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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I read this with my eyes as big as saucers and my mouth hanging! Lol, what? Cecil Seasik?? LOL. this was brilliant, so funny, and why isn't there a winning ribbon on it? I can't understand why you haven't won loads of the contests with you hilariously funny short stories. There is so much in this one, I had to read it out to my hubby. Dark humour? You're in the lead for those. I think I liked this one the best so far. Well done! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 06-May-2022
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I read this with my eyes as big as saucers and my mouth hanging! Lol, what? Cecil Seasik?? LOL. this was brilliant, so funny, and why isn't there a winning ribbon on it? I can't understand why you haven't won loads of the contests with you hilariously funny short stories. There is so much in this one, I had to read it out to my hubby. Dark humour? You're in the lead for those. I think I liked this one the best so far. Well done! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 06-May-2022
reply by the author on 06-May-2022
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Thank you, Sandra, for the terrific review of this short story. Yes, it is often very frustrating to be overlooked. One reason that I promoted these again was to see what different people thought.
Comment from Ric Myworld
I guess we could say that it's all about the perspective, but in reality, they can change in an instant. Now, I'm wondering if Cecil's had time. Great story, and good luck. :-)
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2015
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I guess we could say that it's all about the perspective, but in reality, they can change in an instant. Now, I'm wondering if Cecil's had time. Great story, and good luck. :-)
Comment Written 29-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2015
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Thank you, Ric, for giving this a look. Bill
Comment from Dean Kuch
I always appreciate and enjoy the witty and dark humor you inject into your short stories, Bill. This one was no exception.
So many great lines here:
"like a serrated electric carving knife through the jugular vein of a Tijuana prostitute. "
"His glistening green eyes and broad, toothy expression, brightly lit by high-powered flashlights, were both appealing and eerie in light of the grisly milieu."
"a lanky-haired itinerate named Muerte, and the judge were all members of the Tijuana firing squad and were ready to deliver justice right away.
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"Four bullets missed Cecil entirely, but Muerte's shot ventilated Cecil's peaceful and content mind. "
Poor Cecil. He may have been a whack-job but at least he was a smiling whack-job, all the way up to the bitter end...
Always with respect
~Dean
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2015
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I always appreciate and enjoy the witty and dark humor you inject into your short stories, Bill. This one was no exception.
So many great lines here:
"like a serrated electric carving knife through the jugular vein of a Tijuana prostitute. "
"His glistening green eyes and broad, toothy expression, brightly lit by high-powered flashlights, were both appealing and eerie in light of the grisly milieu."
"a lanky-haired itinerate named Muerte, and the judge were all members of the Tijuana firing squad and were ready to deliver justice right away.
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"Four bullets missed Cecil entirely, but Muerte's shot ventilated Cecil's peaceful and content mind. "
Poor Cecil. He may have been a whack-job but at least he was a smiling whack-job, all the way up to the bitter end...
Always with respect
~Dean
Comment Written 26-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2015
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Thank you, Dean, for the kind review and pointing out what works well. Bill
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It's always a pleasure, Bill. You're very welcome.
~Dean
Comment from Jay Squires
What a marvelous piece of flash fiction. It makes me wonder why you don't write more prose, though your poetry stands on its own high merits. You kept the suspense high from the beginning and developed a rising tension until the final two paragraphs.
Great job.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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What a marvelous piece of flash fiction. It makes me wonder why you don't write more prose, though your poetry stands on its own high merits. You kept the suspense high from the beginning and developed a rising tension until the final two paragraphs.
Great job.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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Thank you, Jay, for the kind review. I typically only have thirty minutes to write anything on the site, so I pump out some poems. Today I had some free time so I entered a flash fiction story. Thank you, again for giving this a look.Bill
Comment from TallySally
Not at all what I anticipated from the title, but that just set me up for your story.
Pace was driving. Wanted to keep reading the weirder Cecil got. Kept telling myself, this guy (Cecil, not you) is crazy, but that's just what you were saying. I said, this just isn't real, but know folks like this are 'everywhere' in these times. By the point of the feet, I read on conscious that I was only partly shocked, I was ready for the gore and could look at it. I'm not saying I wanted to look at it, but I didn't stop reading either. Didn't blink an eye over the 'court/conviction/execution. Agreed death did Cecil a favor - peace at last.
Dang, I better make an appointment with my shrink.
:-)
Relda
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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Not at all what I anticipated from the title, but that just set me up for your story.
Pace was driving. Wanted to keep reading the weirder Cecil got. Kept telling myself, this guy (Cecil, not you) is crazy, but that's just what you were saying. I said, this just isn't real, but know folks like this are 'everywhere' in these times. By the point of the feet, I read on conscious that I was only partly shocked, I was ready for the gore and could look at it. I'm not saying I wanted to look at it, but I didn't stop reading either. Didn't blink an eye over the 'court/conviction/execution. Agreed death did Cecil a favor - peace at last.
Dang, I better make an appointment with my shrink.
:-)
Relda
Comment Written 25-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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Thank you, Relda, for the excellent review. I'm glad I could lure you through to the end. I was hoping to lead into the torso murder as unexpectedly as possible. Thanks again for giving this a look. Bill
Comment from mvbrooks
Great story. It captures the narrator and his sense of exaggerating his possible "doom" in lines such as "That car might well be driven by a young woman, distracted by a meme on her smartphone that depicted a dead raccoon with a 'get well' balloon in its cold dead paw." A great balance of reality and hyperbole.
Editing note:
" Those you weren't evaporated by the blast or irradiated beyond survival might well be wandering"
--it seems "those you" should be changed to "those who"
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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Great story. It captures the narrator and his sense of exaggerating his possible "doom" in lines such as "That car might well be driven by a young woman, distracted by a meme on her smartphone that depicted a dead raccoon with a 'get well' balloon in its cold dead paw." A great balance of reality and hyperbole.
Editing note:
" Those you weren't evaporated by the blast or irradiated beyond survival might well be wandering"
--it seems "those you" should be changed to "those who"
Comment Written 25-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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Thank you for the catch, mv, and for giving this a look. Bill
Comment from DLyons
Hi, my Name is Diana, and I really know nothing. I am trying to learn. I enjoyed what I read and would love to see more. I would like to thank you for your service and ask if you have every been stationed in 29 Palms? I lived there for 65 years of my life. Nice to meet you and read your work.
Diana
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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Hi, my Name is Diana, and I really know nothing. I am trying to learn. I enjoyed what I read and would love to see more. I would like to thank you for your service and ask if you have every been stationed in 29 Palms? I lived there for 65 years of my life. Nice to meet you and read your work.
Diana
Comment Written 25-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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Hi Diana,
Thank you for reading this. I spent most of my time on the east coast. I did blow up some real estate with our artillery unit in 29 Palms a couple of times. My son was stationed there for four years between 98 and 02. Welcome to the site. Write what you know, experiment, and say what you think. Happy day. Bill