Christine's Poems
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
These fears are mainly put into our minds by well-meaning people, but they do more damage than if they said nothing. That fear of fork lightning was put into your mind and now it won't go away. You have written a great poem for the storm contest, good luck! xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2015
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These fears are mainly put into our minds by well-meaning people, but they do more damage than if they said nothing. That fear of fork lightning was put into your mind and now it won't go away. You have written a great poem for the storm contest, good luck! xsx Sandra
Comment Written 01-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2015
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Thank you Sandra for your review and comments and good luck message for this poem. I know this fear is at times irrational but I have it and it is so difficult to control especially through a really big electrical storm. However writing about it may help. With appreciation of your time Cheers
Comment from Carole Rosa
To the author of "Storms give me Palpitations". This is a well told complete story within a poem. The entire piece and poetic rhyming words make the entry a winner in my mind. Therefore, my vote is for you. Carole
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2015
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To the author of "Storms give me Palpitations". This is a well told complete story within a poem. The entire piece and poetic rhyming words make the entry a winner in my mind. Therefore, my vote is for you. Carole
Comment Written 01-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2015
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Thank you so much Carole Rosa for your kind review and I am glad you think it worthy . I really appreciate your sentiments Cheers?
Comment from TPAC
Writer has a wonderful selection of items for this work stir, I feel they applied them well, a slight tugging in the beginning but writer release before end a flow of poetic profound structuring
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2015
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Writer has a wonderful selection of items for this work stir, I feel they applied them well, a slight tugging in the beginning but writer release before end a flow of poetic profound structuring
Comment Written 01-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2015
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thanks TPAC for your critique and encouraging review . Once I got started the words just came out . Haven't had any storms lately it was good to release my worries. With thanks and Cheers
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements beautifully. You certainly express your phobia well in this piece. Your rhyme and meter are solid and the imagery from your perspective of fear thoroughly enlists the reader in understanding your terror. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2015
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This meets the contest requirements beautifully. You certainly express your phobia well in this piece. Your rhyme and meter are solid and the imagery from your perspective of fear thoroughly enlists the reader in understanding your terror. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2015
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Thanks Monica for your lovely review and great encouragement. I know this is an irrational fear but I just can't seem to come to terms with being in a storm I did however really love my Grandpa he was a wonderful man. Glad to have shared this with my FS friends Cheers Christine😃
Comment from royowen
It seems to me if you stay inside you can't be hit by forked lightning, on the other hand it would still be unlikely to happen outside either. This is a nicely nicely written open verse poem, it's almost like a story really, but the memory has been planted, a seed of fear, it could be overcome with effort. I guess! Great entry in the contest, an excellent, articulate and a well written,poem, well done, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2015
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It seems to me if you stay inside you can't be hit by forked lightning, on the other hand it would still be unlikely to happen outside either. This is a nicely nicely written open verse poem, it's almost like a story really, but the memory has been planted, a seed of fear, it could be overcome with effort. I guess! Great entry in the contest, an excellent, articulate and a well written,poem, well done, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2015
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Hi Roy your review and comments are much appreciated I am pleased you think this is well written that means a lot. Despite my fear . I loved my Grandpa but I can still remember that day on the verander as if it was yesterday ( 57 years ago) with thanks and cheers Christine😃
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I can still remember sad things said to me too. It has a lasting affect. It was my pleasure. Roy.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I like your first and fourth line rhyme scheme for this poem about your fear of lightning storms. I don't like them and must admit to prefer to be inside when they are around too. I got a good picture of your Nan pulling the blinds and five year old you hiding under the table. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2015
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I like your first and fourth line rhyme scheme for this poem about your fear of lightning storms. I don't like them and must admit to prefer to be inside when they are around too. I got a good picture of your Nan pulling the blinds and five year old you hiding under the table. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2015
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Thank you Pearl glad you liked this style it just seemed to happen like that. And yes this is a life long fear, but still can't help feeling anxious when a storm is luming . I can see my Nan pull the old brown blinds down and I do too lol. With thanks and cheers for reading this. 😃
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Thank you Pearl glad you liked this style it just seemed to happen like that. And yes this is a life long fear, but still can't help feeling anxious when a storm is luming . I can see my Nan pull the old brown blinds down and I do too lol. With thanks and cheers for reading this. 😃
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello anonymous,
I like ~Storms give me Palpitations~ it is about the fear you have of storms, mostly because your grandfather told you the lightning can kill you. Good job!
............Just where this fear comes from, I hear you ask
It stems from one day when a little girl ......... (I think you mean=when I was a little girl)
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2015
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Hello anonymous,
I like ~Storms give me Palpitations~ it is about the fear you have of storms, mostly because your grandfather told you the lightning can kill you. Good job!
............Just where this fear comes from, I hear you ask
It stems from one day when a little girl ......... (I think you mean=when I was a little girl)
Comment Written 01-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2015
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Thank you Gypsy Blue Rose for this review and suggestions. Always appreciated and will make a change. I had difficulty to get the meter right with this line and felt when I was a little girl interrupted the flow so I may just put When as a little girl instead. With thanks and cheers
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Thank you Gypsy Blue Rose for this review and suggestions. Always appreciated and will make a change. I had difficulty to get the meter right with this line and felt when I was a little girl interrupted the flow so I may just put When as a little girl instead. With thanks and cheers
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I thought you did a wonderful job of sharing your fear of poems and why you have that fear. You story telling is terrific. Very well written and enjoyable.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2015
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I thought you did a wonderful job of sharing your fear of poems and why you have that fear. You story telling is terrific. Very well written and enjoyable.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2015
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Thank you very much Michael for your great review and lovely comments for this poem. I appreciate them so much Cheers
Comment from Jackreese
I must be in the minority, but I love storms. I love to watch the sky light up and to hear the thunder crack. All though I can see how it can cause panic in people because lighting can be deadly. Thanks for sharing the memory about your grandfather.
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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2015
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I must be in the minority, but I love storms. I love to watch the sky light up and to hear the thunder crack. All though I can see how it can cause panic in people because lighting can be deadly. Thanks for sharing the memory about your grandfather.
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Comment Written 31-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2015
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Thank you Jack for your review and comments. Although I still have a fear of storms I did love my Grandpa. Great to hear from you Cheers
Comment from TAB_that's me
I'm sorry your grandpa scarred and scared you as a child. Lightning is frightening though and I actually knew someone (a young girl) who got killed by it. Good poem. Hope it does well in the contest.
teresa
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2015
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I'm sorry your grandpa scarred and scared you as a child. Lightning is frightening though and I actually knew someone (a young girl) who got killed by it. Good poem. Hope it does well in the contest.
teresa
Comment Written 31-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2015
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Thanks Tab that's me for reading my poem and although he did scare me I loved him very much and unfortunately he died when I was 10 so only childhood memories now. I have tried to get over it but just can't seem to ever come this fear ( not unfounded as you say I know of a young golfer only 18 was struck and killed too. So I will just keep my blinds down lol. Thanks so much for your review and good wishes cheers