Comment from Ridley Williams

Excellent

Hello Poet,

I could feel this one, and I related to your thought of capturing words that dart and weave around the edge of consciousness.
Love the picture as it portrays the idea of aggravated concentration.

Best of luck with your entry!
Bill

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2015

Thanks for reading and responding to my work. I was hoping that fellow writers would identify! elaine

Comment from robina1978

Excellent

I knew the photo already and it complements your wee poem perfectly. It is a well written Senryu: with a pen in hand you captured fleeting thought and word. For sixty-six years. Best wishes for the prompt.

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2015

Thanks for reading and responding to my work. I appreciate your comments. elaine

Comment from Nosha17

Excellent

It is rather refreshing to know that other writers have been writing for time immemorial, like me. Must be in the blood. Well chosen words and relate to the message. Good luck in the contest Faye

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2015

Thanks for reading and responding to my work. I hoped that other writers would identify with my message. elaine

Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr

Excellent

Hello poet friend.
I think your poem describes a lot of us. It was short, to the point and a fun read.
Thanks for using my artwork, I am honored.
My best to you, Loyd C. Taylor, Sr.

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2015

Thanks for the great artwork. I think I've used it before, because it's perfect for my thoughts about writing. I appreciate your comments. elaine

reply by Loyd C. Taylor, Sr on 21-Sep-2015

Hello Elaine, you are welcome.
If you have time, I also have may written posts here on Fanstory.com. I would l would be honored to have you drop by. Loyd C. Taylor, Sr.

reply by the author on 28-Dec-2016

Comment from Benjamin Valencia

Excellent

Wow..thats neat if u could capture every fleeting thought..if i did that..i would come to understand that for me..i still wouldnt understand my place in it. Cheers.

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2015

Thanks for reading and responding. I do struggle mightily to capture fleeting thoughts--and I struggle more and more every year!! elaine

Comment from rspoet

Excellent

This is a fine senryu of Yourself for the contest
Many on fanstory will relate to those days
of pen in hand, now it's fingers on keys
But the thoughts are similar and still fleeting
Exact syllables at 4-8-5, 17 total
Great picture with Webster by your side
Well done
Good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2015

Thanks so much for your comments. I appreciate the time you spent reading carefully. I still write with pen in hand before I put my fingers to the keys!! elaine