book of Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Questions"Assorted poems of love
26 total reviews
Comment from scongrove
Bravo Missy! :) Love ... love ... love this!!!
Excellent job with describing your emotions. I could feel them as I read along. The photo goes beautifully with it too!
Shana :)
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2016
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Bravo Missy! :) Love ... love ... love this!!!
Excellent job with describing your emotions. I could feel them as I read along. The photo goes beautifully with it too!
Shana :)
Comment Written 19-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2016
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I could just squeeze you, sweetie. You leave me such beautiful reviews!! Thank you :)
Missy
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You're very welcome! :) You're a fantastic writer. You inspire me.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Yes, one thinks they have it all, and then, poof! It seems all is lost, but, altho the words seem like cold comfort now - time does heal... that I know.
I could feel the emotion in the words - loved the presentation, Mel.
Is it the rain[,]
That makes me miss you so? - no commas when "that" is used in this way making it a run-on sentence.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2016
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Yes, one thinks they have it all, and then, poof! It seems all is lost, but, altho the words seem like cold comfort now - time does heal... that I know.
I could feel the emotion in the words - loved the presentation, Mel.
Is it the rain[,]
That makes me miss you so? - no commas when "that" is used in this way making it a run-on sentence.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2016
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Hi, Margaret, thank you for this lovely review, my friend.
Missy
Comment from G.B. Smith
Hey there sweet Lady
First of all I love the artwork. It sets the mood for your tremendous poem. You are becoming (in my estimation) the queen of romance poetry here in FS.
I this this is truly a 6 star piece
Bear
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016
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Hey there sweet Lady
First of all I love the artwork. It sets the mood for your tremendous poem. You are becoming (in my estimation) the queen of romance poetry here in FS.
I this this is truly a 6 star piece
Bear
Comment Written 18-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016
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Aww Bear, you are such a sweetie :)
Thank you very much for the lovely compliment and the EXCEPTIONAL rating ♥
Missy
Comment from mfowler
Is it the cold?
Is it the rain,
That makes me miss you so? (This is a very good way to begin. Hypotheticals are a powerful device. You could bolster it removing the question mark on line 1 and commencing the second with or. That creates a double-edged question running in one smooth sentence.
You vanished from my life
Without a backward glance.
I'm left with only
Memories of us.
Long walks
Cuddle time
Deep conversation
And
Marathon love-making!
What do I do now?
Forget you?
Move on?
Only time will reveal this answer. (There is something weak about this ending. Maybe the cliche. No, the last two words. See how you've asked three questions in the previous stanza. That implies there are several answers. So simply change it to: Only time will reveal the answers.)
Is it the cold
Or is it the rain,
That makes me miss you so?
You vanished from my life
Without a backward glance.
I'm left with only
Memories of us.
Long walks
Cuddle time
Deep conversation
And
Marathon love-making!
What do I do now?
Forget you?
Move on?
Only time will reveal the answers.
Overall a sweet poem of rejection. The use of the questions and the tightness of your lines are the poem's best technical features.
Another good one, Missy.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016
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Is it the cold?
Is it the rain,
That makes me miss you so? (This is a very good way to begin. Hypotheticals are a powerful device. You could bolster it removing the question mark on line 1 and commencing the second with or. That creates a double-edged question running in one smooth sentence.
You vanished from my life
Without a backward glance.
I'm left with only
Memories of us.
Long walks
Cuddle time
Deep conversation
And
Marathon love-making!
What do I do now?
Forget you?
Move on?
Only time will reveal this answer. (There is something weak about this ending. Maybe the cliche. No, the last two words. See how you've asked three questions in the previous stanza. That implies there are several answers. So simply change it to: Only time will reveal the answers.)
Is it the cold
Or is it the rain,
That makes me miss you so?
You vanished from my life
Without a backward glance.
I'm left with only
Memories of us.
Long walks
Cuddle time
Deep conversation
And
Marathon love-making!
What do I do now?
Forget you?
Move on?
Only time will reveal the answers.
Overall a sweet poem of rejection. The use of the questions and the tightness of your lines are the poem's best technical features.
Another good one, Missy.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016
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I will use the suggestions you offered, Mark.
Thanks a bunch hon.
Missy
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I'll be leaving town for a few weeks so I won't be on air after 26 Jan until about the 15 February.
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Enjoy your time away, Mark. I will miss you :)
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Enjoy your time away, Mark. I will miss you :)
Comment from Jay Squires
Missy, I always feel so sad when I read one of your "love lost" poems. Then I have to remind myself that it's the poetic persona Missy is writing about. Isn't it? Is this autobiographical? C'mon, Missy.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016
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Missy, I always feel so sad when I read one of your "love lost" poems. Then I have to remind myself that it's the poetic persona Missy is writing about. Isn't it? Is this autobiographical? C'mon, Missy.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016
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A lil of both, sugga. Love that was and is no more. :(
Thanks for being a name I always look for. You never disappoint, hon.
Always,
Missy
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Some fundamental questions asked in this question that most of us have asked at some time or another, although probably not quite so poetically as this. Nostalgic and wistful and remorseful.
Nicely penned
G
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016
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Hi there,
Some fundamental questions asked in this question that most of us have asked at some time or another, although probably not quite so poetically as this. Nostalgic and wistful and remorseful.
Nicely penned
G
Comment Written 17-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016
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Hello there G, good to see your name here again :)
Thank you for returning and leaving this lovely review.
Always,
Missy
Comment from MelB
Beautiful artwork to compliment this piece. The heartache and anguish comes through clearly in this one. It's so hard to move on when someone has left us and broken our hearts.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016
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Beautiful artwork to compliment this piece. The heartache and anguish comes through clearly in this one. It's so hard to move on when someone has left us and broken our hearts.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016
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Hello again, Mel. I am rushing to get rated. This is my first year and now I have to start all over, didn't know that...lol
Thank you for leaving me this lovely compliment, :)
Missy
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Hi Missy, you're welcome. I didn't know we had to start over either. I joined last December, so member for a year now. I just got a ranking for poetry, but it drops every day. Now, working on the novelist rank.
Comment from evilynne
Poof? After marathon love making? Oh No! Seriously, your poem is well written and sensuous, well worth reading. The picture is a nice compliment to the work. Evi
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016
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Poof? After marathon love making? Oh No! Seriously, your poem is well written and sensuous, well worth reading. The picture is a nice compliment to the work. Evi
Comment Written 17-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016
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Big ol SMOOCH for you, Evi...ty xx
Missy
Comment from Neonewman
Yes ma'am! I understand all too well Missy! I am sorry for the loss you have to suffer. Well crafted piece of heartbreak you have delivered.
God bless!
Steve
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016
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Yes ma'am! I understand all too well Missy! I am sorry for the loss you have to suffer. Well crafted piece of heartbreak you have delivered.
God bless!
Steve
Comment Written 17-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016
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Wink, Steve.
Thanks for the always uplifting reviews :)
Missy
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Always a pleasure Missy!
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Always a pleasure Missy!
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Missy. It's been so long since I've had the pleasure to read you lovely work mate. I've had little or no internet here for about six months and I've missed you.
This is another beauty my friend. So sad and lonely when it i read. I could feel the confuion and longing in each word. Wish I had a six left for you. Fantastic work.
Happy new year, please stay safe and well.
Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016
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G'day Missy. It's been so long since I've had the pleasure to read you lovely work mate. I've had little or no internet here for about six months and I've missed you.
This is another beauty my friend. So sad and lonely when it i read. I could feel the confuion and longing in each word. Wish I had a six left for you. Fantastic work.
Happy new year, please stay safe and well.
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 16-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016
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Missed you too, you lil "walkabout" Feral from Malanda, you :)
Welcome back.
Thanks for such a lovely review, sweetie. I will gladly take a virtual 6 from you :)
Missy